I won’t tell you everything, at least not all the details. And I won’t say where I’m from either. You’re free to guess, of course, but just when you think you’ve figured it out, you’ll notice another detail. One that will send your hypothesis tumbling to the ground. I’m sure I’ll slip up at some point, so maybe you’ll guess correctly. It’s no use googling me either. None of these names are real, in part because there are better ones and in part because I don’t want to be found. In this town, I live my life in the spotlight, and I hate it. But the stories are true.
I’m in my second year at Uni. I could be done next year, but I changed to a dual degree last term, so now I have two more years left instead. I went in for a journalism degree at first. Wouldn’t have been my first choice, but good enough I suppose. I got really bored with it last semester, when I had to take a class on media law and copyright law. I was considering a marketing degree instead and after another miserable weekend of homework, I felt dead inside. Art was the one thing that I truly love, always have. So I decided to get into the art program. I started too late for it to be what I wanted. All the jobs I want need a BFA, but it’d be five years to finish instead of three, so I’m just getting a BA instead. Still an extra year, but at least I won’t be miles behind everyone else.
Dinner at the canteen was barely edible, for me at least. I live in halls still, and don’t have a kitchen. I can’t eat dairy and am allergic to eggs, so that ruled out a lot of the options. In the end I had couscous, a pork chop, and a bowl of kale. I also had a coconut mound bar, which gave me stomach pain, as I knew it would. Living in halls is lonely. I’m the only second year on my floor and most of my friends live off campus in a house together. But I didn’t have any friends to rent with, and I don’t cause trouble and I got full-funding so it seemed silly to live elsewhere. I’ll probably live in halls again next year. My friend lives on a different floor in halls, but we’re in the same building. He also got full-funding. Maybe we would have gotten a place together next year, but we aren’t good friends anymore. Or at least I know we’re not, he hasn’t figured that out yet. I guess that’s a story for next post.
So I guess I’ll see you next week? I’d like to share a bit more if you’d like to listen. And you can guess where I’m from in the comments.
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Top Graham Cracker - From what I can tell, this story is like a blog and you are talking about your life. It seems normal, but I have a sense that more things are to come later on.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, then you may.
Chocolate Bar - I love how this feels like you’re actually talking to us, the readers. The style of this writing is immersive, it really hooked me into it. My favorite part is the beginning when you’re saying that you’ll keep things away from us but saying we can search on goggle. Like inviting us to know more but not explicitly saying anything. I thought that was really interesting.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, this was a good first chapter! I think I will get to reading the other chapters day by day and watch as the story progresses. I’m intrigued to read this narrative and…
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Hey there! Just wanted to pop by a leave a quick review!
Honestly, I adore your writing style so much. You have such a unique way of words that really grabs the reader's attention and keeps them captivated throughout the story. You described your everyday life as you went through your daily activities so creatively that it never seemed boring at all; I was so invested lol! The overall vibe this chapter gives off is so so interesting and I was immediately drawn to it whilst scrolling through the green room! I can not wait to see what else you write, and I am looking forward to any future chapters you have planned! Keep up the amazing work! ^^
- Bella
Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words. If you have any feedback or suggestions on how I can improve my writing in future chapters, let me know!
This reminded me a of a Jane Austen novel. Your prose was interspersed with many of those short observations that I associate with her style. A little witty and biting in some places. Overall this reads like a journal entry so I hope you can find some solace in writing about your days.
Reading this feels like reading a diary of someone, who really knows how to write a great entries - whether it's fictional or actually your real life (which is vibe I got from this),I could really dive into reading this. You really know how to catch a reader's eye and I can't wait to see more from you around the page!
Also - welcome to YWS! I hope you'll enjoy your time here
Thanks NovemberCrow! I'll try to update it at least weekly, and I hope you read more.