Angels-Symphony

Hey Nouveaux ^^ Shina here for a review ;) napalm-colored eyes Napalm? Is that a shade? too wide, she falters What is too wide? and bursts in airless conflagration; Bursts ...

Hey Meggy ^^ Shina here to do a review for you ;) I. Nitpicks with hopes and dreams of times to never be. I feel that the second line should ...

Hey Pudin ^^ Shina here to do a review ;) I. Nitpicks Look at him and remember his voice This is more of a command when I think you mean ...

Welcome to YWS Amatuli ^^ Shina here for a review ;) damned that cupid "Damned" is past tense. It should be "damn" its not fair *It's, not "its" close my ...

Hey Linnea xD I just feel like calling you "Linnea" for no apparent reason. Shina here fore a review ;) the hills will be drowning , the hills will be ...

Hey Kyllorac ^^ Shina here for a review ;) A glint of silver. A flash of gold. Vibrant red dimmed from violence. Good imagery here, however I'd suggest somehow combining ...

Hey young gun ^^ Shina here for a review ;) He looked at the sky with his only eye With palms folded he began to cry The title and this ...

Hey Kamas ^^ Shina here fore a review;) Author's Note: Inspired from the sadest WWII documentary ever. The footage gave me nightmares. But I wrote this, I know it isn't ...

Hey there, Forever ^^ Shina here for a review as requested ;) Feel free to PM me if you'd like anything else reviewed. I really like the tone you have ...

Hey Peace ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I. Nitpicks Right now I want to die. Kind of a cliche, bland opening. It also needs a comma after "now". ...

Hey Ellie^^ Shina here for a review ;) As promised. I. Nitpicks Closer, closer, closer. Remember what I said about hooks, Ellie. It's the window to your story. It has ...

Hey Panther ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I. Nitpicks Deep in the heart of the jungle, Something moves but it cannot be seen. I'd remove "it". It's redundant. ...

Hey Nadia ^^ Shina here for a review ;) First piece i've put on here :), you guys are all scarily good at writing xD We are flattered. I. Nitpicks ...

Hey Stripes ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I. Nitpicks We hear the bells, No comma needed hear. leap up shrieking to get the door and then "And then" ...

Hey Frag ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I. Nitpicks Revive me when it's over, as for now just let me sleep. Comma after, now, unless that ruins the ...