Aley

Hey! Welcome to YWS. This is a hard thing to review because, well, the title is Eulogy, and the message is about this friend of the speaker. To me, a ...

Hi PomPom~ First off I'd like to say that this poem really got me thinking about what it was saying. Which was good. I liked that. You didn't hold back ...

Well you've improved already in 2011 from the original few poems to this one. There are some key problems with this poem still, which mainly revolve around a theme I've ...

Hmm... I'm sort of on the fence about this poem because it doesn't have enough description or clarity to really be considered in the depth that it wants to go. ...

AF You've got some inconsistencies in this which really drag it down. This feels like another one of those poems that is all about the puzzle. So here it goes. ...

Hey AF So we're back to drab again. This one doesn't have anything really going for it. I can see that you're starting to get some length into it and ...

This is a good poem. I like this one. Literally I liked this one. I wasn't expecting this, but this is a vast improvement over Hidden. So why I liked ...

Hey AF, I don't think this is a good poem, to be honest. I think we're at honesty right? I can't really find anything to compliment the poem on, but ...

Hey AF, Aley here again. At first I thought this was something of a children's dream because of the wording and the way that the story comes around. "Crawling off ...

Hey AF! So overall the this poem seems to be trying to take a deeper look at an aspect of humanity that not many people look at, bodies after they're ...

Hey WindSailor, I thought I'd stop by and give this a review since it was in the Green Room and things are getting so hectic in there! I think the ...

Hello! Just so you know, I have no idea who any of these people are. That being said, I have a really good perspective on how to review this in ...

Hello~ As I haven't read the other chapters I'm going to be focusing on nitpicks. Overall I really like how you have developed the different cultures and you've worked on ...

You have a really good plan here using the green to balance with the red color of the bird. It's a good idea for the design. One of the things ...

Hello~ Aley here First thing I'd like to say is that you use repetition well, and I like that you're not trying to use a rhyme scheme or make this ...