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The Many Gifts of Malia--Part 54: "The Sealed"

by dragonfphoenix


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

Jade grabbed the back of my hand, hers trembling horribly. “Please.” She didn’t finish the plea, didn’t look up, just sat there shivering like a terrorized puppy.

I sighed. “All right. Last thing.”

Her shaking didn’t stop, but it did lessen.

“There’s something odd about you.” I kept myself still, neither taking her hand nor pushing it off. “I haven’t been able to put my finger on it. But I think it’s related to that language you know, the one you, Hasda, and that djinn all share.” I shook my head. “It’s not a living language. Nebesa can help us understand, if not entirely, then at least good approximations of all known languages. It’s how we and the other pantheons can interact with any semblance of civility. So where in the world did you find it? And how does the djinn know it?”

She went so unnaturally still, so suddenly, that I thought she’d fainted. But she sat there, erect, slowly forcing air in and out through her nose. As I waited, she withdrew her hand and clasped it in her other hand, resting them in her lap as she drilled holes in the ground with her eyes. Finally, she shivered a sigh and flicked a glance at me through her hair. “You can’t tell anyone about this.”

“What? About your mines?” I gave her a comforting smile, preparing to explain that, yes, the pantheon (or at least the major gods) would need to know about the demon sleeping deep below her territory.

She quickly shook her head. “Not that. About me. Or, what I’m going to say.” Her fingers dug into her robes. “Please.”

I frowned and folded my arms. Shifting my weight above my heels, I said, “It depends on what you have to say. But, depending on what it is, it won’t go any further than me.” I paused. “And Malia, of course.”

Jade paled and shivered. “I guess that’s as good as you can do. Okay.” She clenched her clothes and straightened her spine. “I’m...broken.”

I blinked. “Beg pardon.”

“Broken,” she repeated, jerking her head in awkward nods. “Like, my spirit. My...I don’t know how to describe it.” Tears pooled in the corners of her eyes. “But I’m wrong. Really wrong. Don’t fit, out of place, lost connection, drifting.” She smiled, a sad, broken thing that made her look absolutely pathetic. “Not here. I don’t belong.”

“All right, I’m going to need you to unpack that a little.”

She looked up. “Unpack? Is there a box?” She gasped. “Are you sending me away? Or, wait. Unpack would be stay.”

“Stop.” I held up a hand and massaged the bridge of my nose with the other. “What I mean is, I need you to explain what you mean by all that.”

“In here.” She poked her chest. “It’s broken.”

“Yes, but how?” I did my best to keep the exasperation out of my voice. “Like, are you sick? Poisoned? Did you suffer some sort of trauma that’s caused cognitive dissonance?”

“I…” She tilted her head. “Maybe?”

“Okay.” The breeze floated between us, rustling the grass and rolling the humidity of the surrounding springs around. I wiped my hands on my thighs against the cloying damp. “When did you first start feeling this way?”

“After I got out.”

I frowned. “Got out of what?”

“My...mines.” She rubbed her arm and looked away. “I was never supposed to leave them.”

Oh.

Oh shit.

“Jade, were you sealed in the mines with...him?”

Her shoulders trembled. “What was left of him.”

No wonder she was freaking out about it. Some cultures, like the one that preceded Aenea, had a habit of interring servants when their masters died, to guide and serve them in the afterlife. Usually, the servants were sacrificed before burial, but on rare occasions, they were not. Only the most important, powerful masters merited such honors.

But for the gods, it was generally held that the dead were best to guard the dead. So, for the Paedens to have gone to all the effort to not only expunge “his” name from the earth but also entomb his divine warden, alive, with him as well…

Shit.

I knew I wasn’t keeping all my emotions off my face because Jade shifted even more.

“Please don’t banish me.” Her voice gave out halfway through, and she whispered the last two words in a cracked hush.

“Nobody’s banishing anybody,” I said, hammering the dirt with my fist. Fury roiled in my gut, a slow rage that was swirling upwards. As it lapped against the bottom of my lungs, I pushed to my feet to give myself the space to control it. “Nobody except maybe the gods stupid enough to abandon you like that.” I clenched my fists. “How old are you?”

“I...I really don’t know,” Jade stammered, shrinking back. “Everything was weird in the crypt. Broken.” She ducked her head. “Like me.”

“Like Pek you are,” I snapped. “Let me guess. You felt some kind of rush when the seal was broken? Like time catching up to you?”

“How did you—” She flinched when she saw my face.

Yeah, I probably looked royally pissed. They’d had an elder god that dangerous, and they locked a gods-damned child in there, alone, and temporally isolated her from the rest of reality in some mistaken bid for time before said ancient one put himself back together. They hadn’t even had the decency to put someone in with her, to help hold back the madness, both from the isolation and from the influence of the sundered god. It was a damn miracle Jade could even string coherent sentences together.

She was practically curled in a ball now. “You’re scaring me.”

Small fissures split the ground beneath my feet as my aura bubbled over, cracking the air like a vase. Oops.

“My apologies.” I reined in the surging power and knelt next to her. “I just can’t believe how stupid and incompetent your former pantheon was. What they did to you was horrible.”

“So you’re not sending me away?”

I barked a laugh. “No, but I might send some limbs away from the gods who did this to you.” I narrowed my eyes. “Was it the Paedens? Are any of the gods from that time still around?”

“Yes.” Jade ducked her head, hiding behind her hair again.

“Good. Last question.”

Her fingers wrapped themselves in her robe again, and she uncurled just a little bit. “What?”

“Who let you out?” I watched as her face worked through several variations of confusion.

She finally settled on the classic pinched eyebrows look and frowned. “I—I’m sorry, but I don’t know.”

I folded my arms, then immediately unfolded them so Jade wouldn’t think I was upset with her. “Then how did you get through the seal? Did it fail? Tear? Did you force your way out?”

“No.” She shook her head, looking apprehensive because she didn’t know the answer to my question. “I just...woke up in the mines one day.”

“Hmm.” I rubbed my chin to keep from scowling. If the seal had decayed to the point that she could escape, we’d have to worry about Tamiyat’s mate breaking free on his own. If someone had let her out, however, then we’d need to contend with whatever eldritch cult was moving to revive their leader. But if the sorcery had merely expelled her, we could be up against any number of things. Soured magic, temporal fracturing, the mate’s influence… It would have been far simpler if there were some known, direct source for Jade’s liberation.

Alas, life was never so accommodating.

“Well, that’s a mystery for another time, then,” I said, holding out my hand. “Up you go. You’re going to need another bath as it is, but enough sitting in the dirt.”

She hesitantly took my hand and let me help her up. “So I’m not in trouble?”

“The only trouble you’re going to be in is if you keep asking if we’re kicking you out.” I gave her a stern look. She shrank a little but nodded. “Good. Let’s head back to Nebesa. There’s a feast coming up you’ll want to be presentable for, and I have a boy to chase down.”

As we walked across the field towards the administrative cabin, Jade shifted back to her lamia form, changing her bathrobes into her day robes in the process. She stayed more silent than I’d ever thought possible before our conversation, making no noise outside the whispering of the grass against her snakeskin.

I coughed to break the silence. “So...you and Hasda, huh?”

Well that opened the floodgates. Interspersed with her rapid apologies were unbounded embarrassment and promises to respect my boundaries established as his guardian and patron. I had to hold up a hand to get a word in edgewise.

“I meant your relationship. It’s going well?”

Eyes on the ground, she colored deep scarlet and picked at her robes. “You could say that.”

I grunted to keep from choking on a laugh. “That’s good to hear. Just keep in mind your station.”

She looked up, concerned. “I’m not trying to overstep—”

“Not like that,” I said, shaking my head. We crested the last hill, nearly at the cabin. “You’re a grafted-in minor goddess. While I don’t hold that against you, it means you can barely shelter any mortals you attach yourself to. Not to mention that Hasda is nearly a demigod with two Seated patrons.” The way it came out sounded like a brag, but I didn’t intend it to. Jade took it well nevertheless. “There’s a distinct possibility that he’ll eventually surpass you. So whatever you do, don’t mix power and status with your relationship.”

She ducked her head. “Thank you for your advice, Aged One.”

I nearly scowled. Despite my rickety body and many centuries, I didn’t feel quite so old as I used to, which was a good development. But Jade had the maturity to listen to advice, at least, which boded well for their future together. I couldn’t help the grin that crept across my face. They were kind of cute together. I wonder what their kids would be like?


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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Sorry it took me some time to get around to this one. I've been behind on some of these reviews this past week. Anyway...onto the first impressions, I'm already loving these bits of information here....we're slowly piecing more pieces of this giant puzzle together and the picture gets more exciting with each new puzzle piece.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Jade grabbed the back of my hand, hers trembling horribly. “Please.” She didn’t finish the plea, didn’t look up, just sat there shivering like a terrorized puppy.

I sighed. “All right. Last thing.”

Her shaking didn’t stop, but it did lessen.

“There’s something odd about you.” I kept myself still, neither taking her hand nor pushing it off. “I haven’t been able to put my finger on it. But I think it’s related to that language you know, the one you, Hasda, and that djinn all share.” I shook my head. “It’s not a living language. Nebesa can help us understand, if not entirely, then at least good approximations of all known languages. It’s how we and the other pantheons can interact with any semblance of civility. So where in the world did you find it? And how does the djinn know it?”


Oooh, some really specific details getting called back into action out of nowhere and I'm really loving the payoffs that we're getting finally. Its good to get some answers, and even though we're mostly getting more questions as answers rather than actual answers, I'm really enjoying watching all of this slowly develop here.

She went so unnaturally still, so suddenly, that I thought she’d fainted. But she sat there, erect, slowly forcing air in and out through her nose. As I waited, she withdrew her hand and clasped it in her other hand, resting them in her lap as she drilled holes in the ground with her eyes. Finally, she shivered a sigh and flicked a glance at me through her hair. “You can’t tell anyone about this.”

“What? About your mines?” I gave her a comforting smile, preparing to explain that, yes, the pantheon (or at least the major gods) would need to know about the demon sleeping deep below her territory.

She quickly shook her head. “Not that. About me. Or, what I’m going to say.” Her fingers dug into her robes. “Please.”


Okayy....well, this is going to be a major revelation by the looks of things. I mean, we've already had a massive revelation by this point that Jade has all but actively confirmed and now here it looks like she's got something even crazier to divulge to Charax and I'm just trying to imagine what it could possibly be here.

Jade paled and shivered. “I guess that’s as good as you can do. Okay.” She clenched her clothes and straightened her spine. “I’m...broken.”

I blinked. “Beg pardon.”

“Broken,” she repeated, jerking her head in awkward nods. “Like, my spirit. My...I don’t know how to describe it.” Tears pooled in the corners of her eyes. “But I’m wrong. Really wrong. Don’t fit, out of place, lost connection, drifting.” She smiled, a sad, broken thing that made her look absolutely pathetic. “Not here. I don’t belong.”

“All right, I’m going to need you to unpack that a little.”

She looked up. “Unpack? Is there a box?” She gasped. “Are you sending me away? Or, wait. Unpack would be stay.”


I know this is meant to be a rather serious scene and its definitely put in that context, but just the unintended humor that radiates off of this is a lovely touch. We have had quite a few heavy topics get thrown around recently so getting a little bit more of a light hearted segment is good and also...well Jade looks like she's suffering from a bit of depression almost with that particular statement. Its like neither Charax nor Jade understand what's going on here..but its definitely not a good thing.

“Okay.” The breeze floated between us, rustling the grass and rolling the humidity of the surrounding springs around. I wiped my hands on my thighs against the cloying damp. “When did you first start feeling this way?”

“After I got out.”

I frowned. “Got out of what?”

“My...mines.” She rubbed her arm and looked away. “I was never supposed to leave them.”

Oh.

Oh shit.

“Jade, were you sealed in the mines with...him?”

Her shoulders trembled. “What was left of him.”


Well...ooooh, okay so maybe this is more magical than something like depression...but well that's another revelation although this one maybe we don't quite know the significance of just yet although I've no doubt Charax will explain it to us in thoughts very soon. At any rate, from what I know of traditions like this in reality, this is a big deal and escaping does seem like a bad thing for her and maybe to this master as well.

I knew I wasn’t keeping all my emotions off my face because Jade shifted even more.

“Please don’t banish me.” Her voice gave out halfway through, and she whispered the last two words in a cracked hush.

“Nobody’s banishing anybody,” I said, hammering the dirt with my fist. Fury roiled in my gut, a slow rage that was swirling upwards. As it lapped against the bottom of my lungs, I pushed to my feet to give myself the space to control it. “Nobody except maybe the gods stupid enough to abandon you like that.” I clenched my fists. “How old are you?”

“I...I really don’t know,” Jade stammered, shrinking back. “Everything was weird in the crypt. Broken.” She ducked her head. “Like me.”


Well...it looks like Charax is now getting himself properly worked up about these people and some death is about to head that way while poor Jade is just freaking out at his reaction. It does make sense to see her reactions though considering the kind of things it appears that she had to suffer through here.

Yeah, I probably looked royally pissed. They’d had an elder god that dangerous, and they locked a gods-damned child in there, alone, and temporally isolated her from the rest of reality in some mistaken bid for time before said ancient one put himself back together. They hadn’t even had the decency to put someone in with her, to help hold back the madness, both from the isolation and from the influence of the sundered god. It was a damn miracle Jade could even string coherent sentences together.

She was practically curled in a ball now. “You’re scaring me.”

Small fissures split the ground beneath my feet as my aura bubbled over, cracking the air like a vase. Oops.

“My apologies.” I reined in the surging power and knelt next to her. “I just can’t believe how stupid and incompetent your former pantheon was. What they did to you was horrible.”

“So you’re not sending me away?”

I barked a laugh. “No, but I might send some limbs away from the gods who did this to you.” I narrowed my eyes. “Was it the Paedens? Are any of the gods from that time still around?”


Well Jade's backstory is just continuing to get interesting and Charax's anger is properly rising out of control now. I can't wait to see how this is going to end up affecting everything else. Malia is definitely going to learn of this and maybe even Seppo....and some limbs are definitely going to be sent flying here.

“Yes.” Jade ducked her head, hiding behind her hair again.

“Good. Last question.”

Her fingers wrapped themselves in her robe again, and she uncurled just a little bit. “What?”

“Who let you out?” I watched as her face worked through several variations of confusion.

She finally settled on the classic pinched eyebrows look and frowned. “I—I’m sorry, but I don’t know.”


Hmm....well, well...that detail is being left untold to us...it makes sense that she would not know something like that...considering the kind of pressure she must've been under but I have a feeling the person who did this is important to the story somehow.

“Hmm.” I rubbed my chin to keep from scowling. If the seal had decayed to the point that she could escape, we’d have to worry about Tamiyat’s mate breaking free on his own. If someone had let her out, however, then we’d need to contend with whatever eldritch cult was moving to revive their leader. But if the sorcery had merely expelled her, we could be up against any number of things. Soured magic, temporal fracturing, the mate’s influence… It would have been far simpler if there were some known, direct source for Jade’s liberation.

Alas, life was never so accommodating.

“Well, that’s a mystery for another time, then,” I said, holding out my hand. “Up you go. You’re going to need another bath as it is, but enough sitting in the dirt.”

She hesitantly took my hand and let me help her up. “So I’m not in trouble?”


Well...that was definitely a good talk...a lot more happening here than what I'd have expected and I love this. I also low Charax's simultaneous temper flare ups and then the more rational part of him trying to make sure he doesn't seem too scary to poor Jade.

As we walked across the field towards the administrative cabin, Jade shifted back to her lamia form, changing her bathrobes into her day robes in the process. She stayed more silent than I’d ever thought possible before our conversation, making no noise outside the whispering of the grass against her snakeskin.

I coughed to break the silence. “So...you and Hasda, huh?”

Well that opened the floodgates. Interspersed with her rapid apologies were unbounded embarrassment and promises to respect my boundaries established as his guardian and patron. I had to hold up a hand to get a word in edgewise.


Ahh well here comes the icebreaker. That wall of tension was building with the direction the conversation took and I love that we're coming back to the original topic that this conversation promised and we're getting a more lighthearted scene to complement all the heavy topics we've had so far.

“Not like that,” I said, shaking my head. We crested the last hill, nearly at the cabin. “You’re a grafted-in minor goddess. While I don’t hold that against you, it means you can barely shelter any mortals you attach yourself to. Not to mention that Hasda is nearly a demigod with two Seated patrons.” The way it came out sounded like a brag, but I didn’t intend it to. Jade took it well nevertheless. “There’s a distinct possibility that he’ll eventually surpass you. So whatever you do, don’t mix power and status with your relationship.”

She ducked her head. “Thank you for your advice, Aged One.”

I nearly scowled. Despite my rickety body and many centuries, I didn’t feel quite so old as I used to, which was a good development. But Jade had the maturity to listen to advice, at least, which boded well for their future together. I couldn’t help the grin that crept across my face. They were kind of cute together. I wonder what their kids would be like?


Is it just me or is that little moment there perhaps the most satisfying part about this whole chapter? Sure we've had some major questions answered and some big revelations about this whole war....but this moment with Charax giving some advice and it just being a little moment of wholesomeness is the best thing for me. :D

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall another awesome chapter as always. I know the mines and Jade's past is what I should be taking away from this chapter but having read this thrice by this point I cannot get over how awesome that final conversation was and just ahhh its so wholesome.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry






No worries lol, just so long as you're here. :)

This was definitely a fun chapter to write. I've had a good chunk of this info for a while now so it felt good to get it out. Wholesome Charax was certainly a blast lol.

More coming soon!



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Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

Ooh, I loved the information you gave us in this chapter. It's very interesting to see Jade's connection with the mine goes even deeper than what I originally thought. It'll be interesting to see if Jade was the only thing keeping him sealed, if maybe he'll start to try and escape... really excited to see what'll happen with that!

One thing I really loved about this was just how protective Charax was over Jade. I swear, as I was reading, the smile on my face just got bigger and bigger. I really enjoy seeing that softer side of Charax, and I love the fact that Jade is kinda like part of the family now. I've also just really taken a liking to her character, and I loved seeing Charax do as well. Really nice work building up the relationship between those two. I think you also did a nice job of deepening Jade's character; at first she seemed more like a happy-go-lucky goddess who was probably just going to be in there for personality diversity and Hasda's love interest, but I'm glad she's got her own backstory and potential plotline emerging.

I also am super curious of how the information we learned is going to play out. I wonder if Jade is going to have a big moment where she goes against (or attempts to go against) the Sea Mother and the other elder being who she was trapped with. I'm also super curious to see if any of the other characters (mainly Malia) will have some other insight on the info we learned. I guess I'll have to wait and see!

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Nebesa can help us understand, if not entirely, then at least good approximations of all known languages.


I think that here, your commas should be around the whole phrase "if not entirely then at east good approximations of." Since you're using the commas to show an omissible phrase, the sentence should work if you took all the words in commas out. The way you have it now reads like "Nebesa can help us understand then at lest good approximations of all known languages," which doesn't make sense. It's an easy mistake to make though; comma usage gets the better of all of us from time to time.

Overall: nice work on this one!! I really loved seeing the expansion of Jade's character, and I'm looking forward to seeing what's next in store! Until next time!






Yeah this chapter was super fun to write! This was info I've had in my back pocket for a while now lol, so it was nice to finally get it out on paper. Just wait til you see the rest of the lore I'm sitting on ;)




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