Well, you sure like to ask a lot of questions! Haha
So, for some odd reason, I decided to read this piece a loud. Why is because if a poem is longer, I've acknowledged that I normally can't retain the entire thing by just reading it in my head. Thus, I read out loud.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this. I prefer when poems are more serious and get the reader thinking about something that's actually meaningful, as you've done pretty nicely. I like the way you set up the poem, overall it was easy to follow, and had a steady flow. I will admit every now and again I'd find myself stumbling, but I credit that more to how fast I read it. I tend to read more serious poems at a fast meter, and since there isn't a rhyming meter here, it tends to move even faster.
Now, I commend you on the fact that you did such a poem in free-verse. I normally review free-verse poetry, because as the name suggests, you have a lot more freedom with a work by not keeping to the rhyming stigma, so how a piece is presented can have numerous results. The fact that you were able to establish such a steady meter is impressive, so I hope you keep going about the structure in the same way, because you seem to understand what you are doing.
In terms of the actual story in this poem, I will answer it. I myself have had many similar thoughts as of lately due to certain events in my life. Good for you, your poem is relatable.
Anyway, in terms of happiness, madness, and the question of individual importance, it isn't good to only search the dark thoughts that cross the mind. While yes, they are easier to find, they aren't the force you should be focused on. Happiness is something you find within yourself, and those you involve yourself with. The fact that such dark thoughts are in the mind are proof that you'd know happiness, because you wouldn't know what was happy or depressing if you hadn't experienced it before. Each person knows madness, and in some aspects, everyone is mad. We as humans just know how to control it before it has the chance to be released. And individual importance, it's better to stay and try to live a better day than the previous, and to try to melt away the frozen depths by planting a new dream in your mind.
Stay positive. I love this piece and hope to see more.
Keep writing!
~Maddie
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