-KayJuran-

thats really sad! i cant believe he died!!! seriously though, i liked it a lot. ok so there were quite a few improvements needed (spelling for a start!) but he's ...

i think it could work being short or long. but it would be interesting if you tried to expand this and make the 'story' a bit more detailed, just to ...

only read bobo's so far but i have just printed this off and will get back to you!! from what i have seen though, it looks like a great story! ...

this is really emotional, very deep... it really touched me and (as midnight also sed) that isnt always something that happens... the imagery is good but i cant say anything ...

i like all of the imagery especially with the rythem in the poem but i dont understand entirely what it is about... maybe once ive read it a few times ...

noise [noize] just noise don’t mean nothing it don’t mean nothing i must admit i dont like this as much as the rest of it - i also dont get ...

when i first saw the title i thought maybe you had spelt it wrong or something but i get it now... first i gotta say this is such a strange ...

you like to hide behind curtains of greasy spilt end hairs i think here you meant 'split' - correct me if im wrong here... and watch the world through a ...

i agree with ^ wanna should be changed to 'want to', not just because its not correct - mainly cause its not consistant. yeah so some of this is a ...

But listen to her, just right now, "It wasn't like a spankin', I believe I was abused, most definately, More than you could ever Imagine." i agree im afraid... main ...

like nickelpickle, i havent seen any of your other stuff either so i cant compare... however after reading this i already think you must be pretty good at poetry - ...

hey i love this! ok so it needs one or two things changed... PLEASE change the '&'s to 'And's! but overall this was nice and it flowed quite well. i ...

hey! i think i remember this from daniel's site! anyway i love this poem! i have a copy of this somewhere cause i liked it so much i printed it ...

An oasis of hope for a thirsty soul. ^ this part really is a beautiful image... i love it! Like a butterfly suspended on a petal. Outside, eyes pricked for ...

i think i can see why this is called abstract! lol anyways i really love this poem... its got the feeling of something that you see published in a book ...