Hi Tanishka
That is a beautifully deep poem..........I admit it took me time to understand😅😅...........but that makes the poem even better........Really nice.......
"None for anyone is the world's reality" this line hit me hard...
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Hands,strickingly cold
To one’s eyes lies are told.
In our dying breath and hopes,
Even the wind goes.
Isn’t this something we all know ?
The habit of letting go,
Rolls on the tip of one’s lips
Accompained by the devil’s kiss.
And the bliss to hold on
To a hand not our own,
It’s a lie short lived
And a secret untold.
‘None for anyone’
Is this world’s reality.
Everything’s undone
When you see this reality.
You’ve nothing to hold,
Nothing do I own,
For in our dying breath and hopes
Even the wind goes.
Hi Tanishka
That is a beautifully deep poem..........I admit it took me time to understand😅😅...........but that makes the poem even better........Really nice.......
"None for anyone is the world's reality" this line hit me hard...
Hi @Tanishka! Beautiful poem!
Hands,strickingly cold
To one’s eyes lies are told.
In our dying breath and hopes,
Even the wind goes.
‘None for anyone’
Is this world’s reality.
Everything’s undone
When you see this reality.
You’ve nothing to hold,
Nothing do I own,
For in our dying breath and hopes
Even the wind goes.
Hi!
This a great poem, you've wrote here. I love the imagery and how deep the theme of emotion is - is it based on a real experience? However, personally for me, it's not too clear who the speaker is, or what they've experienced but the emotion and themes are really good. Maybe that could be something to work on through refining and editing? But other than that, it's a great poem, well done and keep writing!
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