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Hey EmmaKi, Here for a quick review of your writing style in general for prose because I haven't read any of the previous chapters. I'd like to start by saying ...

Hey! Really great emotional content in this piece. I can really see where you're coming from, and I feel like you've laid out this poem in a very convincing essay-style ...

Hey Spartain118, I think it's really nice to hear you writing such an honest poem. You can tell this is written from the heart because you're focusing so heavily on ...

Hey fangirldivergent46, I have a lot of respect for the ability you've shown to write and actually say what you want to say. It's really nice to see that you ...

Hey Steggy, So I picked this one. Overall I really like the voice you're using, but I think you do need to go backwards a bit. There's a pendulum in ...

Hey Alice, This is really good, you have a nice tone in the poem, it's very vivid and easy to feel. I really like how you equip this poem with ...

Hello fangirldivergent46, So I'm going to have to disagree with TZH. I think what you do well in the poem is setting up the metaphor for us to follow. You ...

Hey JoytheBrave, I feel like the idea of this poem is good, but you're working in a very constrained environment. While you're trying to say something dramatic and unique, you're ...

Hello Autopilot, I think this poem has two parts to it so I'm going to address them both. You said you wrote this a month ago, but it's something that ...

Hey FeatherPen, I really think you have good work on rhyming and your structure to this poem abcb is really nicely done. I think your rhyming is very good for ...

Hey Ark, So overall I think this poem/song doesn't have as much of a purpose as it should. It gets better near the end, and I can really pick up ...

Hey Glauke, Per your request I came and read this poem, this one has much better handling of lines, but you've lost some of the weight of the previous poem ...

Hey Glauke, I like this poem [look, proof, I liked it.] I think your flow is very well thought out, your development of your lines is well done, and you've ...

Hey Stranger, This poem was a bit off for me. It felt like the stanzas were disjointed because you hopped from thing to thing so fast. If you look at ...

Hey TZH, Overall I think you've got a good structure for line breaks. You don't really need any help with that and I'm not sure about stanzas because, well, this ...