*This story is under my folder titled “Siren’s Desire”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
Humans, if given the time and the encouragement, can dream up such wonderfully weird creations. It’s more possible for younger humans because they are not being limited by set rules of how they are supposed to behave, but it can happen for older ones, too.
Like Lorelei Winston, for example. She was sixteen years old, not a small child at all, and yet, she still vaguely remembered a creature she had drawn when she was about seven years old, a tiny, pocket-sized, orange pig, which she had so creatively dubbed “Cutesy Pig”. Cutesy Pig was her imaginary friend of sorts, a being she imagined going on an adventure with.
The adventures had always involved the sea and the majesty of it, the beauty that sparkled for all to notice and the darkness that was hidden within. Lorelei wondered what secrets the sea was hiding, what stories it refused to tell, especially since she lived in a seaside town called “Moon’s Beach” where there was a legend of a siren called “Israfel” who lured teenage girls out to their deaths.
Lorelei wanted to believe in it to bring interest to her life, for at sixteen, Cutesy Pig no longer meant much to her, the idea of Israfel did.
There was one side of her that told her the legend was nothing more than a story, passed down from generation to generation, but still, she wanted to hold onto the fact that there was something out there, something beyond what she thought possible, for wouldn’t it be disappointing if Israfel were only a story?
One night, Lorelei left her bed to follow the sound of a boy’s lilting voice, singing in a manner that was both sweet and sinful, telling her that she had to go or she would be wasting her life away.
Her family, when they woke up the next morning and found that she wasn’t home, began to hold on to strings of hope tightly, desperately, as though it may wither away from them at any second, that Lorelei would come back.
But Cutesy Pig, made alive from the deeply buried shreds of innocence Lorelei had, was absolutely certain that she would come back, for although she had grown, she was still his friend, he could see it in the way her eyes glittered with the joy and wonder of the only imagined, and he would search for her, just to remind her and anyone else she may have cared for that there was always a chance for humanity, that there would always be love, ready to accept anyone in its infinite, cosmic-like embrace, and that there was no need to run.
Cutesy Pig, a creature that made no sense and yet all the sense in the world, would be sure not to leave Lorelei behind.
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Right of the bat that strikes me as a cool observation:
Reminds me a bit of the recent One Piece arc and I'm all here for that!
I also find it hilarious that it's a girl called Lorelei that is lured in by a siren xdd
I find the fact that the theme of childhood freedom and belief ties into Lorelei's disappearance. She wanted it to be true and that is why it was.
Not sure where the pig fits into all this. For a standalone thing, its inclusion feels out-of-touch since the story is more powerful without the hopeful note. As an exploration of "Lorelei wants so bad that interesting legends are true that she makes them true" the inclusion of her imaginary friend makes perfect sense tho! Feels like you're going to write a story about how that pig gets his friend back =D
yeah, he kind of is meant to be out of place, he is a childish thing she is attached to. there's more under my folder "siren's desire".
glad you enjoyed!
Hi Vampricone, Dragonight here with a brief review.
This was an interesting look at the human imagination and desire for adventure.
The conclusion of the story is a little sad. She had wanted to believe the story and go on an adventure. She got her wish... and left her family behind.
Then you went on to describe her from the eyes of her imaginary friend. It was a little confusing about what occurred to bring him to life, but if the purpose was simply to provide a brief commentary and hopeful conclusion, then I think that's ok.
I also noticed a couple of grammar errors.
I think you meant, "began to hold on to strings" but I still got the meaning of the sentence.
I think there should be a comma after 'love'
Otherwise it was a beautiful look at a young girl's perspective on adventure and imagination.
As always, have a wonderful day/night!
May dragon-fire illuminate your path and spark the flames of your imagination.
So glad you enjoyed this! This being manifested purely from Lorelei%u2019s innocence, in case you are wondering.
Ah, I wasn%u2019t sure if that meant she had died or something.