Young Writers Society

ur this stuff is also really bad. write more . this is lyk a abridged form of a chapter. is this a summary or chapter?

work hard mate. this cat story is crap! try something diffy.

All right, Black here for another review!


Okay, this piece is actually better than the other one I reviewed, it feels more like a novel's outline to me, though a bit odd. . . . Okay, so right now I'm feeling like you're probably 5 or 6? No offense, but really, your grammar still needs work.

I had to re-read this piece to get it to makes sense. A READER SHOULD NEVER HAVE TO TAKE A SECOND GLANCE AT A WRITERS WORK! That's an important rule that we should never EVER forget, read your work, if it doesn't make sense then go back and work on it till it does. See, you write like you talk, and you write like you speak Criol (Believe me, I live in a country where EVERYONE speaks Criol, me included, and your writing sounds like it would if written down!).

Criol, is, I will announce, a MESS! No other description, it just is!

So . . . To fix your grammar and plot I advise these things.

– A grammar and spelling checker.
– Far more detail
– A nit-picking reviewer (I'll do it if you ask . . .)
– And lots and lots of practice.
A writer always gets better through practice, always. You can have help from a bit of learning, but you only ever perfect your craft by practicing it.

Anyway, you work on this . . . you might be onto something.

Keep writing!

~Black~

Hello there here is a me with a review for you I hope it helps you out although it may be a little small and not to good but the reason for that is because it is review day and I need to go to a birthday party for my brother.

Once again I hope it helps.

Sorry but this does not make any sense to me

Then the doctor saud haha you cant stop me scatty cat and he went to the empire state building and turned everyone into slaves with his mind machine that was helped by the pointy top of the building.

Beautiful!! It was by far the best piece of literature I have ever read.