Anamel

Welcome to YWS! I'll try to be of some help with this review. I'll just get right into it. What I first noticed was the format. I think you would ...

Heya! Doing a review to hopefully be of some help. I guess I'll just get right into it. "Strange, Daniel thought as he trudged up the mountain. Sostrange." No actual ...

Alright, I'll start off with your first paragraph. I think it's not too bad if you introduce her name immediately, though you could also show instead of telling us and ...

Relatable and funny in both ways. I honestly think leaving in that part about weed killer is fine, I can tell that it's just meaning what the teacher is droning ...

When I first was reading this, I wondered if it was a diary/journal of the past. I'm glad you show the readers that this is true a few paragraphs later ...

This poem is a bit confusing, I can see that it has a good premise but I think it can be even better if built upon more. I wonder what ...

At first I was confused because I thought this was a chapter but then I realized it was a shorty story(lol). I like that it's short and quick to read ...

I'd say the story itself is pretty well put together. There's just some grammar mistakes that could be fixed or you happened to pass over and not notice since they ...

Hey, welcome to YWS. I'll try my best to help out with your newest story. I noticed that your first sentence sounds more like a thought of what you're trying ...

This perfectly conveys frustration and how slow and terrible time goes when you're trying to focus and work on something you don't want to do. And especially the feeling of ...

Heya, I was intrigued to see a new first chapter published on here so I thought I'd go ahead and read your story. It's a fairly short read but still ...

I think this was a nice, calming read and also relatable. I agree that death seems more like a rest than anything since it's a release from the physical body ...

Heya, here to review your story and hoping I can be of some help even though I haven't watched Doctor Who. I like it that you started off the beginning ...

I've noticed that you are detailed in some descriptions of your story though some of your sentences have some interrupted flow and grammar errors but that can be easily fixed. ...

Hey, here to possibly help with grammar and maybe some other stuff. Your story has potential and it is a quick read but it could be even better with more ...