
-Izumi-
The circular symbol blinked one more time before the display turned blank. I spared it only a glance, too busy catching my breath. “Now, it is up to you, to decide your destiny,” it read.
With shaking fingers, I reached up and fixed my hat. Around me, the other three children picked themselves up off the floor. I made a face as a blond boy finally removed his elbow from my gut. He didn’t even apologize. Rude.
The elevator opened and the others wasted no time to head into the freedom beyond. I didn’t like any of them anyway. Bracing myself against the elevator’s wall, I pushed myself to my feet. I hesitated with a hand curled around my phone. How to describe what had happened?
Since pressing “yes” to the mysterious message, my phone had sent me all over Tokyo! The time limit had been so steep; I barely made my connecting trains! At least, I finally reached my destination: the sub-basement of Shibuya Station. I didn’t even know there were so many lower levels, much less elevators that plummeted at train-like speeds! I was starting to think that something supernatural was going on.
That at least cheered me up a little. Finally, something interesting was happening! I made my way through the elevator doors.

Before me was a vast, circular train station with at least six trains waiting for us to come aboard. I pressed my lips together. Guess it was open season on supernatural events today. It looked like the mysterious woman had called half the district. My elevator buddies were long gone, lost in all the kids milling about. I stayed back and tried to figure out what to do next.
The last message said I should take a train at 18:00 from this station. Several mounted message boards proclaimed that every train present would leave at that time. No destination mentioned. Well... if that wasn’t mysterious. I checked my phone again, but the display was still blank. Did that mean any train was okay?
I walked down the stairs and watched the other kids amble around the trains, chatting. Everyone here got that message, and most arrived in groups. I rolled my eyes. Weirdos. I wouldn’t want to be around so many others. Most of them didn’t even look like they wanted to board a train which gave me a leg up. Honestly, I couldn’t wait to find out where this was going!
I settled on a rusty brown train that wasn’t receiving any attention. Perfect. But when I made it to the door, helpfully opening with a depressurized hiss, I still hesitated. Everything that brought me here came crashing down on me: the desperate wish to break the routine, the call of adventure.
I stuffed my phone into my skirt’s pocket and entered an almost-empty compartment. The only other occupant was a girl my age. She sat across the aisle rapidly typing into her phone.
My mood still wasn’t the best, especially after that crowd outside, but I clung to the hope for something different. I settled in across from the other girl.
I was all for ignoring her when she suddenly put her phone away. She looked up and greeted me with a friendly “Hello!”
My startled “Hi.” came out a little more reserved.
I seemed to have stumbled upon a chatty person, since she continued, “I’m Keisaki Kanbara, nice to meet you! But well, you can call me Kei, for short.”
I shifted to a more comfortable position on the yellow cushions and introduced myself as well. “I’m Izumi Orimoto.” I paused, thinking back to my two-year stay in my mother’s home country. “But you can call me Zoe.”
Keisaki took the uncommon nickname in stride and said, “Great! Good to have you on board!” She made a grand gesture at the empty train and giggled to herself.
Well, this was a more positive reception than I expected. Ever since I came back to Japan, I’ve had a tough time getting along with kids my age. As if I’d brought back some kind of social disease. I gave Keisaki a more thorough look. She had unruly brown hair, shoved into two short ponytails, and tanned skin. Her shorts were of an unidentifiable brownish colour—the closest comparison I came to was khaki. Next to her was a red and yellow rucksack.
She followed my gaze and grinned. “Be prepared. I really didn’t know what to expect. So I brought some general stuff, like pen and paper.”
Now that she mentioned it, I hadn’t prepared anything. I also hadn’t expected to board a train to wherever we were going, so that was only fair.
I shrugged. “Good thinking.”
“I hope this is going to be good,” Keisaki went on. “I gave up cake for this trip.”
I scoffed and said with mock offense, “How dare you!”
When she frowned, I almost regretted saying anything. But then she just rolled with it. “Well, it wouldn’t have been for free. I would’ve had to endure my younger brother whining. Kinda sours the experience. What about you? Do you have any siblings?”
There was just something radiant in the way Keisaki talked. I couldn’t help but be drawn in. I found myself grinning back, and for the first time since coming to Japan, I didn’t feel left out.
So, we sat in that empty compartment, waiting for destiny, and talked. Keisaki had two brothers, but (as she admitted after I told her that I envied her) felt disconnected to both. In return, I told her my mother was in Italy and that I’d spent the last two years at my grandparents’ house. She moved to my side so I could show her some pictures of Italian beaches. She’d never even left the prefecture!
We got stuck on our favourite sports. Keisaki was an avid basketball player and me? Her mistake for asking. I enlightened her about the powerful freedom in running. I was gushing about the feeling of wind in your face when the door snapped open. We looked up expectantly at the heavy-set boy climbing up the stairs. I nearly made a face at his atrocious blue jumpsuit. He lost several million points with me from the start for giving us that look. He followed it with a wink and a “It must be my lucky day!” Could boys our age already be sleezy?
Either Keisaki missed the vibes, or she was more willing to put up with macho behaviour, since she remained friendly. “Hi there,” she said before introducing herself as Kei. “And this is... Zoe,” she finished mischievously.
I was tempted to roll my eyes but just nodded. “Hi.”
“I’m Junpei Shibayama,” the boy said, his grin splitting his face in half, and his tone suggesting he’d let us in on a big secret.
“That won’t do,” said Keisaki, throwing him off his game. Almost by itself, a smug grin appeared on my face. “You need a nickname. Zoe, help me out here.” She motioned for him to sit down anywhere and turned to me. My expression fell and I shot her a horrified look. I did not expect to be put on the spot like that!
“Uhm, I don’t know?” I said, frazzled. Several unpleasant nicknames at the boy’s physique sprang to my mind but I didn’t want to be cruel. Come on Izumi, I thought to myself. Don’t judge from the first appearance!
“Hey now! You can make ‘Zoe’ out of ‘Izumi’, you gotta have some idea for the man of the hour!” Keisaki said. She shot me a very meaningful look.
I stared back in surprise. Then, the grin crept back onto my face. This could be fun!
We spent the next couple of minutes trying to settle on what to call the brown-haired wannabe-womanizer. He sat down on the bench opposite us. Keisaki continued her little side-comments and confirmed my suspicion that we were on the same page. Who would’ve thought having someone else to share in the joy of making fun of deserving victims could be so entertaining?
“How about Jun? I mean, Kei is just short for Keisaki after all...”
“Nah, that’s much too ordinary for a bombastic personality like ‘Mr. Hero’ over there.” My overseas connection kicked in again, and I giggled. “How about JP? Jun Pei, see?”
“JP? Hm... that does have a nice ring to it.”
“You can’t change my name just because you feel like it!” Junpei shouted, his frustration painting his face all red. “There is nothing wr—”
The train door interrupted his angry outburst, sliding open with an aggressive hiss. Through the opening gap, some punks shoved a crying little boy into our compartment. Before I could process this, the train came alive. I hastily grabbed a handhold as it started to rumble away from the platform into a dark tunnel.

Keisaki was immediately on her feet. She stood at the window and raised her gloved fist at the two boys outside responsible for the blubbering mess on our carpet. “Seriously, what jerks!”
I inspected the tiny boy with slight concern. All I could see was an enormous balloon-like hat, and shaking shoulders clad in a white T-shirt.
I traded an awkward glance with my companions, but no one was ready to deal with the kid. Finally, Keisaki and I teamed up on Junpei: “Do something!”
He sighed in dramatic defeat and walked over to the little boy, rummaging around in his overalls’ many pockets. His approach was met with a loud wail and stuttering protests that sounded like, “I didn’t even want to be here!” which came to a sudden halt when Junpei presented a chocolate bar.
Keisaki sat next to me again, still grumbling about bullies. She perked up after the chocolate calmed things down. “Awesome, JP!”
“My name isn’t JP!” he protested just as the new boy said with wide, star-struck eyes, “Thank you, JP!”
Keisaki gave me a victorious grin and I shook my head in amusement.
“Anyway,” Junpei said while he helped his charge to his feet, “the annoying girl is Kei, and the blonde one is Zoe. What’s your name?”
The boy, who had to be at least three years younger than us, gave us a watery look. It lasted only a moment, then he stared forlornly at the chocolate in his hands. “Tomoki Himi... And I... I didn’t...”
Keisaki seemed to anticipate more crying and was desperate to keep the peace. “Then we’ll call you Tommy, okay?”
“Tommy?” he repeated, confused.
“Yeah, we could be Team Nickname and—” she began, but at that moment the train left the tunnel and went into overdrive.
The sudden speed change flung us out of our seats, and we crashed against the compartment’s back wall. The impact forced my phone right out of my hand, and I was sure I hit my head when I sailed past a support rail. Blinking furious tears out of my eyes, I unfolded from the ground. The rest of the compartment was in various states of disarray, little Tomoki probably doing best, what with being cushioned against Junpei.
“Ow,” I said, rubbing the back of my head and reaching for my escaped phone. My coordination was lacking, probably because my vision was still fuzzy from the fall. Just as I finally had the darn thing in my hand, checking if it survived the rough shove about as well as I did, something completely extraordinary happened.
Yes, weirder than the ten-story elevator drop or the fact that I went on a train ride into the unknown. With wide eyes, I stared as the phone I’ve had for a year now, started glowing. Not just its display, the entire thing!
In a matter of moments, a swarm of sparkling particles washed over the phone and transformed into something… else. “What…?” I whispered. I drew the device closer to inspect its metallic casing. It was lavender and pink, colours that immediately spoke to me on a personal level. This wasn’t a phone, not anymore, even if it still had a small display and two buttons.

I was still working through these feelings of wonder and… purpose, so it fell onto the others to make a move.
Keisaki, with an athlete’s grace, was first to spring to her feet, waving around her own device. “What just happened?”
I stared at the red and black thing in her hand and quickly checked over Tommy and JP, the latter helping the kid to his feet. As I expected, their phones had also left their boring existence behind in favour of an overhaul and colour change. They all had the same small display screen now, and two buttons.
To our collective shock, a familiar voice resonated from the devices. “This is your D-Tector.”
It was the woman who had herded us to the train station with her vague messages about destiny! The... D-Tector even displayed her circular symbol!
“Welcome to the Digital World.”
For an introduction to a new world entirely separate from our own, it was honestly underwhelming. It didn’t stop me from rushing to the window and staring out into the vast nothingness surrounding the train. We definitely weren’t in Tokyo anymore! For as far as the eye could see, there was a featureless black void with only our single train track riding over it. White fog congealed over support beams that seemed to end only in darkness. Not even the sun, shining brightly out of a clear blue sky, could lighten such blackness. It was as if the land below us had vanished and forgot to take the rails with it.
Before I could worry about what was awaiting us, a grey speck appeared in the distance, the first sign of solid ground. As the train approached, large metal houses distinguished themselves. Smoke clouds rose from the furnaces deep within, hovering over the entire city. The airspace wasn’t as empty as before and we lay eyes on some of this strange world’s inhabitants: just outside the window, a swarm of white blobs passed us.
“Okay,” Keisaki said, bunching up one of her ponytails in a nervous hand. She fell into a seat next to me, so I sat down as well, looking at her expectantly. But her attention was out the window and she seemed rather pale to me.

I drummed my fingers in agitation while JP pulled Tommy to a seat. We all cringed at the little boy’s sniffles. Nobody said anything until our train came to a halt in the metal city. A welcoming sign in Japanese informed us that we arrived at the ‘Terminal of Flames’. A bit of an unexpected name after the black void. I followed the others to the door which opened with little fanfare. None of us felt compelled to move, unsure of our situation and the metal platform just below us. A curious assortment of creatures crowded around the train. They were tiny, grey balls that did not even make it past my knees despite raising their angled ears in curiosity. Unblinkingly, their sea of red eyes peered into our compartment and suddenly, I was even less inclined to move. Especially when they started whispering amongst themselves in flawless Japanese.

The creatures here spoke Japanese! Grey fluff balls that could talk! I might have taken a step back at their curious speculations about our very “humanness”.
Sadly, someone took offense to our hesitation. A wave of pressure from inside the train pushed us onto the platform, the creatures dispersing with hooting shrieks. The pain of landing in a heap for the third time today had me too stunned to fully realize what just happened. Thankfully, the train itself quickly nullified my lapse in deduction. It slowly drifted backwards while voicing its displeasure with our careful approach to the new world. “I hope you weren’t planning to camp out inside. I got other places to be!”
The train could talk too. I could only stare, gobsmacked, as its four yellow eyes regarded us with disappointment.
It said a few other things, that it was called Trailmon and that it was a digimon and the like. But I was still stuck on the fact that we spent the entire train ride inside a sentient being and nobody told us!
“Well, that’s all from me. Have fun at the Flame Terminal,” Trailmon concluded. It was slowly backing away to the series of sidetracks just off the … coast? Cliff? The black void past the Flame Terminal.
“Wait, wait, wait! Where are you going?” Keisaki found her voice first. “How are we supposed to get back home?”
Seemed like she already had her priorities straight.
“How should I know? That wasn’t in the deal.” Trailmon told her, rolling its four eyes. It slowed down for a moment, making a clicking sound from the back of its very metallic throat. Oh right, did I forget to mention that this Trailmon had a gigantic mouth below those eyes? With extremely sharp teeth?

“You know what? There’s one thing you could do. Collect the Spirits of the Legendary Warriors. That might help,” Trailmon added, his voice growing fainter as he moved away.
I had no idea what he meant by ‘Spirits’ but it seemed obvious to me that if we wanted to get back home, he as a talking train would be our best shot.
This wasn’t lost on Tommy, who had been suspiciously quiet. Now the little boy saw his only hope of getting out of this involuntary adventure disappearing over the horizon.
With a speed I didn’t expect of him, he shot to his feet and pushed past the horde of knee-high fluff balls. His frantic eyes never left the retreating train digimon. I froze with alarm. Tommy’s escape would end abruptly at the bottomless chasm waiting beyond the platform!
Keisaki evidently thought Tommy wouldn’t realize his imminent demise and was on her feet just a few seconds after him. “Get back here, you little idiot! Zoe! Help me catch him!”
Honestly, without her calling me to action, I would have watched the events unfold in horror. As it was, I cursed the slight restriction of my skirt and rushed after the fleeing kid. Years of consistently being top of my class in sprinting finally paid off as I overtook Keisaki and easily caught up to Tommy before he even came close to the dangerous cliff.
“What were you thinking?!” I heard myself shriek. He clearly wasn’t thinking anything useful. He was crying and fighting my hold and only when Keisaki joined me in my efforts to drag him back were we making any progress.
“Seriously, are you stupid?” Keisaki shouted. Her harsh tone took me aback and I let go of the kid, who had given up on fulfilling his secret desire of becoming a high wire artist. Now he just stared at the fuming Keisaki in fear as she tried to shake some sense into him. “You could’ve killed yourself! Didn’t you notice the gigantic flipping chasm down there?!”
“Hey, enough!” I stepped between the two. I had gotten along surprisingly well with Keisaki, but it occurred to me that I had just met the girl an hour ago. I really didn’t want to take Tommy’s side since I didn’t do well with constant wailing, but something in the way Keisaki treated him rubbed me the wrong way. “He’s just a kid!”
JP and the horde of grey creatures finally reached our position, and he frowned at the argument. My reaction had Keisaki guiltily taking a step back. I just crossed my arms with a hard look.
Again it fell to Junpei to deal with Tommy, and he produced another bar of chocolate. “Are you okay?”
Tommy said nothing but accepted the treat.
Keisaki awkwardly wrung her hands and finally offered, “You want to go home, right? Well, the train mentioned that collecting spirits would bring us back home, right?” She finally acknowledged the little “digimon” around us who were eyeing the chocolate with awe. “Uh... hi... Do you happen to know what spirits the, uhm, train talked about?”
One of the grey balls with weirdly shaped ears... hands... started hopping up and down. “Of course we know what Spirits are!”
Another one, identical to the first, continued just as excitably, “They are the remains of the Legendary Warriors!” They would have continued their explanation if it weren’t for a sudden flash of heat behind us.
I spun around to the other side of the platform where the trail began its way across the chasm and gasped. The entire area around the edge was alight with green fire! We were quite a distance off, but its scorching heat made my skin itch.
“What is that?” JP shouted, taking several steps back.
The group of little grey digimon huddled together and fearfully watched a four-legged shadow stalking around the flames. One of them whispered, “That’s Cerberumon!”
“He’s looking for the Spirits, too!”
“He’s been here for days!”
“And he keeps destroying the town!”
That sounded utterly terrible. I really couldn’t deal with that after Tommy flirted with death! I didn’t know what to do or say.
Keisaki stared at the fire with a burning expression but felt my gaze and turned around. Her expression changed and made room for rational concern.
“That’s horrible,” she said hastily, “but I don’t really want to run into that thing! We need to get away before it comes after us! Where can we go?”
The digimon formed a giant heap for a private discussion, and Kei tapped her foot impatiently. She constantly looked back to the fire; I couldn’t help but copy her. I couldn’t see the stalking shadow anymore.
“We’ll bring you to Elecmon if you give us some of that stuff!” one of the grey balls said, jumping away from the pile. She eyed Junpei with a dangerous gleam in her red eyes.
“Huh?” the boy said, blinking at being singled out. A swarm of hungry eyes followed his flailing arm and the chocolate bar it held.
“Just do it JP!” Keisaki hissed, looking two seconds away from just pushing him towards the digimon.
He scratched the back of his head but the increasing heat from the platform’s edge spurred him into motion. He handed over one chocolate bar to the cheers of the crowd.
“Okay, then just follow us!” one of the little grey puffs called, hopping off toward a stairwell further back along the platform.
As we descended, the grey creatures introduced themselves as Pagumon. They lead us deeper into the Flame Terminal, further and further away from the rampaging Cerberumon and its dangerous green fire. It took us a good five minutes until we reached a quieter part of the town. JP had to hand over a second chocolate bar to keep the little Pagumon entertained once we stopped in front of a metal house with flowerpots on the windowsills.
Kei knocked on the door, still utterly confused as to what was going on and why exactly we were here. But hey, at least we weren’t in any danger of catching fire anymore!
The door opened and for half a second, the hope of seeing another human flared. Then, I grimaced when instead, a red-furred snout appeared in the frame.
“...Hello? Oh. You are humans!” a
striped digimon with long ears and a magnificent tail exclaimed in surprise.
She reminded me a bit of a carnivorous species of rabbit. Without letting us
get a word in edgewise, she turned back into the house and shouted, “Dear!
Reheat the soup! We’ve got guests!”
That’s how we left the Pagumon behind and ended up around the dinner table of the friendly ‘Elecmon’ couple—it was hard to say “no” to the well-meaning digimon. A few of the white blobs I saw on the train ride, Poyomon, lived here too and fluttered around us. Elecmon fondly introduced them as her children, yet they didn't look at all alike. Maybe they went through some kind of metamorphosis like a caterpillar into a butterfly? I amused myself with the thought of Poyomon spinning a cocoon and emerging as Elecmon.
Keisaki watched the husband stirring a large pot on a vintage stove. “But... why are you helping us?”
We just stumbled in, and they wanted to feed us, no questions asked?
“You’re the first humans I’ve ever seen!” the wife said, going around the table placing soup plates and a table mat in the middle.
Since nobody else seemed likely to say anything (I certainly wouldn’t! The entire situation was just too strange), Keisaki cleared her throat. “Uh… for us, this is all new. Hehe… Is that why you’re just…” She gesticulated at the table and finished lamely, “Giving us food?”
The Elecmon wife paused, the last soup plate clutched in her dull claws. One of her ears gave a little twitch.
“Cherubimon wants us to believe that everyone is an enemy.” A faraway look appeared in her eyes. “It’s awful what’s happening on the Metal Continent.”
Her Poyomon children chirped in sympathy.
“But!” the Elecmon husband said from the stove. He opened a drawer so his wife could retrieve some spoons. “We won’t be playing into Cherubimon’s hands. Flame Terminal is the last city of Fire Country and we’re proud of our hospitality. Now, have some of our famous tomato soup!” He brought the pot around and placed it on the table mat.
“Who’s Cherubimon?” I asked, frowning. I moved out of the way so the Elecmon wife (that was super annoying, didn’t they have names?) could ladle out the soup.
“Oh, of course you wouldn’t know, how silly of me,” she said. Her tone was a mixture of long-suffering and disturbingly cheerful. “Cherubimon is the mad leader of the Digital World. Our very own Angel of Wisdom and Truth! He’s destroying everything to fight the rebels on the Metal Continent, but don’t you worry! You should be safe here.”
The reality of leaving our human world behind came down on me. The spoon shook in my hand. Things had been happening so fast, I’d barely had any time to think. The situation still felt surreal even with the soup’s spicy flavour in my mouth. We were in a city of sentient creatures that didn’t even remotely resemble humans! It was too much to take, and I was really glad about the food. While I was withdrawing, the others at least were warming up to our hosts.
Surprisingly, JP was asking the most questions, and listening with rapt attention when the Elecmon elaborated on that war on the Metal Continent, far across the ocean. How was he able to just absorb all this? I would probably never know!
One of the Poyomon ignored him and landed next to my plate, fixing me with shining eyes. “Why did you come here?”
I swallowed awkwardly and avoided his eyes. I couldn’t speak for the others, but it appeared to me like we all just had nothing better to do at home. Except for Tommy, who was actively looking for a fast ticket back to our world.
Thankfully, JP came up with a better answer and held up his yellow and blue D-Tector (its design neatly fit his outfit, very thoughtful of the higher entity out there who gave us these things). “Someone called us here.”
This sparked a clutter of excited conversation as every digimon present burst to voice their opinion. Finally, the Elecmon husband called the younger digimon to order and then asked us, “Then you came here to save us?”
I blinked. What made him think of that?
“Save you from what?” Keisaki asked, just as confused.
“From Cherubimon, of course!” Elecmon answered heatedly. “We just told you that he’s the one destroying everything! Did you see the chasm outside? That’s his work!”
I didn’t see how this explained anything, but it clearly was a huge problem. “That’s terrible... But how can we help?”
Considering that Cherubimon apparently had the ability to create country-spanning bottomless pits, I failed to see how anyone could stop him.
The hopeful smiles of the Elecmon family faded, and the Poyomons’ jelly-like bodies seemed to shrink in front of my eyes.
“We don’t know,” the Elecmon wife finally admitted. Then her ears perked up. “But you must have come here for a reason!”
“Maybe we did...” Keisaki said. “Maybe we really were sent here to help!” She looked at me with an unreadable expression. To me, it almost looked like she wanted to prove herself. “But...” she trailed off and glanced at Tommy, who balled the fabric of his T-shirt in his hands and wouldn’t meet anyone’s eyes. “Isn’t there a way for Tommy to go back to our world?”
The little boy looked up, hands ceasing their endless kneading.
“I mean, didn’t the Trailmon say something? What are these Spirit things?” she continued. The explanation of the Pagumon had been a bit lackluster, and honestly, I’d already forgotten all that happened back then except the green fire. I didn’t need to worry about being out of the loop though.
The Poyomon were falling all over themselves in their excitement to explain, until their father quickly silenced them. “Calm down, my children! The humans don’t know our history. We need to start from the beginning!” He pointed at the wall opposite from the entrance. A small altar was mounted there. It showed a circle of stylized kanji surrounding an angel.
“In ancient times, the entire Digital World was at war. But the Great Angel Lucemon was powerful enough to stop the fighting. That’s her picture, in the middle. For a while, things were peaceful, but then the power she wielded made her corrupt and cruel. No one was able to oppose her until the Ten Legendary Warriors came along. You can see them represented by the ring of elements surrounding Lucemon here. They defeated Lucemon but lost their lives in the battle. Today only their Spirits remain, and these Spirits are said to have the power to make wishes come true!”
We remained silent through the explanation. I barely noticed that JP pulled a small notebook from his pockets and scribbled something down. I was trying to digest that we were not only in an entirely separate world, but that it had its own history of violence and magic.
“Alright,” said JP. He frowned profoundly, an unexpectedly thoughtful expression. “And the thing from earlier wants the Spirits, too? With the green fire?”
“You’ve seen Cerberumon? That brute has been snooping around the city for a week now,” Elecmon said disdainfully. “But he only recently became violent...”
“Well, then it’s settled, right?” Keisaki said, standing up. “We’re going to find the Spirits, get Tommy home and save the world!”
Putting it that way made it sound quite ridiculous, but the digimon present took it as an incentive to cheer.
Now I was frowning too. It wasn’t that I didn’t want to help. I just wasn’t sure if this was the way to do it. What would finding these Spirits even entail? How would we go about that? Still, I got up and followed the others outside. We lingered there for a moment longer, us humans from another world, and I was about to thank our generous hosts for their splendid (if spicy) meal when… Well. When Keisaki’s D-Tector had other plans. Its urgent beeping interrupted all conversation, and she drew it from her pocket in bewilderment.
The sight of a familiar circle greeted her. The female voice from before soon followed: “Embrace your destiny and find your Spirit.”
A hologram of a black and green grid took shape above the display of the device, a red dot marking our position and an arrow pointing to the location of the Spirit. At least, I thought it did. Oh so… that’s how we were going about finding these Spirits. Got it.
If only it would really be that easy, but we’d kind of forgotten something important. Humans in the Digital World just weren’t a very common sight… And prone to attract attention!
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"But Tikaya, these kids barely resemble Japanese children!" Shhh don't worry about it. We're actually dealing with the rarely-known nationality: "Digimon Protagonist"-Japanese!

1) What was your initial reaction to this Zoe section?
This is part 1 of 2 of Chapter 1 but ofc I come with questions xd
If you want to head directly to Chapter 1 part 2, then feel free to skip these
Spoiler
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
4) Did anything surprise you?
5) Are there any characters you especially liked in this? Why? Why not?
6) Or some you especially didn’t like? Why? Why not?
7) What are your thoughts on Zoe?
8 ) What are your thoughts on Kei?
9) What are your thoughts on JP and Tommy?
10) Do you already have an opinion on the group as a whole?
11) Were any things confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
12) On a scale from 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy this section?
13) On a scale from 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next section?
14) Where do you think the story will go next? Do you have any predictions?
Also why yes, this is a rewrite of Digimon Frontier. Feel free to watch along and predict where we're gonna go off the rails =D
HIIII I am back again. Couldn't keep away!!
I really love the characters. That is the strongest point of this chapter for me, and I am so excited to get to know them more throughout the story.
My thoughts/observations/suggestions whilst reading:
I think having it like:
It read: "Now, it is up to you to decide your destiny.”
On a separate line as well would make it more impactful
I had to double-check the prologue, but this is the first time the three other children are shown to be there too, so I think just saying 'Around me, three other children picked themselves up off the floor.' or something similar instead of 'the' which implies we had known about them before this moment. I see that a paragraph later it explains that some time has passed since the prologue but I was a little confused in this bit because she mentions that she doesn't like them and i'm like, HUH DIDN'T YOU JUST MEET? I DIDN'T GET TO SEE YOU MEET
This feels like it could have been a chapter by itself between this chapter and the prologue, which would have explained how/why these children met. I see someone else mentioned this in their review, and it made me wonder if either we don't need the Izumi section in the prologue and it jumps straight into action here and we get to know them after they have all met and been running around Tokyo OR the Izumi section of the prologue becomes chapter one and is expanded? Obviously you have an idea of where this is going (duh), but I don't, so it did feel a bit disorienting! But even so, the characterisation is very good so I don't mind for now.
Maybe 'lost amongst all the other kids milling about.'
Haha, love this. I like Izumi.
I think: But when I made it to the door, which opened with a helpfully depressurized hiss, I still hesitated. flows a little better. But i like the sensory detail here of the hiss.
hmm we haven't really learnt much about Izumi for this to land yet. We know some from the prologue, but not enough that this successfully pays off
i need whatever skirt she has that actually has pockets
I like her already. I will bring pens and paper EVERYWHERE.
Maybe: Now that she mentioned it, I realised that I hadn’t prepared anything.
I think I would have liked this exchange to actually happen in dialogue so we can get a glimpse of the relationship they are forming here!
I love the way you have introduced Junpei, the grin splitting his face in half is such a cool description
I would like some idea of what their house looks like! There's some nice details about the stove and pots and whats cooking a few sentences after this, but I am intrigued about this land (as someone who's never seen the show) so some description for the layman would be very nice
Also, would the Elecmon not be a bit more curious about these human children. Have they seen humans before and just never met them? Are they curious about the human world, too?
I don't actually mind the exposition here, but you could break it up with movement/description/action inbetween some of the sentences. Like pointing at different parts of the alter or maybe showing them another artifact.
Interesting that JP is the one taking notes!
To answer your questions:
1. I was a little disorented at the start but I did like being thrown right into the action! I love how all the characters are written, but Zoe seems to lack some of the characterisation we see in JP and Tommy that makes them a bit more memorable.
2. I really liked the train segment. It moved at a great pace, and I loved seeing all the characters interact.
3. Hmm... maybe just the first bit when i was confused. But not even cos it was bad i was just confused XD
4. I think just the digimon world itself was a nice surprise since i don't know anything about it, but especially the train having jaws!
5. I love poor little Tommy. He just wants to go home pls don't let anything bad happen to him
6. No one i disliked in particular!
7. She's got the bones of a good protagonist so far, and I like her internal thoughts about JP when he is first introduced and how she comes up with his nickname. I think some more of her personality could definitely shine through if some more dialogue was padded out during the part with Kei!
8. I agree with Rebel below about Kei, she seemed really fun to begin with and there are some more opportunities for this to shine throughout the chapter.
9. JP is interesting to me. The wannabe womaniser turned note-taking investigator; I love that he's the first one to kind of take the mission seriously, and that he tries to run after Tommy. I wouldn't have expected it from his character to beging with and i love that my expectations were challenged! And of course i have a soft spot for tommy.
10. I think so far i have not seen enough of their dynamic to fully form what I think, but given they have really only just met, I am excited to find out how they develop
11. I think it's been oversaid but the beginning was a little unclear. Other than that, no
12. 9.. no, genuinely 10. I am known to be too nice with my ratings but even with the suggestions i made, I really enjoyed this chapter and read it so quickly.
13. 10 definitely
14. Oooh well they are definitely on a quest to find these spirits so i predict thats where they are going to go next, to save this town from the Cerberumon perhaps. The ending seems to suggest as humans they may be attracting some unwanted attention soon!
<3
Hello Tikaya! Lim here again with some quick comments.
1) What was your initial reaction to this Zoe section?
I feel like Zoe is more of a thinker and maybe the kind of person that more cautious about new things, as opposed to someone like Kei. She seemed quite irritable with JP, probably because he leered at her, though she also seems to fixate on his weight/ physical appearance. She's also not very curious about the Digimon and seems to recoil from them a bit judging by her reaction to the wife (?) Elecmon.
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
I liked the first conversation between Kei and Zoe because it shows both their personalities and it's just cute to see Zoe make a friend.
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
Hmm I'm not sure I have least favourite parts in terms of the plot, but I did have a couple of comments on how some scenes are written. If the goal is for World of Souls to be easy to get into without having watched Digimon Frontiers, it might be good to avoid 'summarising' paragraphs like:
Parts like this leave me wondering "What questions did JP ask?" or "What's the Metal Continent, and how does Zoe feel about it?"
Hope this helps!
Of course this helps :3
Nice observation!I'm not yet sure how to make the rather long exposition-y scenes more palatable since we are gonna slowly, slowly explore what the Digital World is and what it means in the coming chapters. More in an "here's how this looks, and this is how the characters are rolling with it". What they learn here is not as relevant to the plot as what is to come, and Zoe's not capable of really retaining all this new information atm... (i.e. She's not rly having any other thoughts than being generally overwhelmed and confused)
That said, I might have gone too vague... Sigh... I must think abt how to approach this.
Establishing Kei and Zoe is the goal of this chapter, so I'm glad it worked (JP and Tommy, to an extend, too but it's fine if we only get their broad strokes. This is the Kei and Zoe chapter xd)
Thanks for the feedback :3
Hey Tika, Ik I was supposed to do this like 12 hours ago as the first thing I did when I woke up, I am doing this and the next review as the last thing I do before going asleep. I am just gonna answer the questions as you asked:
1) What was your initial reaction to this Zoe section?
Ah, it's a bit hard to say now that I just re-read it, but let me try my best to remember: I found it really freaking cool. It's also really cool to see how many of the core character traits of Zoe, JP, Kei, and Tommy were established in the very first chapter.
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
For the me of now, it's the character dialogue between the main cast and their introduction. For the me of when I first read this, it's almost definitely the lore drop (I kinda feel like JP now that I think about it).
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
For current me: My GOAT JP being a 'wannabe-womaniser' towards Kei and Zoe.
For the me back then: Kei came off as a bit annoying for some reason.
4) Did anything surprise you?
For the current me who is re-reading this: How well you managed to establish the core character traits of the main cast when I look back at it.
For the me back when I first read this: Not really, I remember some stuff of Digimon Frontiers even though I was more of an Adventures enthusiast.
5) Are there any characters you especially liked in this? Why? Why not?
Actually, Zoe was really likable in this chapter. Even for the me who first read this -- she came off as sweet, straight-headed, but also with problems of her own like the desire to attain true freedom (Eren might be rolling in his grave while I say this), even as an early teen/pre-teen.
6) Or some you especially didn’t like? Why? Why not?
Same answer as question 3.
7) What are your thoughts on Zoe?
Same answer as question 5.
8) What are your thoughts on Kei?
To be honest, even though she came off as somewhat annoying in my first read, she just comes off as a normal pre-teen/early teen now that I look at it. It's kinda natural to be burdened by your family responsibilities or trauma or just having a wrong perspective at something. She is also kinda funny with the whole nickname thing, and I am kinda disappointed not to see more of her fun side in the later chapters.
9) What are your thoughts on JP and Tommy?
Tommy came off to me as just a weak, bullied kid who is still good at his core and has a gentle behaviour overall.
JP came off as a big dick to me the first time I read it, but also resourceful and sorta intelligent (mostly because I too would have jumped in to understand more of a completely unknown world if I were dropped in one).
10) Do you already have an opinion on the group as a whole?
Average shounen group with Kei trying to assert herself as the main character, at least the me back me thought so.
11) Were any things confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
Not really, but I do want to know what happened to the rest of the children who were in the sub-basement of Shibuya station. Like, what are they up to, exactly? Did only these five (including Kouji later) become the Chosen Ones? Are they in some other worlds or other Digimon timelines? Or did they just go away?
12) On a scale from 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy this section?
As a first chapter, this was pretty strong. I would give it an 8.5/10
13) On a scale from 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next section?
Whatever 'I have already read the next section but I am gonna re-read anyway because it was pretty fun' is on that scale. *winks*
14) Where do you think the story will go next? Do you have any predictions?
It's a bit redundant now, but I did think (and know, because I sorta remembered my stuff) that a character or two would come soon enough and one of these children would receive a cool new powerup called a digivolution!
That's all!
Yours sincerely,
The Rebel
Howdy again! Let's jump right in!
At first I thought this was a direct continuation of the last scene of the prologue (which felt like an odd thing to do) but it seems like it's moreso a clever flash-forward. I realized this at the mention of the "other children" because Izumi seemed to be alone at the end of the prologue!
Other children suggests that Izumi is themselves a child. Definitely changes my perspective of them! From the little I had, I was picturing late teens/early adulthood.
Huh?? So the phone itself teleported Izumi to different places around the city? Or had the phone given orders of where Izumi needed to go next?
I'm definitely feeling disoriented right now. I was intrigued with the beginning of the chapter, where I'm thrown into the middle of four children getting up from the floor, but before I can get my bearings and really "see" this scene or begin to wonder why they were on the floor to begin with, I'm whisked off to... all over Tokyo?? It's a lot to take in!
I also noticed that the narration suddenly has several exclamation points after not having any at all. That, too, felt jarring in terms of character voice.
Love this character building detail!
Ok, definitely starting to feel more grounded now that we're on the train and we're having a 1-on-1 character interaction. This I can follow!
:,)
Aw, I love to see that Izumi's comfortable enough with her new friend to talk about her passion!
Whew, this pacing is quick! I'm having a harder time concentrating because of it. I'd start by splitting this paragraph up into a few smaller ones and then just take a little more time describing each scene.
I'm kinda getting the sense that because this is fanfiction of existing characters/scenes, the fast pace is justified because other fans will already be able to picture these details in their head perfectly. But for me, someone who knows nothing about this world, it's all a tad overwhelming! I was able to follow much more easily when the characters were being introduced, especially Keisaki, but now by comparison these other new things just feel rushed. So I guess it mostly depends on who your intended audience is.
Oooooooh!
Love this nuance!
How does a rabbit-like creature place plates? Is it weird for Izumi to see so many digimon, especially talking ones, and married ones? Honestly, what even is a digimon? xD
Onto pt 2 where I plan to leave a more thorough review of the whole chapter!
Schadenfreude and Fahrvergnügen!
Wolfi
Back as I promised, is your reviewer Alex. The latest part of WoS (perhaps a sign to publish some more chapters now?}, let's go! But I'd be switching things a bit this time. As much as I loved the questions, I missed my usual reactions. How about I react to the parts as I read on and answer your questions at the end? Hope that works!
Reactions ~
Rhymessss from Tikaa!! Someone's been reviewing more poetry than their taste, it seems XD
Onto the questions, now! I don't think I'll have anything left to say after answering them anyways. For someone who has such a rigid reviewing style to dictate the feedback, I like it too much. It was truly a great idea!
There's the sass! Love it.
Oh, won't we all just love to have the same feeling at times?
And here I thought she was going to be a new character xD It's a little unrelated to her real name though, I wonder if there's a story.. Who am I kidding, it's you so, of course!
Why attack me like that, Tikaa! =(
I must admit, I've never seen such a well punctuated use of bracket in a sentence. You certainly know your grammar!
I'm sure it must feel amazing, but I can't run for the life of me ;-; too exhausting and my body be like nah mate, we just won't listen to you ig.
Making us hate a character so quick is power! But I feel he'll be given a redemption arc very soon.
As an introvert, I really get it lol. This major task requires three buisness days in complete solitude for mental stability and productive results :nods:
Nevermind the comment from before, it actually makes sense, despite Z being the only letter common between the two. I think this also explains why Kei asked Zoe, as she already made her own nickname out of a rather tricky name. She might be good at that sort of thing, good thinking. But to her dismay, our protagonist just isn't xD
Love me some evil fun he had a long time coming! ^-^
A tense problem in Tikaa's writing- my, if this isn't rare! :0
It is now, silly boy. Kei has said so, it's set in stone =]
OUCH!! That must've hurt..
Ooh, is the digimon's equivalent of a pokedex now? Sorry, I've only watched pokemon before this story and loved it so much ToT. I assure you that I know Digimon is supposed to be exponentially better and morally superior! (Trying level best to not awaken the wrath of a Digimon fan)
The reason behind it might be really difficult to justify.. but thanks to this being a kids book, you might not really have to. If you decide otherwise, I'd be excited to see what you come up with, of course!
Geez, that's a lot! Can't really tell if this is a real thing in the series of your original idea, though.
That is a terrifying monster train ahhhhhhh!!!!!!
Oh no, I feel so very bad for him! =(
That's quite a poetic way to put it ^-^
I could be wrong, but I think this is missing some punctuation.
Rest of the lore was pretty amazing as well! Great storytelling, as always. I especially liked how you used the protagonists being new to the scene to explain the history of the Digimon world so simply to the readers who might be unaware of how things went down (aka me lol). Clever!
Let's get to the questions now!
Answers ~
1) What was your initial reaction to this Zoe section?
Well it certainly took me some time to get a sense of what was going on! I think the writing was a bit ambiguous as well there. After the message on the microwave, I didn't really know what to expect. I was half thinking Zoe just teleported to this elevator she was in. But apparently, the device just gave her instructions. That's certainly more logical, guess I was taking the children's book concept one too far. Other than that though, awesome! The confusion is obvious in Zoe's narration and also very reasonable! The descriptions are impeccable and I could really feel myself pulled in the text.
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
Tricky! I think Zoe's beginning and throughout narration was enjoyable. It had an unfiltered reality to it, which kept her character relatable and grounded. She's very likable, for sure, at least by the reserved kind like me. Kei does a good job of presenting the other, more socially active, fraction. My favourite scenes would have to the ones involving Tommy because he's such a baby! Very heartwarming, he really stirs things around. Plus when the girls team up to tease JP on his given nickname- such sweet revenge for acting like a creep hehe. And the fact that he seems to have infinite chocolates to just give around to Tommy and the Pagumon- chef's kiss!!
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
I guess it'd have to be Tommy running off and Zoe scolding Kei for being so harsh. As much as it stands, I just failed to see the purpose, except to maybe show off the protagonist's incredible running skills and perhaps having JP give Tommy another chocolate, which the Pagumon see and demand some for themselves, which was fairly funny and worthy keeping. :sigh: I think that sentence didn't complete without contradicting itself. But still getting it out there, I felt it could be cut out. I wasn't much fond of the 'green fire' scene (the color may have been excessively mentioned too) in general but I understand it's importance to the plot and it wasn't really that bad, if I'm being honest. I do think the lack of much surprise by the digimon we've faced until now, upon seeing humans (given how rare of a sight they are, from the chapter's end) should be fixed but that's just my little take!
4) Did anything surprise you?
It's the little things, I believe. Firstly, how mature and logical Zoe sounds for her earlier over expressive remarks. She's being the simple girl thrown into bizzare world, which was not my first impression. In a way it's good but limits the excited humor you could've been aiming for, when you said you were fine being a little excited as the story's primarily meant for children. The realism that shines from some scenes was utterly impressive. Apart for Zoe being Izumi and JP having an endless supply of chocolate, I was surprised at such an early portrayal of another angel, Cerberumon. I thought they were all dead and spirits? Forgive me, I might need an additional history lesson. And well, the ending note is shocking!
5) Are there any characters you especially liked in this? Why? Why not?
JP all the way!! He sounded disrespectful towards girls in the beginning but he's a terribly interesting character. Good with kids- knows how to quieten Tommy and has the supplies to actually do it, quite unexpected for a guy, who appeared as problematic as him. Even with the Elecmon's he was the most sincere- answering their questions kindly and attentive enough to ask questions of his own. Despite of what he may appear to be, I think he'll turn out to be quite endearing with the plot. A true gentleman, even, perhaps? I think Zoe is the best one up until now though. She's got her flaws and doesn't shy away from it. It's quite refreshing to read things from her perspective, actually. Speaking of characters, the Pagumon were certainty a mischievous but helpful bunch and the Elecmon and their kids were so heartwarming to read about!
6) Or some you especially didn’t like? Why? Why not?
Well, no. I'm not crazy for Kei or Tommy but they aren't necessarily bad. How Tommy's crying annoys the protagonists is actually quite funny and well Kei appears to be a nice person, on top of being bubbly and outgoing. One small thing I'd say if I must though- these both might need their own layers in personality. Is Tommy nothing more than a crying kid longing to return home, but quiets down on being given chocolate? Even if so, what does he so miss about home- parents, friends or comfort? About Kei- does she have any insecurities she hides behind the facade of overlooking the rainbows all the time? What's her dark like secret? But all of this may be too much for a kid's story, I know xD
7) What are your thoughts on Zoe?
I think the others questions have almost covered it, but I'll sum them up pretty quick. Incredibly relatable, great narration, easy to empathise to, good at heart but has her flaws to that make her humane (poor reflex when Tommy was running if not for Kei, hesitant to socialise, drifts away in conversation with Elecmon, and just the small things really), great effort put into her and it shows. I think it'd be nice to see actually do something for once though, you know? She's missing some action for our protagonist, as she looks more like the commentator. Kei talks everywhere being the more extroverted one, JP handles Tommy and is curious to learn the situation here and help them get out. What's Zoe thinking. Even the heroic save of Tommy needed a nudge from Kei, so so we really need someone like that to be the main character of what's to be a long journey?
8 ) What are your thoughts on Kei?
She's nice work, like those friendly social girls I came across in school. Confident enough to get out there and ask strangers for advice, especially for someone who's not travelled much. There's not anything bad to say about her except that she might need some more depth- her inner thinking, struggles and perhaps a purpose. She said she wanted to go home before- perhaps it'd be wise to expand on what awaits here.
9) What are your thoughts on JP and Tommy?
The best duo, most entertaining! I do think Tommy needs something to do, other than just cry hut it's fine apart from that. About JP, he seems perfect for the time being. Sleazy enough to hit on two girls right of the bag like some creep, but makes it up for it by caring for Tommy and being focussed to help them get out by learning the Digimon history for the Elecmon's. He's got a long way to go but he's awful (and his fashion sense lol) and yet has very redeemable qualities so shoes the best potential of all!
10) Do you already have an opinion on the group as a whole?
They really need to go through some bonding before I refer to them as one. They're pretty scattered and don't converse to work together, but perhaps they don't have a reason to, this far. This might be the most lacking part, now that you mention it. They're good as individuals, but I see no cooperation. Not a single scene entails the three of them for an actual reason and in a fair, equal spotlight. I'll give it time if I were you though, you've barely started out and they've barely met each other. I'm sure some near death adventures would rectify that for you, how fun! =) For what it's worth though, I think their contrasting personalities would allow them to contribute their own skill set to the group, and make up for the other's shortcomings very well, allowing them to harmonize quite beautifully as a singular unit.
11) Were any things confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
Beginning looked a little foggy to understand, but maybe it was just my own inertia. Other than that, Cerberumon being an yet alive angel- did he come to power after Lucemon and the warriors? I'm just a bit puzzled but I think that's my lack of knowledge of the series in general, rather than a fault of your writing. One more thing! The Elecmons state that our protagonists are safe here, despite the fact that Cerberumon was seen attacking mere five minutes away. I'm not sure how how the assurance hold then. Even if I were to assume so, there's another problem. In a realm is being attacked from all sides, I'm curious as to how the region of Flame terminal has been fairly safe until now. If it's because Cerberumon just hasn't reached so far yet, I'd have expected more worry and hurry over planning alternative residences. And if this really is such a safe space as opposed to most others, how is not brimming with refugees already? Just some loose ends to tie up, but please think these over. Rest all got across pretty well!
12) On a scale from 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy this section?
I'll give it a solid 8! And don't think too much, I'm just a tough perfectionist at heart like you. Also this genre isn't my personal favourite so the biased points are a bit out of the reach. But hey, it's excellent work and a very captivating read! I enjoyed reading very much, and the score is not half bad as I don't think I'd have given above a 9 (or 9.5 in an a deeply philosophical and beautiful but moving plot or perhaps a plot twist chapter executed flawlessly), no matter how good it was. And the one point deduction is just because it's still too early to judge and establish half the things I hope and love in works overall.
13) On a scale from 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next section?
A solid 9! (There, happy? xD) Well I can give this category a 10 and the ending line was definitely one to fuel the anticipation going forward! I sense there's trouble ahead, limelight begins to burn too soon too quick (haha a reference to a poetry I've written, find it if you may). Very eager to sa, the least!
14) Where do you think the story will go next? Do you have any predictions?
They get chased away by digimons (who think them enemy) and so they hide out somewhere quite. The abandoned building has a secret passageway that leads to the spirit and they collect it, but not without an action scene. They keep on collecting as the series progresses, and come closer as friends along the way. Defeating the even family, they commit the biggest cry of found family going their separate ways. They all return to their homes, to find out that it was only a dream.. until another villian arises who's imprisoned the spirits and our heroes are called back once again. We'll see how right I am, about all of it, in due time XD.
Oh god this has been long. I hope my super long reviews are not MUCH trouble (ik they are some, at least, no matter how much one may assure). Thanks for sharing Tikaa (I'M HUNGRY STILL, SHARE MORE), it was a fabulous chapter to read (god did I just dare to call just a section of the chapter, the entire thing? Oh no no). It's been an absolute pleasure reviewing this, so worth the threeish hours I spent reading and thinking this review through. The points were enough reward though, sweetening the deal. I'm sure your reply will be even more heartwarming =)
I hope this is enough content to satisfy you little spreadsheet, it feels quite good returning the favor to the reviewing legend, on behalf of all of YWS. Thanks you for all you do, we're most grateful and I shall continue to shower love on this series. I hope you publish soon and I might check out Jontour in the meantime!
Hope this was helpful, happy writing. Until next time,
Love,
Alex
Well, you were kind enough to do two reviews of my work today, so I better at least do my second review of your work of all time. Sweating smile emoji.
This is largely free of grammatical errors as far as I noticed, but there are two right next to each other I do want to point out, and then I'll cover the rest and move onto what I liked and didn't like!
>He followed it with a wink and a, “It must be my lucky day!” Could boys our age already be sleezy?
That comma isn't needed, and it should be sleazy not sleezy.
>“Just do it JP!” Keisaki hissed
You can put that unneeded comma right after "it" here for "Just do it, JP!"
Also, when Keisaki says “Give us food?” it should technically be "Giving us food?" but maybe it's an intentional grammatical error in dialogue, I don't know.
At the very end, we have a missing comma between "If only it would really be that easy" and "but we'd kind of forgotten something important." and it should say "And were prone to attract attention!" instead of "And prone to attract attention!"
Alright, now let's get into what I liked!
I like that they didn't have to come up with any mean-spirited nicknames for him, and that just giving Junpei a nickname at all made him upset exactly as they planned.
I also like the reactions to everything being able to talk! It's humorous.
I like the way you develop the characters through their interactions with each other. It's difficult to do this so efficiently in a way that feels earned, but I think you mostly accomplish that.
>its design neatly fit his outfit, very thoughtful of the higher entity out there who gave us these things
I like this lampshading.
I'll just cover what I didn't like in the question section.
1) What was your initial reaction to this Zoe section?
I liked it. I thought that it introduced the world well, without feeling too expository and having fun nods to the fact that this is all a universe created to sell toys.
2) What were your favourite [American sic here] parts and why?
Probably the rapid development of JP into the most useful character after he was so quickly maligned at the start.
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
Hmm, I think the setting could have been described a little better at the train platform. Was Tommy really unable to see the chasm? Why was he running at it with reckless abandon even when he got dangerously close to the edge?
There also should've been some acknowledgment of the sheer number of chocolate bars JP had at his disposal!
4) Did anything surprise you?
Maybe the train being a digimon? But that's probably down to me not being acquainted with the Digimon world at all, haha.
5) Are there any characters you especially liked in this? Why? Why not?
JP! I liked his development and how he disproved initial expectations. Don't judge a book by its cover and all that.
6) Or some you especially didn’t like? Why? Why not?
Probably Kei, and I have a feeling that's intentional. I wouldn't say I especially don't like her though, I'm just unsure about her so far.
7) What are your thoughts on Zoe?
She's intrepid! I like her, but not as much as JP.
8 ) What are your thoughts on Kei?
I don't know how to feel about Kei! She can be a little quick to lose her temper. But I guess we'll see. Like Zoe said, something rubbed me the wrong way.
9) What are your thoughts on JP and Tommy?
I have already covered that I like JP and how you handled him, but I must confess I have basically zero thoughts about Tommy. I guess we'll see how he develops!
10) Do you already have an opinion on the group as a whole?
Not really. I hope they synergize together well!
11) Were any things confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
Mostly just what I covered in response to the parts I didn't like question.
12) On a scale from 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy this section?
13) On a scale from 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next section?
I'm going to flip my previous ratings! Last time I answered the first question 7.5, and the second question a 7. This time I'm going to answer 7 for the first question and 7.5 for the second. I'm just not as compelled by kids getting into an adventure as by cruel dictators, I guess. But I am intrigued by where things might go!
14) Where do you think the story will go next? Do you have any predictions?
JP will never run out of chocolate bars. Or he will, and it will be an issue that they have to resolve.
And there we go! Now I can feel ever so slightly less indebted to you. I hope this review helped!
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