Hey carmenbluestar! Wisegirl22 here to review!
Well, there isn't much to say. This was a short piece all in all, only four lines. But I still found two things.
One, most books and pieces write out numbers, in letter. So "8" should be "eight".
Also, "heartbreak" is one word. So don't put a space between "heart" and "break".
This was something they call "short but sweet". I'm nine, and for the most part I've heard plenty of warnings about love life. But anyways, this was well written! Most really short pieces I've heard are a little bit mediocre, but this one was different and refreshing. Good job, bluestar!
wisegirl22
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