Young Writers Society

What's up the ever holy pengtingking? Strange here again, and you keep on creating masterpiece after masterpiece
Bravo to you man.
I really do like this critique. You prove your point well. I would say the same if I was in your position. No one likes tainted horse meat. One problem I have, though its weird because I never have problems with your works, is calling people vegetables. Seriously man? That's a little really offensive
Overall, fantastic
Strange gives you..
Bob Saget
Great job
Keep writing
Stay groovy, my friend *Hair flips*
Paint the roses red, my dear

Hello there, this was interesting to read but I do have a few suggestions.
I suggest that you do spell things right, I mean, I get your point with the language use and things, but it's so much easier to read and more appealing to people to review and read!
And perhaps try to stay more on topic, and make some really strong points, maybe even throw some fun statistics in there too
I'm most certainly going to keep an eye out for your work though, sorry if this was a bad review!
-CFG

I'm sorry, but this was just...I don't even know what. I couldn't understand most of it. I found that you're trying to prove a point by using senseless similes and that really bothers me. PSP games in the park? No sense at all.

And the genre has nothing to do with what you've written.

I don't mean to be rude, but there was just nothing remotely right about this.

The only thing I found alright in this was that you spelled "positively entrancing" correctly.

-DarkHeart

Hello.

Amidst the 'street' language I think you make some really good points about an important issue here.
I like the way you put your own views into this piece.
I really enjoyed reading this critique.
Well done.