Hi there @Spilledink I am here to do a review on you work so fist things first.
What I like
All I can say is sorry. I think of this word sorry a lot in my live
What needs work
It really hurts when you hit me. it dose hurt when people hit you but maybe you did something to deserve it, or maybe you are very sensitive to what you feel.
It really hurts when you hate me. it dose hurt when people hate you but you must be doing something wrong are maybe you annoying at times.
The sting of my cheeks burns. this can be coursed also from being in the sun to much the sun can bern you.
have to be hidden. I am going to try to help you make this sen tins a bit better.
It really hurts when you hit me. this is the second time you have yoused this sen sen tins try to find a different way of saying this
Suggestions
1 for: have to be hidden. I have to be hidden from you other wise you hurt me even more. so that is all that I can say, so keep up on the good work. HAPPY REVIEW DAY.
@EagleFly out to seek and kill
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