Young Writers Society

This is a great poem.

it holds an optimistic view on how falling in love or being in love feels like. I love how this implies that life is gray, an empty canvas until that one person comes along, like that person was the match that lit your flame (ugh i'm too sappy).

"it’s all just a blur of color, vibrant saturated color", i like how you continue to explain the 'blur of color' in the next line, it gives nice imagery, though if i understand correctly, you're stating that the colors are vibrant and pure BEfore the person comes into your life....and that's kind of contrasting to the theme of the poem, don't you think?

"you repeat yourself for eternity
whispering ‘you’re OK’"
So these lines are easily my favorite. I love how this gives us the promise of forever, of the person you love supporting you, guiding you and being with you, 'till death do us part'.

i got a little confused at the next line, though: "whispering ‘you’re ok,' but i hear muffled speech". so this is again my brain saying 'that's contradicting' because the words of the person you love should be clear, right? unless of course, that's not what you meant.

this is lovely though, i mostly get what you mean, and i hope love feels like this.

Hey! This is quite an interesting poem! I love how you portray being lovesick- "a burning sensation", "i can’t tell anything apart/it’s all just a blur of color/vibrant saturated color". I do struggle with trying to comprehend "that’s why i couldn’t see you/or hear you/or feel you/that’s why/i hide", as it was after the "soulmate" reaches out and "and the world makes sense". I assume that you mean that love is making you hide, but I had to re-read the last few lines multiple times to come to that conclusion. Other than that, I enjoyed the poem.