Young Writers Society

Hey there, sound! Arden here to leave you a review.
Let's jump right into it!
(Also, unfortunately, the link to your song didn't work . I'm sure you sang it fantastically, though!)

Here in the deep
Where dragons sleep
Something is
Stirring

These first few lines intrigued me. They were a good hook to the song. I did kind of question "where dragons sleep", as dragons are usually depicted as creatures that prefer living in the air, and seeing one underground is unusual, but in a good way!
Even though this bit is simple, I can imagine this place quite vividly with the information you've given me. Good work!

Come face your fears
Frozen in tears

I really found this interesting as well. It seems that this "lair" holds secrets-secrets that would rather be kept hidden by those pocessing them. I interpreted "frozen" as what we do when we try to forget our troubles and fears-bury them and try to banish them from our consious, offen too afraid to come face to face with them.
I also loved the "tears" addition. Not only is the flow fantastic, but it's also another method of painfully dealing what we're afraid of—crying and pouring your heart out, only to have to shut the feelings away again soon after. Our fears are simply things that stab at the back of our minds; always, annoyingly enough, there. I'm finding so much to branch off from with your writing and I absolutely love it!

Look at the rage
Silently caged
Everyone’s
Yearning
What’s just in your eyes?
Light up the skies
Everyone’s
Burning

This is so fantastic. I'm honestly in love with your writing.
I really like the "rage, silently caged." It kind of further elaborates on my last point, which made me happy. I'm glad my interpertation was somewhat correct, but one thing I really enjoyed was that there could have been a lot of other possibilites. That's really important, to let the reader explore. The fact that you clarified it a bit here is good, too. You've got closure.

Can you see the truth
Deep within you?
Something’s
Discerning

It seems our character's battling something—the fears and rage they may keep locked up inside. Something's telling him to face his problems. The song seems to almost climax here. I really like the "uncovering of the truth" that you're incorporating into the character's fight. I can feel the tension rising and I like it.

This a really, really good piece. You're a fantastic author! I really look forward to seeing more from you in the future.
Thanks for sharing,

Arden