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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: A wonderful chapter as always. Some action creeping back in right away I see...I was expecting one more chapter of calm, but it seems that won't be the case. We've got some very intense stuff happening already and I do really like where this is going at the moment.
Anyway let's get right to it,
By the time we finished our voyage, Hasda had a handle on his new underwater breathing. It still took him a bit transitioning between habitats, especially coming out of the water, but he wasn’t flailing like he was drowning or trying to retch his lungs out anymore. Malia had prowled the depths every practice session and had never been needed, neither to fight off derketo nor rescue Hasda. She’d been cranky about not being able to trace the derketo’s movements. While I shared her frustration, it made me more concerned because if they weren’t tracking us, what were they doing?
We still didn’t have any answers by the time we reached our destination. The sylvan shores of Ibithia peppered the horizon, the lumpy canopy looming with vague foreboding. Despite being unreachable by maas, Ibithia had presented no obstacles for our sea-bound arrival, and none of the gods aboard reported feeling any resistance as we neared the coast. Landfall and unloading also went without a hitch, leaving Malia and I to trail Hasda inland and ponder the strange situation.
Okayy...well, things are going smoothly for them and it seems that is proving to be a bit strange and unsettling, not surprising considering how many problems are going on at the moment. Well, let's see how this one turns out I suppose. It can't be too bad in this chapter although I'm assuming things will escalate pretty soon once we get to the part where the trial can begin proper with the Hydra.
Before long, it grew dark. Unnaturally so. We’d arrived mid-morning and had been chasing Hasda barely an hour, and yet the forest had gone dusky dark. Cicadas droned around us, their rattling constant and disorienting. The air grew muggy, slathering us with the rich scent of loam. We heard no birds and saw no animals. Whatever path Hasda followed wasn’t clear to us, but he moved with certainty.
Malia flared her wings as we crossed a gully. “Do you feel that?”
“Feel what?” Dirt scrabbled down the incline behind us as we landed on the other side. I glanced down and watched the clods tumble onto the decomposing leaves below. Outside of Hasda’s erratic yet strangely controlled behavior, nothing felt off to me.
Malia narrowed her eyes at Hasda’s vanishing back and pushed a breath through her nose. “Forest magic.”
“What kind?” I followed as she slithered ahead.
Hmm, well unnatural darkness has always been a harbinger of some serious doom, so I am not surprised at how this is shaping up here. It appears that we've got ourselves a potentially dangerous situation here. With the title of this chapter any magic remotely related to Forest is definitely some sort of bad news, or at least something that will affect this plot in some way.
Still water rippled as my footsteps disturbed the glassy surface. A hazy fog, like the blur of the distant edge of my vision, ringed me in. If I stretched out my arms, my fingertips would brush the edges of the enclosed space. Every nerve was alight, my instincts screaming that this was not an experience I was going to enjoy.
Directly in front of me, the haze clouded. From the murky gray formed the sketch of a figure in tattered robes. Cold gripped my core, and not just because ice frosted the mist and froze the pond. I knew—I knew—it was her. She didn’t need to open her mouth, didn’t need to replicate her image across the ring of fog as she was now doing, for me to realize who was responsible for this vision.
Oh...okay, well this took a turn. For a second I wondered if this forest was somehow alive and it was going to work towards separating the three and do something from that point...but it seems instead Charax is about to meet that very mysterious lady from the prophecy situation.
“Sleeping like a babe because your eyes tell you it’s night.” Slowly, the wraiths tilted to the right and began to circle through the fog, never breaching the surface. “Confident in the comfortable familiarity of illusion, yet blind to it even now.”
“What does that mean?” Panic spiked through my chest. Belatedly, I realized that the frost now covered me. Whether this specter were real or imagined, I couldn’t move. “How are you doing this?”
“What wears a human face, yet is not human?” The voice was almost mocking in its unfaltering commitment to ignoring my cries. “What rivals the divine, yet is not deity? How can one covet what one cannot comprehend?” The banshees circled faster and faster, shaving off layers of distortion that lazily spiraled onto the frozen surface. “How can there be good faith or bad, if there was no faith to begin with?”
“Why are you doing this?”
Okay...so this lady should definitely be the goddess of theatre at some point, either that or poetry, she is very good at being very vague but giving enough in said vague phrases that you know its something mysterious and probably important. Well...that was certainly quite the experience there. I have a feeling Charax is going to take a few moment to recover from this and then proceed to try and decipher this new message.
Malia loomed over me, the canopy of her wings sheltering us. I was on my back on the ground, breathing heavily. Sweat drenched my forehead and made my robes cling to my back. A stone ground into my ribs just next to my spine as I shifted and struggled to orient myself. The darkness of the forest had lightened, but not by much.
“What happened?” Malia asked, face pinched with concern.
I scraped my elbows against pebbles in the dirt as I pushed myself upright. “Did I pass out?”
“And you were foaming at the mouth like a madman.” Her snakes hissed. “This darkness has some kind of anesthetic effect.” She sniffed. “You’ve become too human lately. I think we might need the more skeletal you for now.”
“So you’re saying you’re not the only one who’s put on a few pounds.” Grinning, I shuffled to my feet and jogged in the direction Hasda had gone in the vision.
Hmm, well love that weak attempt at humor there as Charax is trying to process this. Whoever this being is, it seems when he's somewhat weakened but other outside influences, or who knows, even when he's perfectly fine, said person? deity? eldritch abomination? can give him some serious mental trauma with those visions. Its hard to place whether all the mental gymnastics is to keep him off balance and unable to identify her or if this one is genuinely a little evil, or if they're so powerful they don't notice the hurt they cause or care. So much to think about here for sure.
We tore through the forest in silence. No matter how fast we went, we never seemed to gain ground on Hasda. I couldn’t have been out for more than a few minutes, and yet he’d put an insane amount of distance between us. Or...more than one enchantment was layered on this forest. I slid to a halt next to a shaggy barked tree and sagged onto it.
Malia’s eyes were wide, on the verge of blasting everything in sight. “Another one?”
I nodded. “Have we been going in circles?”
“One way to find out.” And with that, she snapped to the side and carved a line of blight at a diagonal from us. Closing her eyes, she sighed and brushed her hands together. “After you.”
Well, this is certainly not a forest that's meant to be easily strolled across. That much is abundantly clear right off the bat. So far this is proceeding along in some very interesting patterns, that much is quite certain I think.
With a grunt, I pushed off the tree and headed in the direction I thought Hasda had gone, leaving the blighted stripe behind me and to the left. We churned through several hundred more yards of forest and, after fifteen minutes of racing, came upon the head of Malia’s pestilential path.
I frowned as I stared at the curve that ended the strip, made ragged by half-charred, curling grasses. “Have humans grown strong enough to hinder the gods?”
“Not with any magic currently at their disposal.” Malia folded her arms and eyed the swath of shriveled earth like she wanted to raze it again. “A single deity would struggle against a pair of gods of our caliber, and a group of gods would stick out.”
Okayy...I mean I usually love the exposition going on and you're decision to have Charax be woefully out of touch enables us to have this exposition with plausible reasons for the most part, but that part about the gods feel a little too much like its only for the benefit of the audience. A veryyyy nitpicky but I thought I'd mention it.
I hadn’t gotten a good look at the witches in my vision, but if these women turned out to be in that last group, they would be a total pain in the ass to wrangle. A coven of mortal witches? Simple enough to handle. But sorceresses who shared a transcendent bond that could catapult a member, or the collective as a singular being, into godhood? I’d rather wipe with sand.
“Let me try something,” Malia said, still frowning at the ground. Her skin shimmered as she transitioned into the astral plane. Ozone and berries scented the air as her snakes bled into their starry counterparts. A splash of the transcendent colored her face, and she screamed.
Cool....well it seems we're ending on a proper cliffhanger. I though the mysterious forest itself was enough of a cliffhanger but apparently not. I don't know why I even act surprised anymore at this. Anyway, a pretty scary move there to end on...hopefully nothing too untoward happens here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, I think you've gotten this trial off to a properly intense start here in this forest and I am looking forward to seeing where you manage to take this one...can't wait to see what comes next.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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