Hey there! This was a really interesting poem to read! I really liked all the imagery that came out of describing people like different parts of the earth. I was also curious about how you structured it with the verses moving across the screen. Was that on purpose or just how it ended up being formatted?
One critique I have was in the lines "people are moldable / terracotta even though I don't / know what that means". As far as I know, (and I may be wrong) terracotta, especially after it's baked, isn't moldable. Also, following it with the next line "they don't have a melting point" makes it especially confusing because terracotta definitely does have a melting point. According to thepotterywheel.com, "Because terracotta contains iron and other fluxing ingredients, it will melt at a lower temperature than stoneware or porcelain." I don't mean to contradict your verses there, since I absolutely love the idea that humans are these unique, always fighting creatures that never break. However, I would recommend switching it out with something that fits your description a little better.
Other than that, I don't really have any critiques! I really loved your last line of "I'm no hero I just think / earthy people like us should / be mindful and clasp our muddy hands / and help each other breathe" because it has such a peaceful and poetic ending that I feel really encapsulates the message of the poem.
Overall, great job! I can't wait to see what you write next!
Points: 74
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