Hey, Sky! GooseLuck here to do a review for you! So, let's take flight, shall we?
The first thing I noticed about this was the no name for the title, and I felt like that was a good add in on the poem considering what is going on in the poem, but let's see here.
The first line, genius is my opinion. It really does give of the vibe of suicide, but that's not what the poem is about, is it? It's about your life, your hoped and your dreams. Everything that makes you, you is hung in there, and you pretty much just shut the door on it. Anyway, onward.
The next thing about this is the second line, which I didn't enjoy that much. Instead of saying,"slung on one hanger," you could just say,"slung on a hanger." The other way makes it seem as if you're going to be describing something else on another hanger, but instead you move on to the floor and I don't like that transition as good. Anyway, onward.
One thing I'll have to agree with lumi on is that I do not like the hard stops, and I would suggest you read this aloud sometime and try to get a feel of how you want it to be, or need it to be.
Overall I like this one, and it's not as long as your other ones so that was refreshing. If you ever need or want to talk poetry, hit me up bb.
Anyway, I think that's all I have to say on this one, and I hope it helped.
Keep on doing what you're doing and keep on keeping on.
Sincerely, GooseLuck.
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