Not bad, but I think you need to fix the last line. It seems a little cliched. You also might want to simplify the line "nihilistic rendezvous, voyeur boys peeking" second stanza a little, as it breaks the tone you had. It's just a bit too complex. Apart from that, I quite liked it.
I don't generally enjoy explaining the meaning of my poetry, but for clarification:
I did not give my ex "proper closure" and being the dumb broad she is thought we were still dating despire our last date being sometime back in December and so she's just now realizing we broke up and it's biting me in the ass.
Lying little narcissistic wench.
Not bad 
. Well, sorry but I didn't get the last part? what does it mean? Why uh... the things have gone down to drain?
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