Very cool.
Except for the first two lines: not working. Change 'em or get rid of 'em.
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"you know tomorrow will yield a better yesterday
and the fright of real tears is the only feeling you have
right before you fall asleep."
I wasn't liking it much until the last stanza which is GREAT. If we still had the star thingy I'd give you five just because of the last stanza!