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Wow!!!! You don't know how much I can relate to this!!! I enjoyed reading this very much. Although, I do agree with the other comments, I think the poem could have used more details, more emotions, and it could have been a bit longer.
I noticed that in the third stanza, you used "off" twice. Maybe you can think of another word to replace "off", since it comes at the end of both lines. I think that, you could have added some commas, and periods. For instance in the first stanza....
I'll never forget how much I loved you;
I'll never forget how much I cared.
I'll never forget how special I felt
Whenever I saw that you were there.
My favorite lines are:
I'll never forget how special I felt
Whenever I saw that you were there.
Please keep writing, and expressing your emotions!
thanks guys! I did try and make it flow better but found it was quite dificult haha :$ thanx for the comments!
your poem is fantastic i love it!
there are a couple of parts that don’t flow and nicely as the rest but other than that is was great
i personally like the first 4 lines best
keep up the good work :]
I love your poem, but i think you could definitely use some imagery to make it more emotional. Then we'll talk XD. But your technique is very good, in my opinion. Keep writing!