It gets louder

Hey (again!) I decided to stop by for another review

Blood leaked from Marcus’ chest, yet Delaney could still hear the crying cello.

Wow, that was a really powerful start. I really loved how you use. This hook sentence to capture our attention immediately. Right from the start, we see that blood is leaking from Marcus's chest. I like how you describe the cello as being crying. Let's keep going, because I have a feeling this is going to be awesome!

It seems like our character is hearing a bunch of instruments. They hear the violin start to play, which reminds them of their twin brothers violin. I wonder how he passed. I did like the sentence where you mentioned how her heart began beating rapidly. Those three words together give such a good flow. It seems like she's having a lot of flashbacks to being with her brother Shane when they were younger before he died. Shane always said "music is everywhere". Perhaps, this is Shane communicating with her? It seems like this music is almost torturing her, though… Making her wanna claw at her heart. I like how you use those, physical examples for skull and heart. Finally, I really liked the last sentence when you ask that question, "when would it stop" especially since this is the last sentence in this piece. That feels symbolic in itself.

This was short, and I feel like there's a lot more of a backstory that I don't know, but I did enjoy what I did read. It seems like our characters have been through a lot in their lives, and it makes me really curious to learn more about them. I feel a lot of sympathy for our main character as she is almost tortured by these sounds of instruments, maybe literally because of how loud they are but also because of the memories that they have for her. Overall, awesome work and I can't wait to read more!

Your friend,
Ellie

Hello Hello, I'm back again to slowly shake off my review slumber. I hope you don't mind me popping in with a quick possibly rusty review. I don't think I've read the short stories or books that came before this so forgive my lack of context. With that being said I think all the rambling is out of the way. Let's get into it, shall we?

Overall I think this has a great setup. This gives off an Edgar Allen Poe-type feel
much like the telltale heart. After all both MCs are haunted by a sound that may or may not exist to the point their grasp on reality is slipping.

I think the little glimpses we get into the past with the twins are also very interesting. Of course, I would imagine that a lot of this would be explained in the book itself but I wish there was more. That little peak into the past seemed so full of life that it added to the uneasy feeling afterward.

Now that we have gone over my thoughts I think we should look at some feedback. Dont since this piece is so short there's not much to go over. As always I'm not a professional nor do you need to use anything I say. You are the author after all!

The biggest thing I want to point out is just how short this work is. I understand you're writing tends to be short but I feel this eerie piece would serve well with some breathing room. Perhaps you could describe the house a bit or go into further detail about the memories. What did it smell like or feel like? Did the kids run their hands across the wallpaper or feel the floor beneath groan as they ran?

I feel this could add to the atmosphere and help ground the reader.

Lastly, I want to point out one small line that felt off.

that played only served to scream in her forehead,

This is some great imagery however I think the use of the word forehead trips it up. In comparison to the rest it feels rather tame, I would recommend changing it ever so slightly. Something like this perhaps.

that played only served to scream in her skull,

Regardless I found this an interesting read, I hope you have a great day. Remember it's never too late to be spooky. As always keep creating and remember to drink water!