i DON’T KNOW WHY,
BUT i FEEL AS IF
SOMETHING’S WRONG.
wHISPERING FEELS LIKE YELLING.
yelling feels like whispering.
eVEN THOUGH THIS IS LEGIBLE,
IT FEELS
MOST UNUSUAL.
aLMOST AS IF kIKI LOOKS LOUD
AND bUBA LOOKS SOFT-SPOKEN.
Oh wait, caps lock was on the whole time.
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Hey Toast!!!!
I really love this poem! I like how the letters usually capitalized like "I" were lowercase. That was pretty smart. The yelling really does feel like a whisper and the whisper does feel like someone is yelling in my face! Good job on this!! Stay amazing!!!
Love, the one and only Hop
This is awesome, I'm seconding the short and sweet.
Also, on a random side note, just from seeing the title before I'd read the actual poem, I feel like it could be the title of a hard rock/metal song XD
PS: I just realised why the first letter of some of the lines is lowercase, that's clever
Short and sweet. Love it! Honestly, it is so relatable. I love the format and how you wrote it, very good! As AlexWrites said, hits me as goofy and creative. The end sentence is funny too! I used to get so annoyed when I type and accidentally hit caps lock like THIS AND WHEN I DO THIS, I PRESS SHIFT AND IT turns BaCk INTO tHis lol. Happy Writing! XD ;D
This is some crisp writing! A simple idea, worded well.
Loved these lines in particular as entire capitalisations imitate a shout, standing out from the flow of running words. The vibe of the lines is switched due to the caps lock, an interesting thought put to use!
With all the AI talk going on recently, this is one of the things I feel it can never replicate. Obvious and unexplained things we feel in our gut. Because how in the world do you explain to AI that Buba is supposed to feel loud, while Kiki comes across as rather soft. Nothing beats the human factor, does it?
Overall, I found this to be an innovative work. Something you end up writing when you feel a tad goofy. Still, it hits the mark!
Hehe. Well played!
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