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A Bomb in Oman

by tigeraye


I don't see you sitting atop your rain cloud
I stick my ear to the sun
And I don't hear a sound
How do you expect me to listen to you
When the children beside me are starving
And my bones are starting to shatter
And yet you don't make a sound!

So, come
Come to the warzone
Come see what your silence causes
The blood of your actionless quiet is present
In the form of a salt-lacened tear
Death the beginning, death as the end, it doesn't matter
It hurts all the same

My mother was a surgeon
A master of her craft
You couldn't count the number of lives that she saved
The people she helped, the days she made
But she was also agnostic
Does that mean she's going to rot in hell?

So, come
Come to the warzone
Come see what your silence causes
The blood of your actionless quiet is present
In the form of a salt-lacened tear
Death the beginning, death as the end, it doesn't matter
It hurts all the same

A bomb went off in Oman today
Killed all the poor and their children in the market
They say you could taste their blood for miles and miles
As the one who planted the bomb runs behind the alley
He closes his eyes and he asks you to forgive him
Then he pulls a gun from his pocket, shoots himself in the temple
Is he going to sip wine with Jesus
While the devil burns my mother's flesh?

I'm going to whine about the people who don't care
And you're going to complain about the people who do
Now excuse me while I close my eyes and talk to an invisible man
Who I barely understand!

So, come
Come to the warzone
Come see what your silence causes
The blood of your actionless quiet is present
In the form of a salt-lacened tear
Death the beginning, death as the end, it doesn't matter
It hurts all the same


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Mon Sep 11, 2017 3:53 pm
wetumbrella5 says...



so true so sad . i am sorry to read this . anyway ur realism is ok. i loved ur piece of work. good luck




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Sun Jul 23, 2017 8:15 pm
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This is absolutely amazing, this is a piece of art that can only be done by a true artist in the making. I can imagine this coming on the radio, and the heart, your heart bursting out. This is a wonderful story and a question in 7 verses. Personally I want to know what kind of song this goes to, like a rap, or a rock, blues, or jazz (there is a difference,) but it in my opinion could go to any of these but who knows. I look forward to reading more of these because these are beautiful, a song with this kind of heart is what breaks hearts and makes the tearless weep for days, so please keep working keeping writing my przyjaciel, (the polish word for friend,) you are a true treasure, that has yet to show its full glory.




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Sun Jul 23, 2017 6:54 pm
LeutnantSchweinehund wrote a review...



Oh, interesting! Very interesting!

A very pleasant change from all this love poetry. I thoroughly enjoy poems about darker, more serious topics, such as war, death, misery, religion and philosophy.

It doesn't really flow like I imagine a poem should, and that's something that bothers me with a whole lot of poetry, but it didn't hurt your work all that much.

I don't really understand one part though. So the bomber (I think, had you made him a suicide bomber, it'd provide an even more powerful contrast) begs Jesus or Allah for forgiveness? It's in Oman, and I imagine most suicide bombers probably don't worship Jesus, so you have me confused.

Also, you didn't really clarify why the mother burns in hell. Is she a Muslim, therefore a heathen in the eyes of God? If so, why is the suicide bomber granted free access to heaven?

I'm not religious, so there's that, but I'd love to know what you meant by these things.





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