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Why must I keep smiling?

by thetraveler


Why must I keep smiling
When the day is so grey?
Why must I keep my chin up
When my joy has gone away?

Why must my eyes stay dehydrated
When I just need to cry?
Why must my back be straight
When I just really want to die?

Ah there is an answer
It's as simple as can be
I must keep my head up
For both you and me!

We're all in this together
and I know I'm not the best
But I'll give my biggest effort
And I'll try my absolute hardest

Now that I decided to try
I'll hope you do the same
Because without the "U" in "us"
Life's a losing game!

So keep your head up darling
Let nothing you dismay
Remember we're together in this
And be hopeful today!


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Tue Feb 14, 2012 3:47 am
heather321 says...



I really liked you poem! It's very optimistic and perfect for bad days. Though i do have to admit a few of the lines are kind of cliche... another thing, it's just a personal opinion, but i think exclamations usually make poems seem cheesy, especially more than one(but again-just a personal opinion) but overall this poem's really nice and sweet and i loved it.




thetraveler says...


Thanks! I thought people would complain about it being too sappy and innocent but not so far so thank you!



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Fri Feb 10, 2012 12:20 am



You are much better than I am as a person.
People tend to think of me as the "Eternal Pessimist". But whatever.
It's a decent poem, not one of my favourite things I've ever read... but nice. I like the start, because it does show that you could just give up and choose not to smile, etc... but you do. And that's why I admire you.




thetraveler says...


That's about the nicest thing I've heard all day!!!
I just made this up on the spot and you think it good! I'm quite happy right now!
Also, even though it's been a while, you're an awesome person!
Happy Birthday dear friend :)



thetraveler says...


That's about the nicest thing I've heard all day!!!
I just made this up on the spot and you think it good! I'm quite happy right now!
Also, even though it's been a while, you're an awesome person!
Happy Birthday dear friend :)



thetraveler says...


That's about the nicest thing I've heard all day!!!
I just made this up on the spot and you think it good! I'm quite happy right now!
Also, even though it's been a while, you're an awesome person!
Happy Birthday dear friend :)



thetraveler says...


That's about the nicest thing I've heard all day!!!
I just made this up on the spot and you think it good! I'm quite happy right now!
Also, even though it's been a while, you're an awesome person!
Happy Birthday dear friend :)



thetraveler says...


That's about the nicest thing I've heard all day!!!
I just made this up on the spot and you think it good! I'm quite happy right now!
Also, even though it's been a while, you're an awesome person!
Happy Birthday dear friend :)





...thanks.



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This sounds like what a modern day Annie cheerleader would chant. You know, "keep your chin up, for tomorrow...etc.". I liked how optimistic this poem was and the meaning behind it: sure, sometimes life isn't always going the best for us, but we can keep persevering for those around us. Parts of the rhyme here felt forced. Line 4 really annoyed me, perhaps it's just a pet peeve? Also, when you write poetry and punctuate it, it should be like punctuating a normal paragraph. I.g. "Ah, there is an answer; it's as simple as can be. I must keep my head up, for both you and me!" You just press the enter key to separate them. Great cheer! Happy Writing!

-Crescent




thetraveler says...


Thanks Crescent! I agree;my puntuation needs improvement...




Anger is an acid that can do more harm to the vessel in which it is stored than to anything on which it is poured.
— Mark Twain