We can imagine any enchantment
All we need to do is think
We can express ourselves just by using ink,
We can feel things most people can't.
We sit in the center of a room,
Close our eyes,
And let our minds do the rest.
We close our eyes and we hear,
The trotting of wild horses
Running freely, until they disappear.
We close our eyes and we smell,
Enchantments of a spell
Cast upon us.
We close our eyes and we feel,
The iron sword on our shoulders
While we kneel
For our knighting.
We close our eyes and we see,
The sun's glowing heat while
We hide under our shade tree
Reading our magic book.
We close our eyes and we taste,
Fumes from toxic waste
From after the apocalypse.
Our minds have made universes
Where we are invincible,
Where fear can't reach us,
Where pain only happens when you have to leave.
We are writers.
We are dreamers.
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Hey, FireBird99 here for a small review! This is really very interesting. I like it. I have to say what I love most about it is the medieval stanzas. I'm a sucker for a good medieval book or poem. The way you express things are really awesome. The only thing I'd say is the spacing in between each stanza is a bit of a pain when you are reading.
This is my favorite part:
That is a perfect line.
~Fire
Wow. This is really stunning. When I read this, I though "Yes! My thoughts exactly!" We writers are big dreamers. That's why we have such big imaginations!
I'd like to say that your imagery was fantastic. I could actually imagine and feel all of the things that you described in your poem.
But is this a free verse? Because if it's not, it is a little strange to have irregular numbers of lines in each stanza (except for the last part, of course).
Other than that, THIS IS AWESOME. This sums up how I feel about my writing. Thanks for this wonderful poem! Keep up the good work!
You perfectly express the joy of writing. Its so true; anything can be imagined!
I don't understand the stanza length change though. The poem is expressing the same thing, so why does it change? I also found the huge spacing between the stanzas to be annoying, though that is really just a formatting issue.
What you are expressing is expressed wonderfully though. The imagery used to show the various things a writer can show was done so well.
I like this in general.
Hey, Sounds of Silence here! Writing something that vaguely resembles a review.
Writing, I think, is something that everyone envisions differently. I mean, we all have our own styles and such.
But you, my friend, have summed up what everyone has in common so beautifully: writers are dreamers.
Now, I'm not expert on poetry but I do believe that the imagery used here is wonderful. I felt so emotional with each line I read. It's something I feel many writers can relate to, and it simply touches me. I am a writer, and I am a dreamer. We all are. Writing really does feel like being under some kind of spell.
I don't mean to sound like a broken record, but damn, it's so good.
Keep up the great work!
Wow!!!!!Lau2001,wow!!!!!!!!!!I think your are very true.I can understand your poetry because I am a writer too.
The topic is very realistic."WE ARE WRITERS WE ARE DREAMERS"
It conveys everything in just a six set of beautiful words.
You have used some words which I did not understood.But still it was a wonderful poem with a spiritual and dreamatic touch.It was a poem with whole lot of meaning.
HATS OFF TO YOU AND YOUR WORK!!!!!!!!!!
Hello!
). Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem! Keep up the good work.
I just have to thank you for actually appreciating the art of writing! Most people don't understand how much work goes into writing only one verse. I like how you started each phrase with "We close our eyes and we..." I think that must be true for all writers. That we all just sometimes close our eyes and let our imagination take over. Speaking of imaginations, you must have a very wide one because your poem goes from kneeling knights to the zombie apocalypse(I really liked that one by the way
~Elephant
Thank you so much. I love this website because everyone here is encouraging and kind. Im very shy about my work, and everyone here makes me feel welcome. Thank you.
No problem. I like it here too
Hey! LOVE THIS!
Hey!
i just want to congratulate you on an incredible poem
I loved it because it's such a great tribute to writers. Many people can come up with stiries but only writers can put them on paper in a way that people are willing read and carry around.
this was beautiful in everyday.
never stop writing
i just have one tiny question: how do you taste fumes??? I believe fumes should be smelled. But anyway....
just one thing; maybe you could get the last 2 lines in the beginning as well.... but thats just a suggestion
Thank you. Writers are pretty awesome. Anyway, if u find anything that rhymes withsmeel, please tell me. I will see if i like the suggestion and thank you for reviewing.
Good job with writing this! It's so amazing!
Hi! I really loved this poem because it is so true; writers love to just sit and imagine.
Overall, I thought it was very well written and didn't notice any errors besides maybe a few typos, which are a very quick fix. (Just make sure you always proofread.) My main critique is that there were a few lines that I feel like didn't flow very well. "For our knighting" and "From after the apocalypse" are two lines that I felt like just didn't quite work. Maybe choosing different words or the structure of the sentence would help??
Overall, I liked it a lot and I think you did a really good job. Keep writing!!:)
Thank you, things like " keep writing" make my day.
Hi! Hermione here for a review! I see that you're fairly new here, so welcome, and great job on this poem! It was very lovely and relatable, and I enjoyed it thoroughly. Here are a few nitpicks and minor mistakes I noticed while reading this (there aren't many).
Just a little typo. 'Be' should be turned to 'by'. Also I think you need a comma after this line, along with several other lines in this poem. It's a place that I naturally wanted to pause while reading it. Punctuation is up to you of course, but I would suggest reading back through the piece and placing a comma wherever you feel yourself stopping to take a breath.
The second line here should be changes to "The sun's glowing heat", because the sun is possessive of its heat.
This image you displayed was probably my favorite because I'm a big fan of dystopian thrillers and end-of-the-world novels. It flowed a little oddly though. Here is what I would suggest changing it to:
"We close our eyes and taste
Fumes of toxic waste
From after the apocalypse."
Overall, wonderful job on this poem! Keep writing!
Thank you, i will make the changes. I don't go to an english school, so i don't notice these things. Thank you so much,
Oooo I really like this piece. For starters, I like it because it is SO TRUE. I think writers are a special kind of species; their own special kind of breed. Secondly, I love the imagery used in it, especially the word: enchantment. I haven't heard that one in a while! I enjoyed the rhyming scheme, how it rhymed but also had the feel of blank verse. The structure of the stanzas was as equally as impressive as the poem itself.
Thank you for reviewing. Im glad you liked it.it was my first poem i wrote, so i was nervous about the style and rules of poetry.