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Hey ashleysweeney! Well, let me start off by saying I liked this. But, since there wasn't much to work with, this may sound like I'm being overly picky. However, I ...

Hey Smexay! Well, this piece was a tad confusing, but I still liked it -- especially the twist at the end! Frankly, I usually can't stand reading present-time stories, but ...

Just as a quick once-over, it was interesting. But it seems like you switch tenses throughout the paragraphs. It starts with past tense: I laid my newly bought pages on ...

Wow. That's virtually all I can come up with at the moment: wow. I really couldn't find anything wrong with it in the spelling section, and I was a little ...

Hey Skins, I saw your story and thought I'd drop by for a review. So, down to business, shall we? Damien was sat in his high-chair, crying like usual. A ...

Okay, here’s that review, as requested :) sorry it took so long! My life’s been kinda hectic lately, so now’s the only chance I’ve got to review :) (I hope ...

Okay, the first time I tried to do this, my dad decided it would be fun to mess around with the Internet, so the whole thing got deleted. Well, here's ...

Hey forgottenfallen! Sorry about slacking off and not getting around to reviewing your stuff. :( But, I guess doing them out of order will just have to work :P Anyway, ...

Hey forgottenfallen, here's the review you asked for! Hope I can help at least a little :) Her lush white (lush? When I think of lush, I think of soft. ...

Hey forgottenfallen, sorry I didn't review sooner. Let's see... the air got more dry with every step. I'd change to 'the air grew drier with every step.' You use 'tiresome' ...

Hey again forgottenfallen! Ready for a review? Well, ready or not, here it comes! :P Okay, again with the paragraphs! I can't tell you how important paragraphs are! I'm going ...

Hey forgottenfallen, welcome to YWS! So, shall we get down to business? Well, there is one problem absolutely anyone on here will point out: you need paragraphs! Don't cram it ...

Hey, I liked it. I only found one part hat I really didn't like: "I stayed huddled within the shelter of the tiny shelter," just doesn't make sense. I know ...

I really liked this prologue, it's one of the better ones I've read! Although it's a tad short, there's only two things I have a problem with. For though we ...

I really loved this idea. On one hand, it's got a familiar feel, while on the other hand, it's definately unique in its own way. However, go back to where ...