*This story is underneath my folder titled “Love in decaying hearts”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1440. Enjoy!*
There was once a witch named Clementine who married a man named Houston. Houston did not know that she was a witch and she intended to keep it that way.
She loved her family life as much as Houston did, so she wouldn’t want to mess it up by telling him the truth. Clementine had kept her magic hidden within her, away from her husband and two daughters, Melanie and Angie.
Fourteen year old Angie did not seem to have powers, but Melanie had that look in her eyes that said there was something more, something that she was missing. The way she didn’t quite fit in, the way she wouldn’t speak much with her family, the way she kept dreaming and drawing…that was the sign of a witch.
But if Clementine didn’t tell her, then maybe Melanie could learn to ignore it. That was how it worked for her.
Magic would be too great to not destroy witches and non-witches alike. At least, that was what Clementine believed.
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Heyo creeper! Happy Review Day!
It's so sad that Clementine doesn't plan on connecting with her likely-witch daughter about their hereditary and magical bond. Considering how Clementine deals with being a witch - stifling it and ignoring it - I have reason to believe her own elder family member(s) who were witches dealt with it the same way, by either not addressing it or coaching her to bury it. Break the cycle, Clementine! Support your daughter!
I guess it's also possible that Clementine and her childhood family WERE open about it at one point, but due to some traumatic event that changed. There's definitely something deeper going on here with her fear of magic.
I don't know how witches work in this world, but from that description, I can relate to being different, reclusive, and artistic! I really appreciate this unique take on it, and I love how Clementine has this mother's/witch's intuition that her daughter is of the same bent. To compare it to the real world, it reminds me of something like autism, where in girls/women especially there's this expectation that because it's "different" it should be kept hidden.
Lovely little story, as always! Keep up the great work!
Wolfi <3
Yayy! I’m glad you liked it!
And the other new story in the folder, let’s go!
I rly like the intro paragraph. Once again, stellar summary of who Clemetine is and what matters to her story ^^
Oh and I like how you describe why Clementine thinks Melanie has magic!
I still think we might could have used a deeper exploration on why Clemetine thinks magic is bad. I feel like this could have been the perfect story to go into that? As it is, I feel a little left hanging XD
PS: I hope you appreciate that I read and wrote this and the other review under the most difficult of circumstances: with a cat awkwardly sleeping on my lap and me fighting for his peace via trying to stop the laptop from sliding onto him. It was a constant struggle lol (the cat certainly didn’t appreciate it; he just slept, lazy creature!)
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lol yes it is very much appreciated. :>