Spiders in the Night: A Villanelle of Love

Hello CapitalMonday here, a review from the nest. I would first like to say how amazing this poem is written and how you rhymed every word in this poem. This poem is well-written since you are telling a story of how the "spiders" are like nightmare (?) in your pleasant dreams that you wished to have. These "spiders" wonder all over your heart and tied it together to make your heart feel sore, as if you were missing someone or else you were sad.

The rhyming in this poem is unbelievable and sorta reminds me of a Shakespearean poem (like the rhyming pattern since your rhymed the last two line together; couplet). This is also one that I could maybe relate to since i do feel sad at night and sometimes the spiders of the outside and wonder around the bedroom walls until they find me laying there, crying with my heart still beating,

So they pull the threads over my open heart and tie it together, making my heart sore and wary of what I would be crying about (adding pain to it)

Hope you enjoyed this "review" and I must fly away!
CapitalMonday

Ugh, why why why is it always spiders lately?! I blame Stella and now you *glares*

Ok, technically this is pretty good - a couple notes: "while silently all eight feet tread" isn't reading right to my ear, I want an extra syllable between "feet" and "tread," or, alternatively, for it to read "while all eight feet silently tread," but I think that's a me thing. I keep rereading it, and arguing with myself ^^ (and now I see Morrigans's note on that same line! It's always that one teeny bit that gets hinged on, isn't it?)

"adroit" threw me, because everything else is kept to very simple vocabulary, and almost sing-song with the form, so using a, quote, SAT word doesn't fit quite right. I'm not sure - the word itself fits really nicely abstractly, but doesn't with the tone of the rest of the poem. I was trying to come up with something as an alternative, and while I like some of the words, (nimble, dexterous - which really isn't any better in terms of tone and your other word choice - , deft) none really fit, so that was incredibly unhelpful.

Overall, your form definitely got tighter as this went on - the first few stanzas feel a bit stiff, though I think most of that is in my reading of the second line of the second stanza. Your last two stanzas I think are your strongest, and definitely where you used the villanelle form to your advantage, rather than it attempting to control you writing, subtle as it reads to me.

Ok, now to get spiders out of my head!

Wow. A true poet. I never, in my life, thought I could ever come close to liking a spider.
This poem has switched the perspective and totally painted them in a new light.
I'ma be honest, I'm not gonna go cuddle with any spider any time soon, but, dang!
For a moment you had me willing.
I wish I could tell you my favorite line from this poem, but i feel like they are all so good!
I loved it when you quoted yourself, everything. *claps*

Wow, Widders, this is lovely.

I am only a fan of villanelles when they deserve fans, and this one does.

Technically, it's perfect. You've got iambic tetrameter down to a science. I couldn't find a syllable out of place. You use the repeated lines in new ways each time that you use them. And your rhyme scheme is on fleek.

Gurl, I'mma have to put on my nitpick hat.

their webs are strung of gos'mer threads

while silently each eighth foot treads

They are desire,