Hello! Megan17 here with a review. I was really moved by this poem. Being a teenage girl, I know whats it like to hate yourself and have serious self confidence issues, but this was above and beyond. I really liked when you wrote, "But how could I not fall in love with being sick?
The size of a toothpick?
Why would I need my heart to beat?
If the new-found smiles of boys did it for me?
I wanted to be something to be looked at,
Nothing but that,
Pretty, skinny, lifeless girl
A wonderful pearl to hold,
Because I was too weak to uphold myself"
The detail you included was exquisite and just wonderful. As for punctuation, I dont see any huge mistake, but I myself am not that great at punctuating. Overall, I really enjoyed your poem. I look forward to reading more of your work!
-Megan17
Points: 217
Reviews: 12
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