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a critique on horse meat

by WWombat


da horse meat scandal woz bad innit? didnt go 2 tesco sins fam. dem horses been tweeted lk crap iz wy mans turnin into a veggie. more regulation iz needed 2 elimin8 dat dutty stupid scandal fam. da burgerz woz ment to b beef n cows fam but mandem got horse insted. dats dumb. mans momma said 'u need 2 woch da nuwz" and man did fam. saw dem horsez bein cut up fam and snaked on as cowz. Twas positively entrancing. innit fam. mandem hates dem horses. ridin a horse iz lk tryin 2 sell psp gamez in da park: aint no good 4 no one. anyway horses shuld b left alon dunkno fam.


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Sun Jan 26, 2014 7:09 am
Willard wrote a review...



What's up the ever holy pengtingking? Strange here again, and you keep on creating masterpiece after masterpiece
Bravo to you man.
I really do like this critique. You prove your point well. I would say the same if I was in your position. No one likes tainted horse meat. One problem I have, though its weird because I never have problems with your works, is calling people vegetables. Seriously man? That's a little really offensive
Overall, fantastic
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Keep writing
Stay groovy, my friend *Hair flips*
Paint the roses red, my dear




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Hello there, this was interesting to read but I do have a few suggestions.
I suggest that you do spell things right, I mean, I get your point with the language use and things, but it's so much easier to read and more appealing to people to review and read! :)
And perhaps try to stay more on topic, and make some really strong points, maybe even throw some fun statistics in there too :P
I'm most certainly going to keep an eye out for your work though, sorry if this was a bad review!
-CFG




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I'm sorry, but this was just...I don't even know what. I couldn't understand most of it. I found that you're trying to prove a point by using senseless similes and that really bothers me. PSP games in the park? No sense at all.

And the genre has nothing to do with what you've written.

I don't mean to be rude, but there was just nothing remotely right about this.

The only thing I found alright in this was that you spelled "positively entrancing" correctly.

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Mon Jan 06, 2014 3:51 pm
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Renard says...



Hello.

Amidst the 'street' language I think you make some really good points about an important issue here. :D
I like the way you put your own views into this piece.
I really enjoyed reading this critique.
Well done.

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