Published February 7, 2014
In BirthdayHangman: The Early Writings (January-February 2014)
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.
my momma lks dis bnd calld da beetles. dey are dead fam. der songs r samy n non-imagianatvie. der albumz r ded. some shite bout a hard days night. dafuq? dat makes no sens fam. wtf? how bout beetles 4 sale? r dey prozzies? wham iz beter, dat song bout wakin up b4 yu gogo. dat song bout hldin ur hand iz well mingin fam. or dat album bout bein the corporal of a halapeno pepper or summin. ruber soul is dead. i dont wanna b a day trippr, i aint dat clumsy. i h8 da 60z. da windows or da doorz, whatevs der name iz, i h8 dem.
i also h8 dat paul guy. he got an island wid his 1-legged pirate weif. dunkno fam.
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Hello. I suppose I am here to review this.... script? Anyways, I'm SecreteJournalist reviewing for 'Majestic Icicles' on an lovely review day!
Now, I must say, I had to read this several times before I understood it. I'm not exactly one to text like this, let alone type out an work for YWS in this format. But I suppose it's... good... to see variety. I sense some humor, sarcasm, and upmost demand in this work. I will agree with you, I'm not a big fan of the beetles so I had to hide a smirk while reading this work.
This part especially made me laugh;
It was just so sarcastic yet demanding, I couldn't help but laugh!
I mean, this is definitely something..... out there. It shows a different perspective on a thing, such as the beetles, that most people aren't used to seeing.
There isn't much else for me to review here! I must say, thanks for letting us read something... different. It was strangely enjoyable to read, I even giggled a few times at the sarcasm that rang throughout this. I'd like to read more of these diverse works of yours!
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w0w such amaze
so inspiration
keep ritin yeh
I can't breathe. Oh my God.
*applauds*
Hey, uh, Pengtingking? Is that correct? Anywho, Strange here again to read your great works. I love your subtle commentary on the world. You are sarcastic, and show yourself in a demanding tone. Yes, this is obviously bologna, but just the statement (Don't hate me for this) but I was in the car today, going to the store. The song "Live and Let Die" was playing. I stated a classical music fact to my dad. "My favorite Bond theme." My dad answers back with "I never thought Guns N' Roses did a Bond theme." I corrected my dad, saying it was Paul. My dad isn't a big fan of the beetles. The yellow submarine? He was a big fan of Paul though and so is his friends. There are some songs of Beetles that I'm not a big fan of, but they did have some great songs like "I Want To Hold Your Hand." It's how we stand, right?
Also, T0sh shouldn't be talking because he isn't use to you.
Overall, great job.
Strange gives you...
No rating.
Great job.
Keep writing
Stay groovy
I didn't understand a word you said... But I text in full words and proper sentences so who am I to criticize?
Beautiful.
Do I need to call the Chatspeak Assasins? Yes, I do.
Huh? Just leave.
You leave as this guy is a MODERN GENIUS
Wake up.
What was that? Oh yeah, maybe if you had a sense of what this work means you'll get it
I hate The Beatles too.
Nice work.