I miss the day when I didn't have to know anything
The day when I didn't have to pretend to be somebody I'm not just to fit in
I miss the day I was not judged for something I didn't know
I miss the day when I could be just me and not what somebody else wants me to be
I miss the day when I didn't know what pain was and how it feels to be in pain
I miss the day I didn't have to worry about failing
I miss the day when I played with my pencils and crayons as if they were action figures and just getting lost in the story that I created
And The Day I Miss The Most
Is The Day When I Never Ever Even Existed.
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I thought u were going to say (And The Day I Miss The Most *was when i was a baby) But wow that was a surprise.
Before I say anything, I'd like you to know somethings really quick. I miss those days too but sometimes it's great I exist and I am pretty sure you will find your reason to exist. You can take the mask of here because here no one need to pretend everyone has a say everyone has a mouth. I want you to be proud of existing. One day you won't have to pretend or be judge in the real world. I believe we all with be safe from the judging of others you just need to give it time. But you living is important. If you never existed how where you going to play with your pencils and crayons as if they were action figures and just getting lost in the story that you created? How where you going to become a famous poet in our eyes? How were you going to become a great friend to the people irl and online? I don't know you but you're my friend no matter what. You have a family here who cares about you and cares about what you have to say. Never ever say the day you miss the most was when you didn't exist. You're special we all are and we all make up this world together by existing we are all friend and family. Okay? You might be a little older than me lol but no matter how old someone is we are all in this together. If you EVER need to talk my PM box is always open feel free to text me.
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The ending is haunting!
This is a beautiful poem that speaks to anyone who has passed that stage of life, it makes you ask about childhood, life what is the meaning of it all? I say anything that makes the reader question themselves and think deeply about such things is art in my book.
Overall, beautiful and haunting poem.
It is haunting because you can never go back to that time simply remember it and over time... maybe forget it. It's a very haunting poem as you see it is making me think very deeply about such things!
Very very beautiful I cannot give it enough praise!
Now I cannot speak on the technical side of poetry as I'm not a poet nor expert on it myself, but I'm sure it would be interesting to dive into!
Haven't posted a review in a while but this one was just calling me because of how much it stood out from other poems really. First of all, gravely relatable, it's like you took the thoughts I was having and stitched just the exact words needed. Second of all, growing up sucks, it really does and there's no sugarcoating that. Sure things get worse before the get better but they will never be as great as the time when we were a child, and man you wrote just that perfectly.
Honestly I don't have any notes for you expect a small suggestion: you can break the lines into smaller chunks for a better flow.
Once again, amazing work fellow poet