Hello there!
I will be reviewing for you tonight.. I'm not a poet myself, so I can't offer you much expertees, but I can tell you what I found good or less good.
First off, the title. I must say, it intrigued me at the first glance, and I was thrilled to see it was not a metaphor. I don't read much poetry, but I haven't came across this kind of poem so far, and I like to like my firsts xD
I grow fond of the Cane, as if it's a person, a character in a story, someone I might talk to. I love the words you used, the style figures, and the way you seemed to get into Cane's character, not quite giving it emotions yet making the readers sympathetic towards it, huh.
Decorated with feathers,
It is a rite of passage.
A weapon of aggression.
An escort for protection.
This is by far my favourite part.
It flows so nicely, last two lines especially, and it gave me this certain feeling, kind of dark and not quite describable, huh. I like getting undescribable feelings form the poems I read, though, that usually means that I liked them enough to write a praising review such as this one.
Well, this was short compared to how I usually review, yet I hope it helped at least a little. I liked the poem very much, the idea itself and the way you put it, the imagery you used and the style of whole together. So, as I know you will, keep writing :3
Kind regards,
Aria~
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