*This fanfic is under my folder titled “Marble Hornets fanfics”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1110. This is based off an internet horror series called “Marble Hornets” on YouTube, created by Troy Wagner. I hope you enjoy!*
I remember dreading the time I was alone at the hospital, because when I was alone, The Operator would come for me. It would reach out with its long, pale fingers and take me to these strange, frightening dimensions in confusing, muddled blips, and then somehow, I would end up back in my neighborhood.
Only, I wouldn’t get teleported to the hospital, so I always went to Rosswood Park, where I felt safe. Where I felt like it wouldn’t get me.
Nobody at the hospital believed me when I talked about it. Maybe some other children did and didn’t tell me, I don’t know. It wasn’t like I had any friends then. The doctors told me that whatever I saw “wasn’t real” and “Take these pills, Tim! It will help”.
I didn’t trust them. I didn’t like that they were so persistent about the pills, like they thought it was the only solution out there. In fact, it felt like they were pressuring me. I put up quite a fight with them about the pills, but one day, I took them.
I stopped seeing The Operator some time. I started to feel like how I imagined “normal people” to feel like. I felt sane.
By the time I was let out of the hospital, I wasn’t a child anymore, but that was okay, because I was finally cured! I could go to University, learn more things, be more of a real human being!
But here I am, posting the last entry of Marble Hornets on YouTube, the channel Jay used to document the horrors of The Operator. It’s back now, it’s killed my friends, it’s going to kill me…or maybe it’s not. Maybe it will keep me alive just so it can torture me. Maybe it will keep me alive just so it can make me feel afraid.
I’m all grown up, but I still feel the same fear that I felt as a child.
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@Ravena @4revgreen you might want to see this!
These connect to this!:
Tim’s “terrific” Christmas!!!
“Now that you’re gone”
“Entry despair”
“It’s not going to end”
Marble Hornets amusement park ad!
Going somewhere special
Crossroads
Hiyaaaaa creeper
I'm back with the same energy but a 5 percent battery
So let's dive in
Skin- Initial Observations
I think it's the title that appealed to mee and was intriguing enough for me to begin reading.
Now because I haven't read the fan fics connected to these or the series it is based off on, I will seem a little clueless
But I hope you reply back to me
Rind- Interpretations
The protagonist reminisces about the dread he felt when he was left alone, admitted in the hospital. He admits so, because a certain 'The Operater' would come give him a weird visit.
The protagonist claims that The Operator would take to several dimensions but in the end he wouldn't end up at the hospital. To feel safe, he would walk to Rosswood Park. When confessing to doctors, he was given pills which he straight up refused
Yet in the end, he took them and suddenly he was ridden of The Operator's visits.
He further admits to having feel cured but then we shift to the present where he believes that it is back and it would torment him forever.
Again having not seen the series it was based on, I think the protagonist was pretty much delirious. The Operator, in my opinion, was no more than a fear which the title indicates as well. The protagonist was sick and the dimensions prolly represented all the emotions he went through which further explains the pills. And then yes, there was the isolation
However if this was purely a supernatural short story with no metaphor as such then kindly forgive me creeper. Well it still doesn't change my mind about it- pretty interesting no matter he perspective.
Pulp- The Tastiest Part
As I noticed in my previous review, your usage of words is unmatched. Yk sometimes I noticed many writers (myself including) continuously blabbering without impacting words in their work. I will always appreciate your writing for that and YES YOUR ENIGMATIC endings haunt me.
Seeds- Critiques
Not much to say but this kind of cut the flow and I still don't get it
You mention that they would somehow end up in their neighbourhood and then in the very next line you say "Only I wouldn't get teleported to the hospital...."
It made me pause and wonder what exactly we're talking abt?
Correct me here if needed:
In their visit by The Operator, their last dimension would be their neighbourhood but in reality they would end up in the middle of nowhere and then walk to Rosswood Park?
Also I wished that u could hv mentioned more on why Rosswood Park?
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Hmm%u2026from the series %u201CMarble Hornets%u201D (which you can watch on YouTube) The Operator teleports people to a lot of unsettling places. Its favorite place to hide is Rosswood Park, where it can hide among the trees, undetected. It%u2019s also where people can get lost, because it%u2019s a park, but it%u2019s also the woods.
Thx for reading!
What even is a plot. Who even are we and what are we doing. All we know is that we need Violet Victory!
Ok I have at least HEARD of the Marble Hornets now, bc of your fic XD
I like the first paragraph. I like how you have both emotional reactions and also descriptions of the actions that I can easily follow.
These two sentences are v confusing one after another: “Only, I wouldn’t get teleported to the hospital, so I always went to Rosswood Park,”
Like… I’m already unhappy with the “only” but then… If it wasn’t his decision to not be in the hospital afterward then WHERE did he end up in? Because you did not mention that, only that he went to the park afterward.
And if he really disappears from the hospital wouldn’t at least the staff notice?
I wonder if… the pills actually did help him. Because things were fine after wards, right? So maybe something happened and he couldn’t take them anymore and this is how the monster came back?
The final line is so sad ☹ Good job!
The pills help, but they cannot help with everything.
Thx for reading!