Young Writers Society

I thought it was pretty good! One of the only things that I found wrong with this, was that you used the word "sware" incorrectly. It is actually a word, but it just means the past tense of "swear", so it's pretty much "swore" but with an "a". I believe the word that you were looking for would have been "swear". Another problem, is that it's a little bit choppy. Try fitting more lines of the poem together to create larger stanzas. Lastly, I think that anytime you have words bolded, you should actually have them in italics. It just creates a more intense feel to it (except for the last line... I think it actually fits really well bolded). Overall, pretty nice job! Keep writing! If you have any questions, feel free to PM me with anything you need