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Are you mad?
I also am.
Will you hate?
Will you curse?
So will i.
Are you hurt?
Oh!You are not?
I also ain't.
You want to see me?
You don't?
I also never want.
You'll kill me?
You scare me!
Should I run?
Oh!I wait and watch?
You'll buy a gun?
Oh!An axe?
You'll hire thugs?
Wait a minute:
Do you have cash?
I guess not.
Ain't I right?
Why are you sitting?
Oh!I'm loud?
What if they hear?
You think I care?
I calm down?
You started this!
I listen a bit?
No!You listen first!
You love me?
You think I believe that?
Is that how you say sorry?
How do you take me?
You hurt me,
You curse me,
You abuse me,
You run away,
And that's all you say?
I treat you like a queen,
You say thanks by cursing.
Am I that cheap?
Am I that stupid?
I give you my heart
You give me your hate
Shouldn't I get bored?
Shouldn't I be tired?
Shouldn't I just go?
Shouldn't I move on?
You're know sorry?
Isn't it too late?
We can start again?
You will change?
You never did
You never will
Oh no. I'm sorry.
I never meant to say that.
Stop crying.
Come, lean on me.
Of course I believe you.
I love you too,
Never doubt that.
Come honey,
Lets go home.
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Hello there, here for a review.
There is always a space after any punctuation sign.Oh man, the end was never expected as I read through the beginning. And yet, it was inevitable, and I should have seen it coming, since it usually always ends this way with love... Alright now, as for the poem. It is good, it is short, it is efficient. I like it. Good job on this. However, there are some things that I think that you could improve.
First of all, the verses in italics. I understand why you do that, but what I don't understand is why you stopped doing them at some point in your poem! You should keep using them, because they create a good effect on the reader.
As for the grammar and spelling mistakes:
First, "I" is always capitalized when you are talking about yourself.
"ain't" is very informal and is usually used for verbal language. I would recommend not using it in the poem, even though your poem may be part of a dialogue.
This is not proper English. Maybe write: I should wait and watch?
Did you mean now or not?
Those are all the mistakes I found. Then there is this, which I find is a very good tipping point to your poem:
From there on out, the poem hooked me even more. And it was a good poem, so congratulations.
Keep on writing!
Whee!
Hey hey! Welcome to the site! *waves awkwardly*
Well, if you find it strange like, "Oh you dumbo! You cannot like it this much! You must be lying" let me tell you, I loved it because I do THIS. Talking like that, without waiting for answers, talking to myself. That's regular for me. That's why it's relatable. 
I love the ending. It's utterly sweet! ^^
I'd rather drop a short review for your poetry.
First off, it was crazy! It was way too much fun to read! I read this thrice! Out loud! It made me giggle!
I mean, wait! O.O Even though it's like an argument but readers can only see one speaker and that makes it look like the speaker's talking to himself alone. If you know what I mean. :3
So, I like the italicising thing you did in the first few lines but then what! o.O Did you forget about those or just found that time-consuming? You could continue that. There were few spacing issues, like places where there's a space needed, kindly fix those. Probably a quick revision?
Have a Pleasant Day!~
Nire.
I am glad you liked it. Well i couldn't think of a better title so the first one that came to my mind is the one I chose. The italics...well i'll work on them. Thanks for the advice
Hi
It is so fast-paced. O.o
I like it in a way. Not gonna leave a review though...
Yes. Now that i look at it, the conflict has been solved very fast. But anyway, i don't want to make it longer so i won't edit it.
NO! That is not what I meant.
I just want to say it flows too fast...but that isn't wrong and related to how the conflict has been solved very fast...
> By the way, after looking at the title again, this isn't an argument. This is a quarrel.