AdamBH

This is a beautiful poem. It seemed a little bit ranty though, and this is not because it actually is, but because this is a piece of prose split into ...

I like this story very much. It's a really cool idea. However, I felt like you explained the themes and spelled them out to the reader rather than allowing them ...

I really liked this poem, it's very intelligent and I particularly liked the rhyme scheme and how you break it in the end by moving the couplet up a line. ...

Go Wicca! hahaha. I'm not a wiccan but I was for a short while and I still have a great love and respect for it and kudos for being so ...

I like the general feel of happiness and the colloquialism of the apostrophes is very friendly and makes the piece quite happy to read. I don't know about the last ...

There's darkness where the light seeks It spills over the warmth I love this line Tears it away and consumes it whole, Leaving only bitterness I softly cry with a ...

Wow! That's deep! I loved it although it took me two reads to get it. Is 'she' 'you'? If so I love how you used that almost jealousy of yourself, ...

I agree with Kimalane on the nit-picks. I think it's MUCH better now :D. However, I think there's a sort of message and it's repeated in different ways throughout the ...

I like your concept, but as I have said several times today already, use imagery and make it shorter. It seems like you are droning on a little too much ...

I don't understand what you mean to put as the message of this poem. I think it's interesting how you seem to blend in reality with fiction. Why are you ...

I love your poem, but i think you could definitely use some imagery to make it more emotional. Then we'll talk XD. But your technique is very good, in my ...

I think you need first of all to make the syllable count regular on each line - that would make it sound a million times better, and you can do ...

I don't really understand what the message of this poem is. You describe an earthquake quite at face value, and then the last line begins to be emotional, but the ...

I like this poem very much! I thought that the repeated stanza was a little bit off-throwing, and so was the change of rhythm in the end. Overall, very nice, ...

Ooooh blueberry pieee :O (Just a quick reply to your message before I start, Tatiana is my favouritre character too along with Hanna. XD The Tatiana-Hanna subplot is also my ...