haha, thanks guys. I'll try and do that on my next poem i make. I'm glad you liked it

Such a beautiful poem. you're so sweet to write this lovely poem dedicating it to a special friend in need of a good companionship.

I like your concept, but as I have said several times today already, use imagery and make it shorter. It seems like you are droning on a little too much without making it emotional, so try to do that. You could write a sonnet for this - that could be really interesting. And since this boy seems to be quite mysterious and intriguing you could probable use many very imacting metaphors to make something very romantic and exciting out of this DO IT!!

Also, work on your rhythm - the last line of each stanza didn't quite seem to work with the flow. Watch that