the fright of real tears...

by Sam
  • July 17, 2005
  • Poetry
  • Dramatic
  • Old Poetry
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Very cool.

Except for the first two lines: not working. Change 'em or get rid of 'em.

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Chevy wrote a review · Mon Jul 18, 2005 4:37 pm

"you know tomorrow will yield a better yesterday
and the fright of real tears is the only feeling you have
right before you fall asleep."

I wasn't liking it much until the last stanza which is GREAT. If we still had the star thingy I'd give you five just because of the last stanza!



There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
— W. Somerset Maugham