For All It Can Be

At first, this poem makes me feel upset and seperated from everything. It makes me feel alone and as if i were nothing, but as it progressed it started to lighten my mood and the final line "all it was- was everything; hope for dusk till dawn" made me seem m,ore hopeful, yet still slightly negative. I think the poem flowed well and was set up in a clever way. I also thought that "all it was-was destined to whither with timely fall" was a very powerful, though negative line. It was by far my favourite part of the poem and i though you did really well with this one. Good job, and keep it up.

I don't usually read poetry, so you probably shouldn't take what I say to heart, but I liked this poem.
It's true the lack of punctuation did turn me off a bit but seeing how short the poem was I decided it wouldn't hurt to read it through. And at least I can say I wasn't disappointed. It was a nice poem with a nice flow to it and even someone like me, whose not a poetry enthusiast, could follow it.
So good job and keep up the good work! I'll check out some of your other posts when I get the chance!

I thought this was about broken or not achieved dreams... But now I doubt. I didn't really get it ^_^ But it reminded my of my mistakes. We make so much mistakes, and if not- we're just lucky.


Rhyming is cool, but not too cool. also appearance is little bit .. you know, ugly ^_^


But I felt emotion, the bad one -_-

Try more constructive way.

Hi there.

The appearance makes it difficult for the reader to actually want to read, for it lacks punctuation and capitalization, and that makes most people lazy. It'd be a shame if someone sees it without reading and just closes the tab, because this is one beautiful poem<3 It flows neatly and the wording is lovely. Congratulations on that.

Now, now.... I'm going to show you how I'd do it, you either take it or leave it, it's fine. Just suggestions.