| Name | Element | Digimon Form |
| Kei | Fire | Anumon |
| Kouji | Light | Lobomon |
| Tommy | Ice | Kumamon |
| Zoe | Wind | Kazemon |
| JP | Thunder | Beetlemon |
Th story so far: 5 kids were called into the Digital World and each found a Spirit of the Legendary Warriors, allowing them to turn into digimon. Though on their way to Forest Terminal, the Warrior of Earth Grumble/Gigasmon ambushed them, and the group fled in defeat.
-Zoe-
Following our crushing defeat at Gigasmon’s hands, Keisaki took a novel approach to improve morale. The sun was just starting to rise, and we were in the forest that surrounded our temporary base of operations. As Anumon, she was pacing in front of us. We were about to run through what she was calling ‘team-building exercises’. We suspected We had her time-out during yesterday’s fight to blame for this impromptu training—at such a horrid time! She was annoyingly motivated and brandished a notepad crammed with her writing.
“So here is what I figured out,” she began confidently, and We remembered she was the captain of her basketball team. This might be what she was used to doing.
She looked at Us, her blue eyes hard and We involuntarily stood straighter.
“Kazemon, you’re fast. You’re the fastest out of all of us, but you barely use your speed for anything useful!” Anumon said and We felt indignant. Not even once had Gigasmon hit Us! How dare she question Us! Not that Anumon cared for Our anger. “You need to think more about what you’re doing!” She said more demeaning things, like how Our attacks actually weren’t that strong, and We felt like destroying some trees just to prove her wrong. Our hands balled into fists.
Anumon moved onto Beetlemon, who crossed his arms in an obvious ‘come at me’ gesture. “You’re right, you’re our strongest fighter. But you’re slow. Did you see that all your hits disoriented Grumblemon? If you could keep that up, we might have a chance next time! We need to figure out a strategy that puts you in the best position to dish out some hurt. Other than that you need to become more circumspect!” That wasn’t even half as bad as what she told Us! She could’ve at least said something about his annoying personality!
“And you.” She turned to Lobomon who watched her through narrowed eyes. He was extremely reliable, and We couldn’t see a flaw in his fighting style. “You’re an absolute mess.” What? “I mean you can probably handle most fights on your own, but if we want to defeat Grumblemon you need to adapt to the others in your team as much as Kazemon needs to!”
We glared at her for singling Us out again.
“Give me a break!” he said and suddenly, We felt a kindred spirit in him. Anger connected! “You can’t blame me for the others getting in my way!”
“I know this team thing is new for you and all, but you can’t blame everyone but yourself,” Anumon said coldly. “You also had no chance against Gigasmon! We need to figure out how to work together and that means adapting to each other…” An unholy smile appeared on her face. “Which is why we’re interrupting our journey for a healthy dose of team drills!”
We supposed it could be worse. We were surprised that Lobomon hadn’t insisted harder on continuing our quest.
“Lobomon is going to pretend he’s Gigasmon,” Anumon said, grinning. That earned her another annoyed look, but she explained quickly, “He’s currently our most well-rounded fighter, a little faster than the real deal, and he can take a hit. His objective is to disable all of us. Since that’s hardly fair, we’re going to pretend to be fatally hit anytime he manages to get one of us. That means we’re out and it’s up to the rest to cover for us. Beetlemon, you get three hits since you’re more resilient.”
“Wait a second!” Beetlemon interrupted. “If I’m stronger, why exactly does Lobomon get to fight solo?” Then, the blue-horned warrior realized just what he suggested. He gulped and looked from Our suddenly very eager expression to Anumon’s amused smirk and the Warrior of Light quietly readying his swords. “You know what, never mind. Totally cool with hunting Lobomon through the forest.”
“Right,” Anumon said, glancing on her notepad. “Now that that’s out of the way, there’s just a few formalities to discuss.” She droned on about a number of hypothetical scenarios, and We drifted off half-way through, losing interest.
From his glazed eyes, We could tell Kumamon had similar feelings and We almost giggled. Good thing Our eyes were hidden!
To his credit, Kumamon reacted immediately once Anumon was done boring us all into submission. “Yeah, so how do we win?”
Huh, that seemed oddly eager. Hadn’t he fully realized that we were going to fight Lobomon? We looked over to the lone wolf. He flexed his fingers with a calculating expression and didn’t seem remotely intimidated by this impending four-on-one.
Anumon was equal parts cheerful and serious when she announced, “We’ll win when Kouji yields! Okay, everyone take position.”
What followed was actually fun. Lobomon disappeared between the trees, and we stayed back to hash out a strategy.
“Alright, so we know he’s fast,” Anumon began. “And he thinks we can’t coordinate with each other. So our main objective is to keep track of each other and avoid friendly fire.” Why did it feel like she was talking directly to Us? “We have one major advantage though. Lobomon is alone and we aren’t, we can stagger our attacks and I’ve spent most of last night thinking about it. Here’s what we’re going to do.”
The first step of our plan was to locate the enemy. The forest was small, but the tree trunks were thick and even Our heightened senses had trouble spotting Lobomon. Well We did spot him eventually, namely when We took a sword handle to the face. He just whipped around a tree and lightly tapped us against the cheek. How dare him! We angrily readied Our wind gloves, but Lobomon held up a hand. “You’re out.”
Arrgh! That was so unfair, that hadn’t even hurt!
“Zoe, Pyro Shot!” Anumon’s arrow separated him from Us and We looked up, confused. “Don’t forget, that’s Grumblemon! You’re defeated and he’s going to take your Spirit!”
At that, Lobomon engaged in a deadpan Grumblemon impression. “That’s right. Rawr. Hand over your Spirit.”
“We’ll never let you, Thunder Fist!” Beetlemon dropped down on him, but Lobomon just rolled away and lashed out with his laser sword. That was hit number one. This was already not going as planned. With Us out of the picture, We soared high up to watch the fight. We ended up cringing every time one of Our teammates did something especially stupid to let Lobomon get a free shot in.
In no time at all, he had us all defeated and at his feet.
“That was way too easy,” Lobomon said with a haughty smirk.
We looked back to Anumon as if she’d have any answers. Lobomon might not be able to walk through the earth, but he was much better than us at using the terrain to his advantage. We were four people against one, how could we still lose?
“Again?” Beetlemon asked.
“Whatever.” Lobomon shrugged, his way of agreeing to the proposal.
“No wait, first we need to analyse what we did wrong,” Anumon said, frowning below her mask. “Kazemon, you were the first out, what did you see?”
Oh. We hadn’t expected that. “Uhm...”
“Anumon has precise, but slow attacks. You have a problem with finding a correct timing and keep wasting your attack window trying to stop me from attacking,” Lobomon answered instead. It was nice to hear someone criticize her. “You also went in for Kumamon when I got him, but you’re way too slow to make something like that work. Kazemon is the only one mobile enough for a stunt like that.” The familiar anger burned in her blue eyes, but she nodded curtly.
We frowned. So he thought Anumon wasn’t good enough to rescue others from being scanned. But We were fast enough to do just that! Note to self: Try not to be that easily trounced when the others rely on you.
“I think Beetlemon needs more support,” Anumon murmured more to herself than to us. “Alright, I have a new plan. Ready for round two?”
This time, We were ready.
Lobomon also didn’t go after Us first, but since We were hyper-focused, We managed to blast him before he could out Kumamon. Lobomon crashed against a tree and for a moment We thought about how awesome it would’ve been if Our reaction hadn’t been pure reflex. Then, We could have angled him towards Beetlemon who now had to run over to strike him.
Anumon timed an arrow to hit at the same time as the Warrior of Thunder brought his fist down. Somehow, Lobomon managed to twist out of the way of the electricity and cut through the arrow. We groaned in annoyance.
It took three more rounds of “That was pathetic”, “How are you supposed to beat Gigasmon if you can’t even beat me?” and “Are you sure you’re even trying?” before We finally achieved some sort of clairvoyance where We could keep track of every single occupant on the battlefield. We saw Kumamon freezing a patch of ground towards which Beetlemon was pushing Lobomon. We saw Anumon in the sky, an arrow on her bowstring glowing with energy and We knew our time would come soon. In a flash, We were on the correct side of Lobomon. It was painful, but true that while Our wind was powerful it was not quite powerful enough to pose a threat to a tough opponent. But as We’d learned, it was quite enough to blast them off their feet. Especially, when the icy ground already unbalanced them.
We caught Anumon’s eyes and then: “ Hurricane Wave! ” A maelstrom of pink wind crashed into Lobomon’s side and pushed him forward. At the same time Anumon released her arrow. “ Critical Shot!”
We couldn’t believe how perfect that went. Lobomon had his back to her and while he was fast enough to turn, he couldn’t stop the arrow from going straight through his shoulder. There was the flurry of data and Kouji fell back on his behind.
We think We might have squealed—but in a dignified way. With each defeat, We’d grown to hate the arrogant wolf more and more, and to finally best him felt so good. We immediately flew to Anumon and threw Our arms around her. On the ground, Beetlemon was patting Kumamon on the head and Kouji crossed his arms with an unreadable expression.
“That was teamwork!” Anumon said happily.
We weren’t done though. Since Kouji had been fighting with no break, he just watched the next part of our exercise: two-on-two fights. This was more up Our alley. None of the other three were nearly as fast as Lobomon and We could dance circles around them. We worked well with Anumon, but it took a while to align better with the other two. We especially had trouble with Kumamon since neither of us were particularly heavy hitters. It worked in our favour that Anumon already used her Critical Shot. She also wasn’t as tough as Beetlemon and went down after little pressure. We grinned. Our aim was improving rapidly! (N-Not that it hadn’t been stellar before...)
After a while Lobomon joined us again and Anumon said she would watch to take some more notes.
Working with the Warrior of Light was something completely different. While he had no problem keeping track of Us, he seemed unable to include Us in his strategy. Even when We got in position to blast Kumamon straight to him, he rather engaged Beetlemon in direct combat. We still won, but it felt kinda hollow since We didn’t really help.
That’s why We were looking forward to being on a team opposing Lobomon. To Our surprise, he asked for Kumamon on his team. Well, no matter. We had worked with Beetlemon now and we were both determined to win this.
We took to a rousing start, literally, since our team could fly and theirs couldn’t. Lobomon wouldn’t be Lobomon if that would stop him. Soon, he was up in the trees and jumping towards Beetlemon. We got down to business and sent out a streak of wind—that a volley of snowballs neutralized, coming from the ground. Kumamon!
That left Beetlemon completely open, and he raised one armoured hand to block the incoming swords. He brought the other one around for an electrical strike that Lobomon countered perfectly and then kicked the beetle warrior to the ground.
We needed to switch tactics! We signalled Our ally and received an appreciative nod in return.
So, We rushed towards Lobomon. He reeled in surprise. Ha! Didn’t expect the dainty fairy queen trying direct combat, did you? We thought viciously. Yet he still managed to block each and every one of Our kicks. Oh well, We were out of his reach by the time he tried counterattacking. We laughed at him simply because We could. We were faster!
He was following Us and We pretended to have a little trouble staying ahead of him. Subtly, subtly… Yes! We flew around a tree and here was Beetlemon bringing down a devastating punch, “ Thunder Fist!”, that went straight through Lobomon’s block.
Victory at hand, We failed to recognize the suspicious sparkling in the tree branch above Us and were too late when We heard, “ Frozen Tundra!” and a Kumamon icicle dropped onto Us.
The force of the blow sent Us back into Our human form.
“Ouch, Kumamon!” I said, rubbing my shoulder where he’d crashed into Kazemon. He started to apologize, but I waved him off good-naturedly. I looked back and saw that Lobomon had managed to stay transformed but had a bit more trouble than just this morning against the Warrior of Thunder. It was amazing how far we’d come in just a few hours. Though with Kumamon joining the fight, Beetlemon didn’t stand a chance. Soon I was looking at an exhausted JP instead. I gave him an apologetic smile that rallied him. Still it hurt that we’d made the mistake of forgetting that our enemy would also use strategy.
JP collapsed on the floor. “I need a break now! Let’s finally get something to eat!”
Tommy transformed back and joined him emphatically. After a moment’s hesitation, Kouji also let go of the Spirit and looked up to Anumon.
“You’re right!” she said and landed next to him, surrounding herself with fractal code. “Time for lunch!”
On our way back to the village, it became clear just how demanding our morning exercise had been and I felt sore all over. This didn’t stop me from animatedly talking with Tommy about what awesome moves we’d managed to pull off.
“Man, that thing, with hiding on the branch! That was so cool!” I snorted at the unintentional pun.
“Right!” he said, cheeks glowing with pride.
“I didn’t even see you there!” I continued, “I didn’t know you can turn completely into ice!”
“Well, yeah...” Tommy trailed off and shot a nervous look at Kouji leading our procession. “I, uh- Kouji said that was the point. Y’know, surprising the enemy and stuff...”
“Oh, so Kouji came up with that?” With how obsessed Kei had been over strategy and positioning this morning, I almost forgot that Kouji was no slouch in that department either.
I dismissed Tommy’s clouded look when he confirmed my suspicion.
We had spent the night in the village’s inn, paying with the ShellNumemon money. Our reward was enough to last us another few days, but I felt bad about staying in one place for too long and... We hadn’t been able to save the ShellNumemon and that made using their money a guilty reminder.
It was around our lunch table after we’d ordered our food (They had a surprising number of dishes I knew from our world) that we really talked about what had happened yesterday.
“So aside from the obvious teamwork fail, we weren’t doing too horribly against Grumblemon,” Kei was saying, nursing her water glass.
“Until he transformed into Gigasmon, true,” Kouji agreed. “But how’s that even possible?”
Now all eyes were on me.
“I’m looking,” I said helplessly, flipping through pages without finding anything useful. “Grumblemon said something about us just having Human Spirits, but I’m not sure if this is supposed to be related to the Humanoid and Beast digimon I told you about at Breezy Village.” It was odd, comparing our powerful Spirits with the friendly flower digimon. “The book only really mentions the war between the factions.” I pointed to the respective page.
“And Grumblemon used a ‘Beast’ Spirit to become Gigasmon!” Tommy remembered. “Does that mean anything?”
“Well, there isn’t anything about Beast Spirits here,” I said. “The book only talks about ‘the Spirits of the Legendary Warriors’, nothing beastly or humanly there.” I trailed off, obviously disappointed. The book was great at telling me how evil and horrible Beast digimon were, though. There was a reminder of their wicked nature on almost every page.
“Don’t be so harsh on yourself!” JP jumped to my defence unprompted, giving me a huge smile. “You’re doing most of the work already! It’s the Candlemon that gave us the wrong book.”
The waiter was a bear-like digimon walking on two legs. When he brought our food, I felt the need to carefully inspect my Spaghetti Napoli for stray hair.
Kei stopped him before he could wander off to the next table. “Say, do you know where we can find more books or information about the Digital World?”
The bear flipped the black tray around and held it close to his chest. “Sure, I know. Our most famous librarian Gar—” He stopped himself, then shook his head and continued with a haunted expression, “I’m sorry. I’m afraid the library isn’t open for the public anymore...” He spun around and escaped into the kitchen.
We traded a look.
“What was that all about?” Kei asked, eyes narrowed in confusion. She caught herself and said, “Well, it can’t hurt to check the building.”
“We also need supplies,” Kouji reminded her. He wanted to leave as soon as we recovered from our morning exercise, not ready to tolerate more delay.
“Zoe and I can look at the library,” JP offered graciously, sending me a hopeful look.
I scrunched up my nose. The past few days had been rather busy, but I couldn’t shake the feeling that he was still trying to hit on me. Since we had been a good team earlier, I decided to give him a chance and nodded.
“Okay, then the rest of us will buy some supplies,” Kei said with a shrug and a side-glance at her companions.
-Kouji-
They parted ways with Izumi and Junpei outside the inn.
Keisaki’s offer to train in the morning had come as a surprise, and Kouji had been reluctant to agree. But for once, she knew what she was doing. Considering the team’s improvement, even he could see the logic in her idea. As painful as it was, Lobomon on his own could not beat Gigasmon in a straight fight. Whipping the others into shape, so that they weren’t such a hindrance next time, was a great way to level the playing field. Also, since it didn’t take all five of them to buy supplies, looking for more information on what they were up against was a fine way to use their available resources.
Taking all of that into account, Kouji’s mood was still at a constant low. He couldn’t shake the restlessness that pressured him into moving onwards as fast as possible. Like there was something he should hurry up and do. It felt as if there was something important, something personal, waiting for him at the Forest Terminal. Kouji couldn’t remember when he’d last been this motivated to do something...
He thought back to what the voice of the D-Tector had said to him. There were answers to the questions his heart asked at the Forest Terminal. He gritted his teeth at the feeling of powerlessness welling up in him. That line of thought was too unpleasant, so he decided to concentrate on the present. Here he could actually do something about the things that annoyed him.
Tommy seemed to have remembered that he was, in fact, a little kid. So he’d pushed their recent defeat out of his head and refused to budge from a stall selling an assortment of sweets.
“Oh come on!” he whined, his voice climbing a few octaves above tolerable. “We got all this money! Why can’t we buy cotton candy for all of us?!”
Kouji tapped his foot but was inclined to let Keisaki handle the situation. She wouldn’t put up with this either. She...
...completely faltered when faced with the kid’s whining. “Tommy, just- uh, just because we have a bit of money doesn’t mean that we can just buy what we want,” she tried ineffectively.
Why were they even having this discussion? Sweets didn’t even remotely count as supplies.
“Please... We never get anything nice!” Tomoki insisted in a tone that made Kouji quickly lose patience.
Keisaki continued to struggle. “We need to concentrate on really important stuff that’ll last a little longer than... than that,” she trailed off when she saw him pout.
“Ugh, this is just like Shinya. Where’s Takuya when I need him?” she muttered, then turned to Kouji. “Come on, he listens to you, do something!”
Kouji sent her a sharp glare that she countered with a fiery look of her own. Huh, it seemed like she didn’t lose her spirit. He didn’t have time for her issues, and he also didn’t exactly care, so he faced Tomoki and ground out, “We gotta move on. Quit being childish.”
“I am a child!” Tomoki said indignantly.
“So what?” Kouji shot back. “We don’t know how far away the Forest Terminal is. We can’t just go around and waste money on a whim.” He stood his ground even if he could already see that arguing was a fruitless endeavour.
When Tomoki remained silent, Keisaki decided to add, “Kouji’s right. You know what? Just go back and wait at the inn while we finish this.” And that was somehow even worse.
Tomoki’s eyes flashed and he shouted, “Stop pushing me around! You don’t get to tell me anything!” Then, he turned around and ran in a direction that wasn’t the inn’s.
“Gah!” Kei said, grabbing her ponytails in frustration, and quietly counted to ten. Then, she looked at Kouji. “Why didn’t you go after him?”
He shrugged. “Why should I? It’s a small village and he can’t go anywhere else.”
“Aren’t you worried that he’ll run into trouble?” she asked, starting to move vaguely in the direction Tommy had run.
“If you’re so worried, why didn’t you go after him?” he countered but followed her because he could see a shop selling beef jerky that way. He pointed at the meat and motioned for her to do something useful with all their money.
She grumbled something about why she was the only one thoughtful enough to bring a bag which Kouji chose to ignore. He took the rucksack from her and made room for their new acquisitions while Keisaki haggled with the pink-feathered shopkeeper. He moved her large clipboard to the side and was dismayed about how little actual space the rucksack offered.
Once money moved hands, Keisaki tried to help with packing up the food, but her mind wasn’t on the task.
Kouji struggled to keep his face impassive when it took her five solid seconds before she realized that she tried to fit an already emptied box into the front pocket. He brushed her off to do the packing himself and steadfastly refused to ask her what the heck her problem was. But Keisaki couldn’t care less about his unwillingness to address the issue.
Once they left the shop to search the town for something to go with their newly acquired beef jerky, Keisaki took a deep breath and admitted, “I’ve never been good with children.”
Kouji inwardly groaned. “Okay?” Evidently, Tomoki’s reaction continued to bother her.
She fretted with her hair, her eyes darting around without focusing on anything. “You know, I have a little brother who’s just as old as Tommy, and we aren’t close either. And I don’t know how to change that,” she continued, voice laced with frustration. “My other brother Takuya somehow handles him perfectly; he’s his hero and I’m just... I’m...” she trailed off, unable to describe what she felt.
To Kouji, Keisaki simply sounded jealous. While she blinked and looked for the next stall that might sell something useful, she asked, “How about you? Do you have any siblings?”
“No,” Kouji said, hoping that she’d drop the conversation.
No such luck.
“Good for you. They’re a lot more trouble than they’re worth,” she said, trying for a lighter tone, but still sounding subdued.
For some reason, this annoyed him.
She noticed his look and quickly backpedalled, “Not that I’ve been the perfect older sibling, either! But Shinya is sometimes so irritating. He really is a lot like Tommy.” She paused, fishing for words. “Well, at least when I look at Tommy, I see Shinya... And I can’t seem to do anything right with either of them!”
Kouji couldn’t relate to her issues at all, and he also didn’t know why she suddenly felt like telling him all that, but he saw an immediate flaw in how she handled Tommy. “You can’t treat him like a child.”
“Why not? We’re older than him! We’ve got a responsibility!” she said, finally with some of her familiar anger.
“We can’t shield him from everything. You said so yourself: this world is dangerous, and if he can’t pull his weight at a critical moment, we all might pay!” he said, also getting agitated. She seemed to selectively ignore what Tomoki contributed to the group.
“But he shouldn’t need to do that!” Keisaki said, all but confirming Kouji’s suspicion, and balled her hands into fists. “He shouldn’t need to since we’re here. We’re supposed to keep him safe...” In her eyes was a far-away look. “A while back, we went to an amusement park, and Takuya and I were supposed to watch over Shinya. But Shinya kept needing help with everything, and I got so annoyed. I yelled at him to tie his stupid shoelaces by himself, and he ran away. Takuya got really angry at me and spent the rest of the day looking for him while I just enjoyed myself.” She gulped.
Kouji stared at her with a somewhat disbelieving look. Seriously, why was she telling him that? He wanted to ask how any of this related to the current situation, but he didn’t like being interrupted and tried to give others the same courtesy. She was still talking, so he sighed and quietly handled the next transaction.
Keisaki didn’t even notice the shop in front of them, lost in her memories. “When I showed up at the gate without my brothers, my parents got so angry at me. Until then, I hadn’t even realized that what I did was wrong. What if Takuya hadn’t found Shinya? What if we lost him? And now I’m trying to be more considerate and responsible, but that also doesn’t work!” She stewed in her frustration for a moment before finally taking notice of her surroundings. She glared at the frog digimon that was selling canned goods as if she dared it to say anything. It silently handed over the food, accepting their money.
Despite himself, Kouji put some thought into Keisaki’s situation. It didn’t seem like she learned anything, considering how hard she failed in understanding Tomoki. She still had no idea about the core issue as she said unhappily, “I don’t want to worry, but I still do, and now I’m wondering if we should’ve gone after him after all...” Then, she narrowed her eyes and gave Kouji a strict look.
“What?” he asked. He was still gathering his thoughts. Just rushing out with a half-baked opinion would be counter-productive.
“You’re not going to run off again, are you?”
That managed to surprise him. Where did that come from? Kouji hadn’t thought about leaving the group for a while, especially since he now knew that Grumblemon existed. So annoyance seeped into his voice when he answered, “No.”
“It’s just, the last time I shared some deep, traumatic stuff from my past, you made a beeline for the exit,” she said accusingly.
If that was traumatic, he would happily trade memories with her. But since it seemed to be such a problem for her, he said, pointing at her rucksack, “We have everything. Let’s look for Tomoki.” If he took one thing away from her speech, it was the fact that she had trouble seeing Tomoki as a useful fighter. And that was a liability since she was supposed to come up with their strategy. Now that he was aware of her critical flaw, he could think back, and there wasn’t a single instance where she had anything meaningful to say about Tomoki. Every time she mentioned Kumamon, it had sounded tacked on and this morning, he was the only one she hadn’t evaluated.
“I think—” Kouji began, ready to save future plans by informing her of her flawed thought process when he felt a tug at his sleeve. He almost expected it to be Tomoki, but the shopkeeper from the stall they had just passed stared up to him. The creature sold various weirdly shaped stone figures, old-looking rocks and jewellery. It wore a form-concealing ensemble of tattered scarves. Its stare was strangely everlasting when it stretched its crystalline hand out towards him. In it was a long, red jewel. Kouji frowned as it pushed the polished rock straight into his hands.
“Your soul shines so bright, I shall give you this light!” the digimon said in glassy, flute-like voice. “It will help you in your travel, before things unravel.”
“Wha-at?” Keisaki summarized the encounter adequately.
The masked digimon went back to sitting mysteriously behind the counter.
Kouji shrugged, giving the jewel a cursory glance. It was made from a smooth material and shaped like an octagon. It was also oddly balanced in his hand. Other than that, it didn’t seem to do anything. “No idea. Do we still have space for this thing?”
Keisaki nodded in clear confusion. She placed Kouji’s acquisition next to their bundle of dried meat.
She’d just zipped up the main pocket again when the sky lit up in an explosion of data. They both froze in place. Then, they simultaneously started to run towards it. Tomoki could be in trouble!
-Zoe-
The digimon we asked directions to the library from were distant and reserved as if they couldn’t believe anyone would want to go there. JP filled the walk from passerby to passerby with meaningless chatter—mostly compliments directed towards me that I wasn’t sure I could fully appreciate and therefore ignored.
I enjoyed the fresh wind from the lake close by sweeping through the village. My Spirit might have fine-tuned me towards the shifts in atmospheric pressure. I felt rain coming. That or it might have been the huge storm clouds gathered above the lake down the cliff, the water grey and agitated. A pretty flimsy-looking water dam stopped the flood from falling upon the hapless land below.
As we approached the library, the bad weather seemed to catch up in leaps and bounds. Our surroundings grew darker and darker. Alarmed, I checked the sky and saw... that the storm clouds were content with menacing the far-off lake and had not made the trip to the village just yet. So why...?
Then, I noticed the lonely building amid a loose collection of gnarled, black-barked trees. It looked almost like one of those Disney castles the evil queens lived in with sharp angles and black walls. Evil-looking stone gargoyles were on both sides of the staircase leading to the huge entrance. A foreboding cloud spiral was directly above the miniature castle that drenched the entire lot into creepy shadows. A sign next to the entrance gate was in Japanese and told us this was the library.
“I’m starting to think ‘not open for the public’ is some sort of code for ‘inhabited by evil, keep out, you don’t want to know’,” I said uncertainly. If I squinted, I could see flashes of a red sky through the spiralling clouds while here outside, where we still stood, the sky had the steel grey colour that usually preceded rain.
JP nervously walked back and forth in front of the open entrance gate and said carefully, “I can understand if you’d rather go back to the others. I mean, this doesn’t look like a place for a pretty girl like you!”
Even though I could see through the ploy that he was just as put out by the scary sight, I couldn’t believe he was saying that to me! “ Cosa?! Give me a break!” Then, I deliberately marched past him and walked over the stone path to the staircase. He hurried to follow me.
I didn’t know if I should knock or not and the castle/library earned another creepy point for taking the decision from me: It opened on its own accord. A cold shiver went down my spine and I needed to remind myself that I could digivolve at any time.
“Hello?” I said into the dark hall stretching out in front of us. The walls were made of black wood, and I caught a glimpse of a staircase branching up the balcony of a second floor. Therefore, the room had to be big, but my chest constricted for a moment as a claustrophobic feeling settled in. The entire space was filled with books. I could see them everywhere, in every nook and cranny. They were on the shelves, piled on the floor and even stacked on some of the steps of the staircase. So many books! How were we supposed to find anything here? Didn’t they have a librarian? My call remained unanswered.
“Maybe we should go back...” JP said again, this time dropping all pretence that this was for my own good.
“Not a chance, we need to find out something about those Beast Spirit things and here are a ton of books.” I was surprised at how confident I sounded. “Let’s see if there are any we can read.”
I stepped fully inside the hall and looked around. My eyes had already adjusted to the darkness, and I could see clearly in the faint red light that came through the high windows. When JP also came inside, I almost expected to hear the door fall shut and to get the sinking feeling that we were now trapped inside. That didn’t happen though, and red light was streaming in through the doorway too, throwing our shadows into the huge room. Breaks in the walls were leading to even more rooms where I could see even more books, and above the second floor was a third floor where, presumably, even more rooms with even more books were waiting. The magnitude of our search got to me, and I swayed on the spot. This looked like work for the entire party!
Though I disregarded the first shelf I inspected just by the DigiCode letters on their bindings. By the third shelf full of the useless squiggle language, I was dearly hoping for some sort of register or index of books just to see if there was anything useful in here at all.
That was when JP called out from the other side of the aisle (we weren’t stupid enough to separate), “Zoe, here’s one in Japanese!”
That would be a first!
I quickly joined him while he reached for the book.
“ Do not touch my books!” a voice shouted, coming from everywhere at once and I shrieked. JP froze with his hand still raised towards the shelf.
He recovered quicker than I and shouted, “Who said that? Show yourself!”
There was no answer.
I gathered my courage and added, “We’re just looking for information. We won’t mess up—”
“ You do not deserve information!”
Well, that did it. I refused to deal with ridiculousness of that magnitude. Disembodied voice or not, no one should mess with me and my temper. “That’s unfair! We just want to take a peek! I thought this is a library!”
The ensuing silence just riled me up more. “You can’t just say that and then stay quiet!”
“Yeah, right!” JP agreed emphatically. He grabbed the book and pulled it out of the shelf.
Uh, oh. That might have been a tad too drastic.
“ No!”
I shied back, reaching into my pocket for the D-Tector when the sound of leathery wings came from above. A shadow dropped from the third floor straight towards us. It looked like one of the statues outside had come alive and it stretched out a clawed hand.
I didn’t want that to touch me! I pulled the D-Tector free and summoned the data circle around my left hand. “JP, quick!”
Execute Spirit Digivolve to...
...Kazemon!
...Beetlemon!
We knew that digimon. It was one of the earlier digimon mentioned in the book. Its name was Gargoylemon, a Human digimon, and it usually was rather peaceful and reclusive. Maybe we could reason with it.
“Halt! My friend has acted rashly! We can talk about it!”
“No!” Gargoylemon said, enraged. He had an impossibly thin, white body with equally thin arms and legs wrapped with metal rings. His feather wings were comparatively small, and on his feet and hands were huge blue claws with which he now slashed at Beetlemon. For his size, he was surprisingly quick. Even though Beetlemon took a step back, Gargoylemon still got a hit in. “No one but me is allowed access to my books!”
There was an unreasonable anger in his voice that struck a familiar chord.
...!
Could it be? Could he be just as influenced by dark thoughts as some of our previous enemies?
We jumped back when he swung his claws madly at Us. We were still faster. We needed to handle this situation more carefully so We wouldn’t repeat Our error from Breezy Village.
For being so concerned about the books, Gargoylemon sure didn’t care when one of his attacks went haywire and slashed through an entire shelf, sending pages flying everywhere. Seeing that, We didn’t hesitate to unleash a mighty storm. “ Hurricane Wave!”
He raised his claws and the attack washed over him harmlessly. We clicked Our tongue. What was it with enemies being so invulnerable to Our wind? Then, We grudgingly thought that maybe Anumon had been right. This wasn’t Our main strength. Because We had managed to hit Gargoylemon. Beetlemon brought a sparking fist down, but struck only air, since the enemy was faster than him.
Gargoylemon turned to the Warrior of Thunder. He had his back to Us, thinking us harmless and that it could ready his own special attack in peace. His blue claws started to glow. We took a step back, feeling indignant. We would show him! We kicked off the ground and launched Ourselves at the exposed enemy, making him stagger forwards and losing control of the glow. It was this moment of confusion that We knew Beetlemon would use. He didn’t disappoint Us when he brought both hands down on Gargoylemon’s head. “ Thor’s Hammer! ”
The enemy was failing now, and We went into a body check. “ Love Tap!” Getting physical seemed to do the trick more than any blast of air, and a ring of data appeared around the white digimon.
Careful now. We needed to concentrate and only take what was evil. Not all of Gargoylemon was bad; he was simply infused with something bad. We could cleanse him of that and leave the rest of him be. “Corrupted soul, fear not! My storm will clear your troubled mind!” Careful, careful. “Scan!”
We could feel the data entering Our D-Tector, the vile presence of something evil, something that did not belong. A few seconds passed and We felt purer data coming in. We paused, unsure. This had to be what We needed to leave intact! We cut the connection between the D-Tector and Gargoylemon’s data.
In front of Us, We were pleased to see no DigiEgg. The spindly digimon stood before Us and looked mightily confused. “What... what is going on?”
We released the human in Us, feeling Beetlemon do the same.
“We don’t know, but it seems like you have been under some sort of evil influence,” We... I mean, I said. It was still a little disorienting to come back from Kazemon. Before I could say more, I saw that my D-Tector was blinking. Confused, I pressed a button, and a stream of purified fractal code greeted me that assembled all around us.
In a spreading wave, the dark atmosphere vanished. The black colour of the stones and wood cleared into a friendly yellow. Outside the dark clouds dissipated to show the steel grey sky, and the trees changed shape into something that looked much more welcoming. The entire lot got an overhaul, and I felt more like being in the castle of a fairy-tale princess.
Gargoylemon watched the change happen with bewilderment in his blue eyes, but he caught himself and bowed to us. “Then, I must thank you for freeing me! Why did you come here?”
“It was no problem at all,” JP said, absentmindedly rubbing his chest where Gargoylemon had slashed him earlier. “We’re looking for information.”
I cringed; this had been the berserk button earlier.
Gargoylemon just smiled. “Oh! That’s wonderful! I have information on all sorts of things in my libr-” He gave a shocked gasp. “Oh no, what happened?!” He took in the state of his library after our short fight. He fell to his knees next to some shredded pages, wings and shoulders shaking.
JP traded a look with me and whispered, “Is he crying?”
“I don’t know! Can’t you go check?” I whispered back, not the least bit sure what to do.
“Okay, he started sobbing, pretty sure I get the picture.” JP sighed, reached into his pocket, and produced another one of his chocolate bars.
Haha! Chocolate to the rescue!
“Uh well, here you go. Hope that makes it better...” JP said, handing his prize away.
Gargoylemon looked at him with large, blue eyes, swimming with tears. “Oh, I wouldn’t—”
“Just take it, really,” JP insisted, clearly hoping to drop the topic as soon as possible.
I didn’t want to feel useless, so I put a careful hand on the digimon’s shoulder. “I’m sorry... for your loss...” Okay, well, I tried everything. “Why don’t you go sit down somewhere?”
It took a moment to locate a place not stacked with books. A small reading corner with a lonely seat did the trick.
JP and I awkwardly crowded around the table. Not only because there was just one seat, but also because our comforting strategy began and ended with the chocolate.
Thankfully, Gargoylemon didn’t need more than that to calm down. He threw the wrapper in the trashcan next to the desk and said, “You own the Spirits of the Legendary Warriors, am I right?”
I was sufficiently surprised. “Uh, yes, we do.”
“It’s an honour to meet you. I have read so much about you!” he said in a somehow unfittingly grave voice. “If you have any questions, I will be glad to help you in your quest to save the Digital World!”
“Well... We met another Legendary Warrior just like us, but he works for Cherubimon,” I began, remembering why we came to the library in the first place.
He nodded gravely. “As one of the rightful rulers of our world, Cherubimon did receive five Spirits of the Legendary Warriors.”
“Five?! That means there are four more just like Grumblemon?” I exclaimed.
“I’m afraid that is highly likely,” he said apologetically.
Since the digimon was such a well of knowledge, JP jumped at our chance. “Do you know what a Beast Spirit is?”
He pulled out a notebook from his breast pocket, and I remembered that he stored other things besides his endless supply of chocolate there.
“Ah... So you met a Warrior who had not only a Human Spirit, but also a Beast Spirit?” Gargoylemon clarified.
“Exactly!” I exclaimed. Finally, some information!
He clasped his hands and tapped his clawed index fingers against his lips. “Then, the legends are true. It is said that the souls of the Warrior Ten that ended Lucemon were humanoid as well as animalistic. Their Spirits would reflect that with a Human Spirit that seeks clarity and reason, and a Beast Spirit that is chaos and raw energy! Most fascinating.”
JP was asking some more questions about Beast Spirits, but what he said about souls reminded me of something. I cursed inwardly because Kei had the book.
Well, I could try anyway. “Gargoylemon, we have all our information from a book called, Guida al mondo della anime .” I decided to translate the title in full. “It says it’s an encyclopaedia of the Digital World, but also a guide to the World of Souls...”
“Oh, I know that book.” And again, I was totally surprised. “It’s a fine copy if a little rudimentary. Very biased against Beast digimon since a group of humanoids has written it.”
“But it’s in Italian!” I said, reeling back in disbelief.
“Guarda che so l’italiano!” he said with a grin—and a bit of a defect in pronunciation.
I didn’t care one bit. It felt like forever since I listened to my mother’s language! I leaned forwards. “Non sapevo che i Digimon parlassero altre lingue!”
“Uhm okay?” JP said, frustration in his voice as his eyes flickered from me to Gargoylemon and back.
“Oops! Sorry, I’m just surprised to hear a digimon speak Italian,” I told him, feeling bad for excluding him—for about as long as it took for JP’s face to light up way more than it should. I still didn’t know how to deal with his... affection.
Gargoylemon missed the disgruntled look I sent Junpei and said proudly, “I made it my business to read every book on which I can get my claws! I know many languages!”
“So what is the World of Souls?” I pressed, glad to focus on something important.
“That’s easy; this Digital World is the World of Souls!” he answered, his eyes alight with passion. He geared up a speech that could have come directly out of the encyclopaedia. “Human-type digimon and beast-type digimon. Two different concepts of utterly opposite nature, yet the tension between them sparks energy and life. In every digimon, there is either a humanoid soul or a beast soul.”
Huh, since I was following what he tried to say, I inwardly corrected myself: this was way easier than reading the book. Maybe I could convince him to come along and just explain everything to us?
He wasn’t done dispensing wisdom. “Additionally, all digimon of this world carry one of the ten elements that the Legendary Warriors represented. Even you, who have come here from the world of humans have souls that carry strong elements.” He fixed me with a stare. “Yes... A free-spirited soul so full of passion and drive, the soul of a creature of the air that refuses to submit to the will of the world. No wonder AncientIrismon’s legacy was drawn towards you.”
I froze, not expecting such an assessment. I... My soul had an element?
JP was nodding along with those words, his pencil dancing across the pages of his notebook. He looked up to send Gargoylemon a hopeful stare. “And what about me?”
Gargoylemon was happy to comply. “Creativity and a desire to figure out the world! The true marks of a soul infused with electricity that can put names on and quantify the abstract and unimaginable!”
I furrowed my brows. That wasn’t how I would describe JP. Maybe Gargoylemon was just making things up.
Well, JP grinned, so he liked what he heard.
I decided to put my plan of ‘let Gargoylemon join our quest’ into motion and asked, “Say, have you ever left the village?”
Sadly, I didn’t get to hear his answer, since I picked up noises coming from the entrance hall.
Before I could feel the stab of disappointment at the inconvenient timing, I recognized the voices. “That’s Kei and the others!” I called out to them, “We’re over here!”
“Great timing!” JP said, unaware of the irony. “They should hear this too!”
I was inclined to agree with him until Kei and Kouji came into the room. I narrowed my eyes.
“Where’s Tommy?” I demanded.
Keisaki shot Kouji a look. “We kind of— Uhm, Tommy ran away. We thought he came here!”
Not good enough! This sounded awfully familiar. “You lost Tommy?”
Kouji looked taken aback by my reaction, and Kei sputtered out an unconvincing “Well, uh...”
“Kei! You can’t make a habit out of losing people!”
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Ah a long one. But it was very necessary; I couldn't cut anything @.@
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter?
Guarda che so l’italiano - I do know Italian
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2) What were your favourite parts and why?
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
4) Are there any characters you especially liked in this chapter?
5) Or some you especially didn't like?
6) Did anything in this chapter surprise you?
7) What do you think about the information Gargoylemon gives the group?
8 ) What’s your opinion...
a) ...on the group/ group dynamic?
b) ...on Zoe?
c) ...on Kei?
d) ...on Kouji?
e) ...on JP?
f) ...on Tommy?
9) Could you follow each plot point so far?
10) Did all the conversations feel natural?
11) Were any parts confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
12) On a scale of 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy that chapter?
13) On a scale of 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next chapter?
14) Do you have any predictions for where the story will go next?
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Non sapevo che i Digimon parlassero altre lingue - I didn't know that digimon could speak other languages
Hello there, Tikaa! It's been soooo long, I know. Trust me please, I tried reviewing this earlier but something would always come up. I'm sorry you had to wait so long, I'll try to compensate it by including quoted reactions and your questions. Let's get started ~
I'm actually oblivious to the very obvious reference here, I feel it could be much clearer. I'll still try- JP is objecting to Kouji being the strongest and thus fighting solo. But this seems to imply that he's stronger and should be the one going solo, which seems to be a problem? Idk, I'm just lost. Maybe it didn't land so well or I'm just dumb.
Relatable narrator, as always! Love Zoe for this, it's funny yet totally real.
Stellar writing here, felt incredibly rewarding! It's clever and really compliments the laid out setting. The first line was quite a surprise as it's more maturity than I'd expect from our protagonist, but it's good for a believable small character development. The next part came full circle, using the elements in the best way possible.
Lol this was a funny break to read. Kazemon try to keep up her tough composure yet being so amused is quite a refreshing and amusing scene.
I feel like you do Kazemon the best! She's humanly imperfect in rather comical way, feeding my appetite for both lightheadedness and philosophy.
The sass from an unexpected attack, you're really nailing it Tikaa! This scene was quite thrilling to read, and all the strategy talks are so awesome!!
Okay, this is new.. I'm anticipating this will have a plot significance further down the plot. Maybe as our heroes are losing a fight, Kumamon would camouflage in the snow and turn the battle around. Or maybe this is how things have been all along and I just failed to notice it.
Either Tommy is lying or is hesitant to spill this knowledge due to the consequences it's bound to have. We learn it's the later, and it actually complements their intrinsic contrasting tendencies or as what's an easy way to say it- slight rivalry. Kouji is taking Anumon's role of leader here, but I'm on his side here because it's not out of jealousy, but his skillset to actually contribute to the strategy. If Anumon is genuinely happy of the helpful input, I'd give her the due credit of wanting only what's best for the group. But if we sense jealousy, it's obvious that she only cares about her position as the controller, what I think more likely to be the case.
Nooo, please don't do that ToT. I've sensed this allegation shall befall on JP some day, but I think it belittles his character in a rather hollow way. Whatever's relevant for your character I suppose, but I can't say I like where this is going for my favorite one :/
This was some interesting bit, perhaps planting the seeds for a future sprout. I certainly like the prospect of this destination having some personal significance to Kouji, maybe where he'll find his beast form? That would really be most exciting!
While I find that understandable, it seems harsh from Kouji's end as well. Everything he claims about Kei could be right, and yet he ought to proceed with more kindness. It doesn't reflect well on a character as intelligent as Kouji and I'm really growing rather fed up of his insufferable comments. They're analytical but cold.
This was quite the trauma rant, but I feel like I get Kei a lot better now. She's deeply flawed, but she has a reason to be and is not really a brat about it. I also feel like she could process everything better, but couldn't we all? She's messed up and doesn't seem to work on herself much, but I get her. People this emotionally invested need support to transform, and I'm afraid she's not had any. Zoe and her get along well just because they're girls, but our protagonist is known to prefer her own company more. She keeps scolding Tommy and doesn't really relate with JP
Don't even get me started on the cold feud between her and Kouji- that's bound to be very draining and frustrating. I wouldn't say she's as isolated as JP, but I'd understand if she had her complexes and insecurities about not being a perfect fit. She may have called most of this on herself but she still deserves better.
I think this justifies my sympathy towards Kei's situation better. She's trying to improve, but overcompensates caring because she doesn't know any other way to do it. It's actually so difficult to actually implement change on something as fundamental like the way you show love, and she managed to do it. But unfortunately for her, even that isn't liked by others. I get that Zoe is looking out for Tommy, but in doing so, she unintentionally isolates Kei as she's not really close with anyone else. I get her annoyance, it really needs to be a lot less difficult than it is.
Well, the change came quick! Good for him though, I'm proud of Kouji. He's the one who impresses me a lot though, when put together with the time he decided to return.
Okay as much as I'm loving Kei this chapter, I wouldn't really let this one slide. Yes, she's the one who deserves to ask that question of the others as she was the one held unfairly responsible for it, but it's still unfair to Kouji who worked beyond his doubts and wrongs to choose to come back. I do get it if it's a rhetorical question or reflex, but this was a low blow for taunt. And it isn't even seeking validation, with the tone being accusatory.
Just what I feared.. I know life has been horrible to you lately, Kei, but please do better than that.
His analysis seems to be accurate, so much that I'm forced to rethink my earlier claim of him being too harsh with his opinions. I'm actually surprised how clearly Kouji interprets things, all due to his ability to detach, what I argue to be a flaw. I suppose I need to cut him some slack, given the asset he is and unproblematic he proves to be.
This was a bit humorous, a curious scene to add. I feel there's more to it than the surface, we'll see when the gem unexpectedly comes handy in a future battle.
Oh my, the feeling of urgency! The fact that they immediately associated it with Tommy seems far fetched even if logically possible. But as the plot establishes that connection anyways, I find it a well connected one. All this idling by when Tommy runs away to be replaced by worry on the first sign of harm was a nice reminder of the love they really share.
Sighhh.. So we're really going with this arc, huh? Guess a nerd has got to be a creep everything. Alright, forgive me, now I'm acting like a brat. It's just that it's JP-
I found this plot a tad too cliche but not necessarily ill thought. Won't be my favorite, but I guess it works.
There goes the subtlety ToT But I guess I need to cross one point from JP because of this. Like man, I deserved better from you.
Nice way to phrase the action, I quite liked it!
Huh, that's a brilliant way for our protagonists to calm themselves
like wdym it didn't go so well the last timeHey, cool imagery here!
These new theories are always most fascinating. So if you cleanse a spirit or scan just a portion of it, you could modify the form and nature of the spirit, without having to start all over again as an egg. I feel like this one's just for the lore but it'd be interesting if you can make it into a plot point or significant information that helps with one.
There comes Zoe shoving work and responsibility on the other's way with no apparent excuse than her just not wanting to deal with a situation.
Lore lore lore, love how it really fits together!
Some much needed explanation! Justifying the title is bound to be important, I feel like I have a much better understanding of the series now in general.
Zoe, that was such a horrible thing to say!! Minus a bazillion points from you. It's like a 'told you so moment', you may be right but you're not excused. That was too uncalled for!
One suggestion about the translations- please add them in the chapter itself?(though I'm sensing a word limit problem with this one, something to definitely consider for future chapters) I feel too lazy to scroll below for the meaning and a first time reader might not even be aware of such a thing awaiting in the comments. And when I read them after the entire thing, the impact or reward is just not worth it. Maybe a spoiler in the story itself would work better?
Now, onto the questions I go ~
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter?
I believe that entails the team building exercises! Initially, I found it a little too slow paced considering the adrenaline high note it left on. The heroes are taking a much needed step back, and while that is ideal, I wonder if it came too early. Personally, I would've preferred to see a breakdown or a fight about whose fault it really had been, before a sane attempt to rethink and try working together again. It would be a particularly demanding scene and no doubt draining to write as well as read, but it might make the teamwork further down the line, feel much more fruitful. It's just a raw idea, perhaps something to ponder over.
Keeping things balanced though, your version had no faults of its own. The characters are sticking to their signature personalities and the battle tricks were most entertaining. The hinting of Kei and Kouji's rivalry when Tommy reveals the idea wasn't truly his being a favorite. But the moment Kazemon figured out her air may not do much on it's own but could sweep one off their feet, especially if the ground was covered with Kumamon's ice- was the wittiest planned moves I ever read. It was nice to see the different pairs work together after realising their gifts and flaws, they're all so different but that's what makes their harmonious blend so capable.
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
To see everyone rise over their shortcomings with teamwork is always the best. You carried the entire thing with logic, emotions and creativity. To use your strength's for the group's advantage, and take support when you're being overpowered- the idea is too cinematic to not adore.
Kei's and Kouji's conversation about Tommy was also most enlightening and the morality of it really kept me hooked. In a way, it portrayed what would've turned out from their conversation stuck in the ground, if Kouji would've reacted more vocally. The overlap is insane- Kei describing her past trauma and Kouji arguing that she's using it as an excuse to make wrong judgements. Both sides are equally persuasive to the mind and soul, and that makes picking sides next to impossible but the conflict only so much more interesting. I feel that I would've agreed with Kouji, if not for his overly cold expression. Anyways, the scene really helped scratch my brain cells a bit.
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
JP hitting on Zoe, like it's believable but why ruin my favorite character? ToT jk
But it'd probably be the whole library scene - from the dark overtaking to fighting with the Gargoylemon to ultimately defeating him. Objectively, the scene has nothing wrong with it. It even carried forward that digimon's wierd reaction of the library not being open to public anymore and Kazemon's power to sense changes in the air. It also introduced the idea of corrupted Digimon and spirits and partial/only evil bits scanning that leads to purification and no Digiegg formation. It also gave us some more information about the beast Digimon in the most natural way that you could write it. But despite it's many impactful effects, it wasn't the most captivating in itself and felt a little cliché with the evil and freeing theme. Might just be a personal preference though, nothing too bad.
4) Are there any characters you especially liked in this chapter?
I believe Kouji takes this one. Despite his justified dislike of Kei, he tags along her team building exercises for the good of everyone. He even takes them seriously, working strategy with Tommy to defeat the other two. When Zoe feels to give a proper analysis, he jumps in with one. He also studies Kei's dynamic with Tommy rather well, offering perfectly valid points in the young boy's favor. After all the times he ignored Tommy's advances to talk and engage with him, defending and working with him is fair development. Out of everyone, he really seems to be working on himself.
5) Or some you especially didn't like?
Everyone else being equally petty this chapter, so I think it's a surprising tie. I hated Tommy and Zoe a little less perhaps, but I think such has always been my prejudicial equation with these two. Kazemon was acting too proud than she deserved to be in the beginning and tried shoving the responsibility of a crying Gargoylemon JP's way unfairly. Then comes her comment to Kei at the end, and the only reason I'm not lashing out about it is because Kei said something equally horrible to Kouji, asking if he'd not run away again. Tommy really played by strategy in the team building exercises, presenting no childish tantrums like the others. For his digimon spirit, he fought fairly well and seemed to be pulling his weight. Even as Anumon didn't really analyse him, the boy just let the entire thing slide. The demand for chocolates may be unjustified especially when they're short on money, but it's really nothing compared to the problem the others create. Tommy seems to be doing so well for his age, as Kouji later theorizes. Even as he runs away, no one really goes after him and that really hurts to read. At the end of the day, he's a kid who never even wanted to be here, but his best in the given circumstances. The least he deserves is to be treated every once in a while, if not by cotton candy, then by love and understanding.
Kei was a little insufferable this chapter. She's got the main character syndrome, owing probably to her being the one to make the final call to retreat last battle. Given her incredibly small contribution to the fight, her claiming the leadership feels underserved. I'd trust Kouji with the responsibility more, but I guess the socialite would hate to see anyone else lead. She later commits the gravest mistake of belittling Kumamon, and Kouji had my support when he put her in her place there. Her backstory looks more like an excuse than progress, and the way she thinks it justifies everything is sad. About JP, well he's done better. Romantically seeking Zoe at the worst time - I'd expect better than that from him. He also throws his own share of fits when Anumon and other suggest Lobomon fighting solo against everyone else. In the library as well, it's his rash action that breaks out a fight, that Zoe mainly resolves. He had little contribution in this chapter whatsoever, except for when he begins to soak in all the information from Gargoylemon. Hopefully, he remembers it and can present all of it when the need arises. And obviously, his chocolate saves the day as usual!
6) Did anything in this chapter surprise you?
Well the prospect of team building exercises and a devil turned Digimon were both quite new and caused their fair share of amusement within me. It's crazy that the group came so far with no synchronisation at all and seeing them establish it was rather refreshing. About the corrupted Gargoylemon, the idea was most intriguing. Even if not my favorite, the appeal and innovation was undeniable and meant great things for now the story will advance in general.
7) What do you think about the information Gargoylemon gives the group?
It was enlightening, alright! It came from a justifiable place- a Spirit himself that clearly knows better. The struggle in getting to them made the knowledge seem all the more sweeter and I've got nothing against it. The final explanation for the series title WoS, the existence of Beast Digimon and there being four more creatures like Grumblemon- are all shocking discoveries to read and I'm excited to see where you proceed with them!
8 ) What’s your opinion...
a) ...on the group/ group dynamic?
In a fight? Better than ever in the first scene. Emotionally? As distant as ever. There are internal resentments that need to be sorted out, before they can ever be a team. It's quite a retrogressive development, but not necessarily bad. Our heroes just need to rise beyond it. The argument around Tommy, Kei and Kouji's clash, JP hitting on Zoe and Kazemon being too in her head need more immediate attention than others, to improve the group's understanding in general. They need some quality time to actually come close and explore that reason to work together, rather than act on a instinct to just maximise chances of survival.
b) ...on Zoe?
The Queen of air needs to be grounded. She thinks of herself too highly and it painfully shows. Getting offended on Anumon's remark when it was nothing but the truth, acting arrogant when JP seems interested in her, and shoving the responsibility of a crying Gargoylemon JP's way as if she's above it- all instances stand against her. If only she did as much as her pride, the group would be in a far better place. She wasted no ocassion to use her protagonist ticket and I'd like her a whole lot more if she just didn't.
c) ...on Kei?
She's more childish than the literal child she's pointing fingers at. Her supposed superiority to inherently lead is annoying, but I won't deny that she does have a certain knack for it. She really needs to watch her mouth though, no one is obliged to put up with her sharp tounge. Belittling Tommy after all the shots she misses is almost embarassing. She's always got a trauma to justify her behaviour, and she would've had my sympathy, if this weren't the second time she pulled this. She prioritises her argument with Kouji instead of running after Tommy, and that was a huge red flag for me. She's really acting like a brat, hopefully she gets a redemption soon.
d) ...on Kouji?
His fatal flaw if keeping to himself hasn't reached changed, but I understand him more now. He's able to contribute so much precisely because he keeps at length from most the drama. He's cold and distant as ever, but still the best resource we've got. He's reliable, sees things as they are and is operates solely on logic. I could get behind a guy like that!
e) ...on JP?
His famous pros are intact, but he's terribly failing the basics. Flirting with Zoe so openly, triggering the Gargoylemon likee that, trying to boast that he's the most powerful- all these instances are severely below him. He's still got his endless supply of chocolate that fixes everything and an intrinsic desire to learn as much as he can about the Digital world. But he really needs to do a lot better than that to redeem himself in my eyes and remain my favourite, because Kouji is looking a really tempting alternative right now.. He's at his worst behaviour right now, that should change soon.
f) ...on Tommy?
The boy has certainly come a long way from the kid who said nothing except cry all all day. His tantrum in the market actually reminded me of how he's still that kid afterall. He pulls his own weight like the others, despite being so much younger and the only one to be pushed into this world involuntarily. The others chose this, unlike him, and thus must hold accountability in their descision. Yes, he's not the best right now, but the fact that we need to remind ourselves that he's not as old and mature as our other protagonists is commendable enough. He does what the situation require of him and is actually the least problematic of the bunch. While I do think he's being a little nerdy right now, I'd argue it's a well deserved scene. He does so much for his age, and deserves to be spoiled every now and then, to at least remind everyone of how much he's contributing to the group as a whole. So overall? He's doing great. In this chapter alone? He didn't make a scene when Anumon didn't even acknowledge him in the team building exercises, despite his above average performance so that's something. But he acted a brat demanding cotton candy when they're already thin on resources. So he's not the worst, but he's done better before.
9) Could you follow each plot point so far?
I'm pretty sure I navigated this chapter pretty effortlessly. The group rethinks strategy and works on some team building exercises to work together. After stopping to eat, the heroes then split to gather supplies and get more information on the Digital world. Tommy runs off in a childish fit after Kei and Kouji refuse to get cotton candy with the little money they got from ShellNumemon, which is followed by heated argument between the two. Zoe and JP encounter a dark library and fight with a corrupted Gargoylemon to restore order, cleanse him, and get the information they came for. In the end, Kei and Kouji run towards the library after seeing a strange light, hoping to find the lost Tommy there, only to find JP and Zoe there. If you were talking about the entire storyline of WoS, yeah I have no clue how I ended up here @_@
10) Did all the conversations feel natural?
I feel the only real conversation was between Kouji and Kei, and that was done spectacularly. All the other dialogues were abrupt and shar- but it's evident that they were meant to be so. Each character was talking how I'd expect them to, in the most raw way possible. But given how unidirectional and demanding everyone was being this chapter, I'm not surprised that the conversation didn't flow that well. So the conversations didn't go so naturally, but definitely felt real for the place our heroes were in right now.
11) Were any parts confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
I'm pretty sure I've pointed some of them out already by now, but I'll recite them for your convenience.
The most important one being JP's claim of being stronger than Kouji and thus the more natural choice for being the one to fight solo, but then retracting that statement after realising something. I personally failed to decode that realisation.
Then comes a new point I haven't raised yet- the history of Gargoylemon. Who corrupted him and why? I think that's an important arc to explore but it doesn't feel like we're getting an answer soon. Whenever we do though, I hope it chains back to this possible plot hole.
The scene where the stall owner hands Kouji a gem was also a bit strange- particularly because he asks for no payment. I understand that you needed him to acquire it for a future plot point, and they had very limited money to buy it voluntarily just when they had refused Tommy, but there's an easy way out. Perhaps the seller could exchange it for a peculiar item our heroes have? Kouji's bandana would make a fine choice, might I add.
12) On a scale of 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy that chapter?
I think I'll give it a 7! The battle descriptions were awesome, but the library cliche and everyone's tantrums ruined my mood a bit. The writing was pretty great still, so not much you could've done to prevent it. It's just a personal preference, sorry!
13) On a scale of 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next chapter?
An 8.5! Tommy's missing plus the tension between characters has risen to the point of explosion so the next few chapters are going to be exciting for sure. I wonder how long it'll be before they face Grumblemon again..
14) Do you have any predictions for where the story will go next?
Well I already saw a peek so the next one's about Tommy. I feel it's his self discovery chapter, and perhaps a plot breakthrough for his character somehow. We're definitely getting a backstory, hopefully he's treated better moving forwards.
That's all I have for now, Tikaa! I hope to review the next chapter in a few days but this cold has gotten me bedridden so I can't promise anything. Happy writing for now, and until next time ~
Love, Alex
Hey there, Tika, I am back with today's final review!
So, after a glance, it seems like almost every one of my guesses were correct... but oh well, it was really entertaining.
I also forgot about that, Kazemon. I just remembered why she was kinda annoying while still having everyone's best interests at heart.
It is kinda funny that Kazemon refers to herself (?) and Zoe as "We" while referring to others in lowercase pronouns. Also, it seems that JP's... uh... flirty nature (I wouldn't say perverseness, but flirtatiousness isn't the right word either...) towards Zoe also rubbed off on Kazemon, unless Beetlemon and Kazemon have an ancient beef that we aren't aware of yet?
It's sad that my GOAT JP is like that, but it kinda reminds me of Jiraiya (JP is DEFINITELY not in Mineta territory, not this version at least, iykyk) but not to that level. So yeah, I wouldn't accept any slander towards this version of Junpei except for his frisky stuff.
Same tbh, Kaze.
Oh well, it seems that Kaze is actually more of a tsundere than even Kouji, sehr interessant.
I found the whole planning, being defeated, planning again, finally defeating Lobomon part very cool. Great job, good writing.
This was funny ngl. But yeah, the following conversation actually reminded that these are all teens and pre-teens trying to survive in a world they were kinda misled into -- even though every foreword says that they 'willfully' came to the Digimon world and every other chapter says that they have a 'destiny' to fulfill. Kinda reminds me of some characters named after numbers-
I still smell a ship-in-progress between Kouji and Kei, Ik this is a fanfic, but I will make my own fanfic of your fanfic if this doesn't end up being canon far away in something like Ch-30. I would even buy best friends if that's not your taste.
I smell ill omens for some reason.
Hey JP, Ik you're my GOAT, but it would be great if you could stop harassing a girl who has no interest in you, yk? Like, you have had nothing going on with her since the very first time you met her on a train, do you remember?
I realised something's definitely wrong with my head when I read that k as a b. I should stop hating on Mineta so much, maybe that'd clear my mind... but I'd almost definitely fail miserably in hating a character who has literally no role except for being a weird fetish gag, but I digress.
Yeah, something is definitely wrong with me.
By the way, I have a suspicion that D-Tectors could work against Gigasmon/Grumblemon if Kazemon or anyone else is able to use it like this against it too. But, well, that entirely depends whether Grumblemon is willfully following Cherubimon's command or not.
I understand why you'd think that, Zoe, but people aren't black & white yk?
Sheesh, Kouji, I feel like that was a bit harsh. I smell a big argument between Kouji and Kei at the beginning of the next chapter.
Now, to the questions!
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter?
It kinda went as I expected it to, but it was written pretty well, so I don't have much to add or complain about.
2) What were your favourite parts and why?
Even though planning and defeating Lobomon was really cool, IMO, the Gargoylemon fight and the lore drop was even cooler.
I love plot devices -- some overpowered guy who loves pizza, probably.
3) What were your least favourite parts and why?
Technically, logically speaking, if the final fight was my favourite and the planning and defeating Lobomon part was my second favourite -- the whole thing with Kouji, Tommy, and Kei should be my least favourite but it sure doesn't feel that way. Kei wasn't annoying, she was actually just being genuine this time. Tommy was being a child, and Kouji was being a tsundere. Even though they might seem so from the surface, I find it really cool that your characters are definitely not one-dimensional in any way. They are wellf-fleshed and feel like genuine teen/pre-teens lost in another world with some powerful abilities.
4) Are there any characters you especially liked in this chapter?
IMO, even though Zoe did the coup de grace with Gargoylemon, Kouji was the emotional MVP of this chapter. He has accepted his place as a core member of the Chosen Ones and actually listened to Kei's emotional ramblings. He was also really useful as the 'main villain' in training.
5) Or some you especially didn't like?
I am sorry, my GOAT JP, but next time -- please try being less of a womaniser (oh, I have found the word I was looking for!).
6) Did anything in this chapter surprise you?
Not exactly, but the D-Tector being able to partially scan Digimons is almost definitely a stroke of "Super Easy, Barely An Inconvenience!".
7) What do you think about the information Gargoylemon gives the group?
Cool loredrop ngl
8 ) What’s your opinion...
a) ...on the group/ group dynamic?
b) ...on Zoe?
c) ...on Kei?
d) ...on Kouji?
e) ...on JP?
f) ...on Tommy?
The group has evolved a lot since the Grumblemon fight in terms of both emotional resonance and fighting synergy. I like the direction where this is going.
Zoe is, strangely enough, the sweetest, most emotionally stable, and has the most common sense out of everyone in this group with sparks of ingenuity here and there (this chapter is the perfect example of that). I don't remember much of Frontier, but I really like this version of Izumi.
I am still riding the Kei & Kouji ship, and JP my GOAT was a bit of a dick in this one. IMO, Tommy didn't really do much in this chapter except for the whole training session in the form of Kumamon. But well, he is a child after all, and maybe the latest plot device!
9) Could you follow each plot point so far?
No problem with following the story to be honest with you. It was good.
10) Did all the conversations feel natural?
I pride myself in writing good dialogue even though the rest of my stuff is really messy, but I dream to write dialogue as clean and good as this.
11) Were any parts confusing, unconvincing or unclear?
Average shounen stuff, so, no.
12) On a scale of 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy that chapter?
I'd say this one was a 9.5/10. Why? Idk, vibes.
13) On a scale of 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next chapter?
Whatever "I would have done another review half-asleep if there were another chapter published" is on that scale.
14) Do you have any predictions for where the story will go next?
Why do I feel like that random Digimon who gave that crystal to Kouji is either a really bad guy or a really good guy? They will definitely go to find Tommy and find some form of enemy in the bazaar or some equivalent. I am not sure if Grumblemon would appear, but another one of the Legendary Warriors under Cherubimon almost definitely would. Also, there will be badass teamwork in the fight. Then some more loredrop or some revealation.
I almost feel like I have made a formula for guessing lol
Anyway, I hope my vibes-based review is useful in one way or the other, that's all from me today. Happy writing!
Yours sincerely,
The Rebel
1) What's your initial reaction to the chapter? I think it was very interesting to read. There was lots of information given, and although I haven't read the previous chapters, I could follow who was who and what they were doing.

2) What were your favourite parts and why? I really liked the part where Lobomon fights the others as a fake enemy. At first, the group was super uncoordinated, but they managed to work together to "defeat" him.
3) What were your least favourite parts and why? I didn't like it when Tommy ran away. Now the group has one less member, although I bet you'll make something worth reading come out of it.
4) Are there any characters you especially liked in this chapter? Kei was probably my favorite. I really like her take-charge attitude. She reminds me of myself.
5) Or some you especially didn't like? No, I think each character is pretty special to the team. Even the enemy is well-thought out.
6) Did anything in this chapter surprise you? Definitely the fact that Tommy runs away.
7) What do you think about the information Gargoylemon gives the group? The group will probably fight each monster, maybe one per each member.
8 ) What’s your opinion...
a) ...on the group/ group dynamic? The group seems to have lots of arguments, but overall, it seems they get along.
b) ...on Zoe? She seems to be the smartest one in the group.
c) ...on Kei? Like I said, she has a take-charge attitude, and feels like the leader.
d) ...on Kouji? I feel like he's the independent one.
e) ...on JP? He seems strongly opinionated. Like, he knows what he wants.
f) ...on Tommy? More dependent on his friends.
9) Could you follow each plot point so far? Yeah, I think so. Then again, I haven't read the other chapters yet.
10) Did all the conversations feel natural? Yes.
11) Were any parts confusing, unconvincing or unclear? No, I think you did a great job on all the dialogue, characters, etc.
12) On a scale of 1 to 10, how much did you enjoy that chapter? 9!
13) On a scale of 1 to 10, how eager are you to read the next chapter? 9!
14) Do you have any predictions for where the story will go next? No, but I'm super curious!