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Note To Self:
Art
From Me
Is For One Subjective
Subjective To Being
Sometime
A Drive Of Passion
An Expression
Anticipated
And Facilitated
By Inspiration
In The Right Motivation
It Becomes A Fathom
Determination
Stimulation
Fascination
If Done Right
More Motivation
And More Inspiration
For encouragement
From Astonishment
Courage Meant
To Strength The Soul
Of The Brave
That Chase To Break Away And Free From Being Stuck To The Traps Of The Mind
Closing It To Be INSLAVED
Cave To The Wonder
Because Your Wonder Hungers
In A Cave
Head On The Ground
Lost In The Lust
And The Fuss For The Trust
Isolated In The Cost
We Live For What We Can Earn
Even As The Soul Yearns
In Desire
To Find Common Ground
But It Burns The Heart To Inspire
The Mind To Chase For The Intellectual Higher
An Inquisitive Philosophers Quarrel And Quagmire
But In My Persona
I Mend Myself A Person
A Person To Admire
For My Desire For
Intellectual Liberation
Internal Actual Realization
Helped Me With Deliberation
With Nature
The Naturally
Naturalized Neutralized
Nation
And In The Declaration
I Am Casually
Unnatural In My Natural Station
To The Mundane Layman And Ignorant
Insinuation Of Fear And Worry
With Distasteful Bitterness
It Seems My Aura And Energy Is
Too Great
For An Isolated Isolative Dative Environment
Thus Causing Anxiety, Worry Sometimes Fear But Also Love
Ununderstood, Misunderstood
And Misconstrued
A Youth
Lost In His Own Lonesome
Madness Of Truth
Art Is A Drive Of Passion
A Fascination Determination
Of and For Motivation
And This System
Is Driven By And With Passion
Passion For Isolation
Passion For Segregation
Passion For Neutralization
Through Fear
A Passion For Injustice
And Alienation
That I Can Feel Like An Alien
In My Own Home Nation
Passion Is Carried By And With Motivation
The Question Is, Who Steers It's Orientation ?
Manifested In Inspiration
With Right Drive
Anything Can Become A Art
And This System Has Mastered The Art Of
Illusion And Destruction
And In It I've Become
The Elusive
Abnormal Fact
With His Own Compas Mentis Mind
That Has Its Intellect Intact
Im The Abnormal Fact
The Effect Of A Ever Differentiating And Changing Impact
And
In My Passion I'm Driven By Purely
Truthful Transcendent Thought
Motivating Me To Make My Abnormality
A Transcending Art
And Apologize
If It May Seem To Have A Condescending Tone
With A Bold Fatuous Heart.
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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the wretched S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - This is a poem on how being an artist can affect your life, good or bad, and how being a creator can be rewarding if you believe in yourself and remember to do it for your own heart.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I’m not sure if the art is AI or not, but if so, then I would have liked to see a drawing you made, because I feel like AI does not capture what a human can feel. But those are just my thoughts!
Chocolate Bar - I like the theme in this piece! The way the words melds together reminds me of when I create, because so many people tell you to just believe in yourself or have enough motivation to do the art, but it might not feel like enough. For any artist, making art never quite feels enough. My favorite lines were “It Seems My Aura And Energy Is Too Great For An Isolated Isolative Dative Environment” because it talks about how a passion for art can be so great that it can seriously harm and “And Apologize If It May Seem To Have A Condescending Tone With A Bold Fatuous Heart”. Because sometimes how we express can get misinterpreted and the meaning can get lost.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a very compelling poem about how art can be helpful and harmful. I enjoyed reading this, as I think it reflects the aspects of the artist life well.
I wish you a lovely day/night! ^v^
This isn’t a comment on the poem, but personally I’d prefer to see a pencil sketch you made of your idea for the illustration, or a painting you found with credit or something. Using the works of others in your work is a time-honored tradition. But using AI art is not, and I’m not sure it’s even allowed on here.
From Google: There's a lot of sentimentality here, yet the reliability gets lost when you don't mention other outside sources.
This is where you run into a rut as an artist. There's plenty of vulnerability yet the persona and the voice become voiceless. A freeform poem that never formed because you didn't give it pause in stanzas.
The rhythm is lacking yet pounding. Keep going, but breathe and pause once again with stanzas.
You saying art is subjective, stood out to me, especially the cowardly courageous, you deem as yourself. I wish I could give you specific lines but there are only lines and no stanzas. Too cohesive and yet formless. Please keep writing and find your voice, not art's.
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