*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Shadow House fanfics”. The Shadow House books were written by Dan Plobocki. Poppy and Connie are canon characters in the book series, but this man in this fanfic is my OC. This takes place when Poppy is an adult and in my AU, Poppy became an actress when she grew up and still communicates with the ghost of Connie Caldwell. Now, before we get started, I should note that the reason Poppy communicates with Connie and has the same last name as her is because Poppy is Connie’s descendant and Poppy’s family has a lot to do with what happens in the book series. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33 [2]”. Enjoy!*
Poppy Caldwell smiled at the audience with a lipstick grin as the curtains. Being a Princess in a play was not something she expected to happen in her life, but again, she didn’t expect to live past the age of twelve, either.
Only the dim stage lights were on, the spotlight turned off. Behind the safety of the red velvet curtain, the audience shuffled from their seats to leave.
Poppy hitched up her flowing, pink dress, like the petals of a flower, and began walking backstage.
A shadow flickered in the mirror lying on the ground, a mirror framed with black swirls used for the show.
It morphed into that of a twelve year old girl with hazel eyes and long, black hair, wearing a dark dress and white pinafore.
It was Connie Caldwell, her cousin who only appeared in mirrors.
“Connie? What have you come to tell me?” Poppy asked. Connie only came when she felt like she needed to. Sometimes Poppy saw her, sometimes she didn’t.
But when Connie did come, Poppy made sure to cherish the moments she was around.
Connie pointed to Poppy’s left.
Poppy looked to where she was pointing. A young man in with black bangs sweeping over his eyes dressed in a suit stood there, looking at his polished dress shoes. Poppy didn’t see him earlier, so how was he around?
Poppy looked back to the mirror, to see what Connie thought.
Connie moved her right hand in a talking motion, hazel eyes bright with enthusiasm.
“You want me to talk to him?” Poppy whispered.
She didn’t talk to anyone but Azumi, Dash, and Connie. There was no one else in the world to trust but them. Who knew what monsters lurked in the darkness?
Connie nodded vigorously.
“Why? Why him?” Poppy asked.
But already, Connie had disappeared.
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Well creeper you made it possible. I have stopped fearing A/N’s and started reading yours for context 😊
And right of the bat it’s sad to hear that Poppy didn’t think she’d made it past 12!
I loveee the idea of a person in a mirror! My first thought was if that’s the reason Poppy had fears about making it into her teenage yrs!
Nevermind, they seem friends. Which is also great :3
Right I now remember! Connie is the one who tells Poppy to talk to the strange man! Oh I love getting the context for that scene. (And I have to repeat: I love the idea of Connie appearing in mirrors!)
It is pretty cool. This is a fanfic of a real book series called %u201CShadow House%u201D. You can check it out if you want. It%u2019s a Scholastic horror book series, but it%u2019s not too scary like Stephen King. Just a little mysterious. There%u2019s a mobile game under the same name in the App Store, but you can%u2019t do level three for some reason. It%u2019s like a bug.
Thx for reading!
Hello! Hope here, as I said, i'll be going through your greenroom works for the next little bit. It always sucks when you write fanfic and no one reads it because this site isn't really dedicated for fanfic (i would suggest Wattpad, A03 or even Quotev if you don't cross post to any of those already, but be warned as they are very different sites from this one)
The note at the beginning is much appreciated. I haven't heard of the original work before, so i'm just going to do my best. First thing, the intro where she is in the play, then goes behind the curtain is a little unclear. I assume it is at the end of the play? but it isn't stated, i would suggest adding a line saying something like 'she bowed to the audience and walked offstage' right after the lipstick line.
even though i am unfamiliar with the source material, it is very clearly written in a way that I do understand what it is about. Poppy seems to really care about Connie, and your OC is introduced well. I will probably talk about this more in other works by you based on the title, but introducing OC's into fiction is tricky. Here it works out decently, and doesn't feel to contrived, but that may be because of my unfamiliarity with the source material. All and all- pretty good.
It ends a bit abruptly, with no resolution of whether or not poppy decides to follow the man or not. Even if it is just one or two lines, like 'she heaved a sigh and followed after the man' or something, I think it would feel more like the story ended, and less like it just stopped. Cya soon!
-hope