This made me cry the first time I read it. You did a really good job on this piece! I loved how your writing created a picture in my head, especially when you say, "I'll show you how they embrace the darkness, how they are at once apart and together." I don't have a lot to say... But I do think a way to spice up your piece, maybe add some personification. You know, like to add some imagery, but you already added imagery, so it is definitely not necessary in your simple, yet exotic writing style. Anyways, that's really all I have for you! I hope to read more of your pieces soon! Happy Writings, and Great Job!! 'Tato out...
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