Give me thee a Skibidi
On my own to Ohio
Phantoms mask the Fanum tax
This world gacks at the Rizzlermaxx
Opening lines to terrible times
What's happening to this generation unfolding
We complain all the time about Things that're out of line
No way we say to Jose in vacay
Who probably doesn't even know that he's in this poem (sorry Jose)
But looking back there's something we lack
Which are memories that we hide in treasuries
We were immature too as we joked about loo
So why should we judge what kids say
when to our parents too hold we a grudge that won't fade away
So let all the skibidi out for ye to be
yelling gyatt on top of a teeny yacht
When we're free of ye ol' dank memes
Truly then will our fruits be borne well
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Peak
This is was beautiful. I accented to the heavens when I read this.
“Yelling gyatt on top of a yacht” is such a lovely line. I cried when I saw this.
Shakespeare wishes he could write something so peak.
I showed this to Jack Black and he exploded Pluto because of the beauty.
Good job!
Yea this is so peak 🥹! Anyways OMG IT TURNS HEAVENLY IN THE MIDDLE! What beautiful words. right.. Anyways even with that ITS STILL SOMEHOW AMAZING! :3 I can't seem to figure out what ye ol' is- I think I'm losing brain cells lol- Anyways WOWIE WOWIE WOWIES!!!
Hi toast... Uhm... Okay so I wanted to review something, and I have no clue how I've gotten here but... ToT Well, I feel like, really lazy right now so
(Also, I have like ten minutes before school gets out so I'm going to try and make this pretty quick). Okay, let's just hop right in (hah get it? i'm so funny)~~~
To start, I think that the title and the poem work well together. It's not because the poem is bad, it's just because of all the random slang that is dictated as bad and has a negative connotation (woah big words there) in general.
The word choice in this poem was.......... uhm. It was amazing(?)! I do think you didn't use some of these correctly though... I would recommend how to use them but just no
I do like the rhyming scene in here though!! Like, it's not rhyming every line, but you can tell there are some places where it does rhyme! This really helps with the flow of the poem overall!
I am curious though... What the CRAP is a "Rizzlermaxx" I'm fourteen, but I don't think I've ever heard that word... Do I want to know what it means?
I like how you transition just a bit to like idk like sorrow I want to say? Like it feels like you are just barely showing a bit of empathy and seriousness when you say:
And then it just goes back to... that beautiful language ToT
Overall, this was an interesting read... If YWS had a favorites file, this would be in it, trust.
Love,
Hop
(I am uncomfortable with how many commas I used in this review.)
well, hop, thank you, for, such, a great, review! honestly idk what a rizzlermaxx is either, but its just something i assume exists bc the word max is a suffix that can be put at the end of a word to mean something new like looksmax sleepmax, so rizzlermaxxing is just maxxing your rizzler capabilities no cap frfr.
(btw, the rhymes are contained within the line through assonance and consonance as in Give me thee a skibidi having the rhyme withing the sentence)
"Maxxing your rizzler capabilities" sob
This is. . . unlike any poem I have ever read. The use of modern language in rhyme is truly a feat, and the expression of theme is surprisingly well put across. The rhyme scheme was actually apparent and cohesive.
"No way we say to Jose in vacay/ Who probably doesn't even know that he's in this poem (sorry Jose)"
This was actually kind of funny I'm crying.
All in all, a very very very enlightening poem. Be proud.
This poem is truly GOATed
Unironically the assonance and consonance are pretty great
This was such a hilariously awful poem. The vibes it gives off are great, showing that while current brain rot memes are indeed immature and often annoying or frustrating, our parents more than likely thought the same as all of us were growing up.
Hell, I even look back at some of the things I did and cringe at myself. The “Sorry Jose” line adds a really funny touch as well.
Keep up the great work!
Hallo. I am going to do a short review because I am at school
Oh dear me. I love the poem, and I love the vibes it gives off. I've always hated brainrot, and frankly it gets on my nerves whenever I hear or see it, but I love the way you worked it into this poem. I enjoyed how it conveyed that even though this stuff is immature, we were making memories, and we should embrace that.
I laughed at this line. I love the humor in it, and the lightheartedness.
Anyway I would review more but I have no time so I just really enjoyed this you did a great job!
-Ash
This was indeed a terribly funny poem. Being chronically online I understand where this is coming from. I like the your way of discussing about these themes and honestly I don't know what to complain about lol.
This is quite a funny little poem. I like the pivot, from the start asking us what is wrong to reminding the reader we all did things that sounded silly when we were younger. I think it could flow a little better from line to line but overall it was an enjoyable short read.