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Let the fake facades rot away

*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Shadow House fanfics”. This takes place when one of the characters, Poppy Caldwell, from the scholastic book series written by Dan Poblocki, “Shadow House”, is an adult. It’s an AU I made of her as an adult. She and Connie are characters from the Shadow House book series, Valerian is my OC. You can also get a “Shadow House” video game from the App Store if you want to connect it all more. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*

Poppy drove the car into the starlit darkness, Valerian sitting next to her in the passenger seat. They were both talking about miscellaneous things in life and she suspected that he might have had a crush on her with how he kept looking at her, but she wouldn’t say anything on it. He seemed like there was more to him, so she was fine with talking to him more in her car.

In the streetlights, she caught how his teeth were pointed and glinted like that of a vampire’s.

But perhaps that was just how his teeth worked. People had their quirks, didn’t they? It wouldn’t be fair of her to judge him after how people had judged Poppy for her whole life. Even after meeting those other kids in that horrible Larkspur House at twelve years old, she still felt like her only real friend was Connie. Especially since she had become a somewhat-famous Broadway actress and everyone acted like they were her friend. Why, she just wanted to connect with someone who would understand her, someone who wasn’t a ghost, someone-

“Have you ever been abandoned before?” Valerian asked.

Poppy blinked, a little startled by how specific his question was. It was so sudden, she didn’t expect him to say anything like it.

But she’d talk about it. Some of it, at least. She didn’t want it to haunt her for the rest of her life, like a deranged demon.

“I was an orphan until I was twelve. I wasn’t abandoned. My Mom was just trying to protect me.” Poppy said.

She remembered watching her Mom wave her goodbye before a black car snatched her away. Six year old Poppy screamed and put up a fight with the nurses, begging them to let her go.

In her young eyes, her Mom was abandoning her. Leaving her behind to rot.

But when she got invited to Larkspur House at twelve years old, she found that her Mom was only trying to protect her from the sickness that was the Caldwell curse.

“Oh. I’m glad that you found family. My parents kicked me out when I was twelve.” Valerian said. Though there was no emotion to his voice, under the streetlights, she could see the tears in his eyes.

“I’m sorry to hear that.” Poppy said. Her heart felt like it was breaking on the inside, and though she had just met him, she felt that she wanted to hold him close and hug all his worries away.

“It’s alright. They’re missing out on me.” Valerian said. He didn’t sound completely convinced. More like he was trying to convince himself instead.

Poppy drove on, the streets becoming more familiar. She was going to make it home soon, and then she and Valerian would get to know each other more.

Though it was many years ago, the image of Larkspur House danced in her mind, a symphony of mistakes and regrets.

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canopy
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canopy wrote a review · Sun Dec 28, 2025 9:40 am

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Hello @creeperfeverdreams Detective Ira here, I have apparently stumbled upon your manuscript while searching for clues in the Devil’s Library, which is where I believe the ancient magical book of Toramu is hidden. Since I’m already here, I shall give my opinion on this piece of yours.

Though I have to say it is very strange that I should find your writing here……. hmmm…..

What I can see


Wow this was very interesting! Lot's to unpack here. Straight off the bat I am interested in Valerian and Poppy. Why are they in her car? Where are they going? It's chilling how Poppy thinks he has a crush on her and then thinks he is a vampire (also Valerian seems like a pretty vampire name, I appreciate the alliteration ;)) perhaps his glances are for reasons more sinister...

The bit after that is really well written, a little sneak peak into Poppy's past and lots of info there and the broken off ending adds lovely foreshadowing and heightens the suspense and drama of the piece. Seems to me that despite being successful Poppy is lonely, (not an unusual problem) what is strange though, is that it looks like the only person who understands Poppy is a ghost.

So if Valerian is indeed a vampire then this would not be her first brush with the supernatural. Interesting to see how she might react. Valerian's question is also very surprising almost like a punch to the gut. It seems almost knowing, perceptive. Like they aren't actually strangers.

All that mystery surrounding Poppy's past, looks like Valerian as some mystery of his own. Now this bit,
She didn’t want it to haunt her for the rest of her life, like a deranged demon.


I find very interesting. Poppy talking about not wanting her past to haunt her like a demon whilst in a car with someone who is potentially a demon. And perhaps this may just not be a metaphor. She has had a brush with the supernatural before. Maybe her past actually is a demon.

Another thing I like is how much depth you've given to your characters, especially Poppy. We can clearly see how the years of pain have matured her, and her compassion is heartening. I am invested in her as a character and that is truly a wonderful thing.

Under the magnifying glass


One thing I do think you can improve is that I find your piece a little lacking in sensory imagery. Not a big thing so please don't be worried but it is an easy fix. All you need to do is occasionally work in some details of the surroundings. Maybe the night was cold and heater kept making a gentle whirring noise, maybe some sounds of the traffic, the tap tap tap tap tap tap of someone jiggling their leg in nervousness. Anything really.

Just some description to bring their surroundings into play.

Closing the case


Overall this was a very enjoyable read! It was lovely going through this manuscript of yours. Everything expressed was my opinion, feel free to accept or reject whatever you want.

If you have any clues relating to the book of Toramu or anything you want to clarify feel free to contact my alias, ahem, my dear friend @canopy.
Until next time!!

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“This killer is smart. We won’t find the murder weapon because the assassin ate it. The only thing we have to figure out now is how they were able to swallow a certified pre-owned 2019 Buick Encore with leather upholstery.”
—Miss Marple, “A Murder Most Deadly,” by Agatha Christie

I%u2019m glad you enjoyed this! ^v^

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review · Wed Nov 26, 2025 3:10 pm

Alright this follows off directly after “The Interesting Man”, right?
Hmm Connie wanted Poppy to meet this person and now… It appears that he’s some kinda monster. Possibly vampire?
Since you mention that Poppy is an adult now, maybe it’s not so weird that she’s meeting this random man.
Ah this makes him more sympathetic:

More like he was trying to convince himself instead.

I also find it interesting that she went to the Larkspur house at 12 and presumably found a new home there while Valerian was kicked out at 12!

[Also, obligatory reminder: "Poppy said." is not a full sentence, you need to connect it to the speech with a comma instead of a period.]

Well, she didn%u2019t exactly find a home there. It burned down. She just found solace with the other kids that she went to the house with.

Thx for reading!

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Camilla Comment

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH!

Thank you! I have more fanfics that connect to this:

The interesting man
Connie Caldwell’s request

Would you like to see character art?



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