Short, sweet, to the point. Basically, that is all I have to say.
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did you...change something?
Pretty. I like the personal aspect of it, it really adds feeling to the poem. A little more impact would be good, but the simplicity is very effective. Nice work.
I really liked this. Brings back memories. Though, maybe you could expand it?
"but instead, we found worthless projector slides
and empty cans to kick around
while we waited on unpromised miracles
and the air to fill our lungs."
I love that... heh Nice work.