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quite a few English mistakes but that can be easily put right... The body of a dead Dark Elf layed behind him, ^ i think this should be "lay behind ...

"On Earth you must be covered, for it is not proper to be seen in you natural form in thier society." the ball replied. *your instead of you *their instead ...

(scarily enough i also know a lewis like that.... 0.o) i suppose, like emz already said, it didn't really come as too much of a shock because it fit so ...

Perrin is one of my favourite characters but i've barely seen him in the 5th and 6th books. so far i'm about 300 pages from the end of book 6. ...

i thought this was beautiful, but sad at the same time. I especially like the reference to Moses. i'm a christian so i know the story pretty well - correct ...

wow i like this its got very pretty imagery. its weird cause it seems quite pretty, almost flowery in some places but it talks about suicide etc. just one thing: ...

well the grammar needs a lot of work but with the correct changes, i think this could be very good if this is put right. umm lets see... You shield ...

i like the overall idea of this poem a lot. however, there are a few points i feel i have to raise here: first of all, i don't really get ...

wow the shameless bump worked. this is great, though i much prefer the second one. here are my favourite bits: Stay friends? I wouldn’t mind. and as so many people ...

well this is def a haiku and i like the imagery a lot but i prefer it when the sentences don't go over more than one line - that's just ...

if the rest of your stuff is half this good, im def going to have to check it out! this is great, i really can't find fault with any of ...

don't really like the title so much myself. the actual poem however is much better! :) before i say anything, i'd like to ask: what do these words mean; 'accrued' ...

i don't do music genres very well but this sounds sorta emo. is it meant to be like that or is it just me? i like how all the verses ...

this is great. i find it quite hard to crit lyrics though when you can't hear the music, but i get the general idea. this is my favourite part: Tell ...

aaaaagggggghhhhhhh!!! you killed me!? oh no! oh no! aaagghhhh! ummm this was interesting, im just hoping you werent talking about me... i like the bit about the goose and the ...