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Broken mirror image

by Rinisha


She was called Zara and she always felt different from the rest. Her name was exotic and people around her could never pronounce her name properly. It was as if she never quite fit in with her surroundings, as if there was something wrong with her. She felt she was not good enough and that she could never live up to the expectations others had of her. Her classmates laughed at her and called her "idiotic" and "weird".

Her parents had high expectations of her and Zara wanted nothing more than to meet them. But no matter how hard she tried, it never seemed to be good enough. She was constantly criticised and compared to others. Zara was never satisfied with her own performance because she always wondered if it was enough.

Zara tried to change herself to fit in. She changed her dress style, her hair and her behaviour. She tried to be the person others wanted her to be, but it only made her more unhappy.

At school, she felt like an outsider. She did not get along well with her classmates and had only a few friends. She was often bullied and laughed at because of her exotic name and her otherness. All this began to gnaw at her and she became angry, very angry.

Zara felt increasingly disconnected from the world around her and one day it happened. She exploded. She shouted at her parents and said things she shouldn't have said. She pushed her friends away and locked herself in her room.

She was now affected by her surroundings and had turned into a person she no longer recognised. She had always been afraid of becoming like this, but now it had happened.

Zara continued to shut herself off from the world and began to focus on her anger. It consumed her completely and she became darker and darker. She became addicted to the adrenaline of anger and became more and more isolated.

One day, she realised she could no longer go on like this. She had lost control of her life and it was time to accept who she was. Zara decided to seek help, but it was too late.

Her dark side had taken over and she was caught in her own anger.

Zara's story shows how powerful the influence of the environment can be and how it can lead to anger and isolation. Her story is a warning that we must accept who we are and not let ourselves be influenced by the expectations of others. It is important to realise that anger and hatred are not a solution. Be kind to yourself and to others. Because in the end, we are all human, and we all have our own struggles to fight. Be who you are, and if people are telling you to be someone you aren't then just don't listen to them.

It is a sad story, but it is an important lesson.


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Stickied -- Thu Mar 30, 2023 11:40 pm
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upinthearcher wrote a review...



Hey!

I really believe that this is awesome, mainly the "Zara continued to shut herself off from the world and began to focus on her anger. It consumed her completely and she became darker and darker. She became addicted to the adrenaline of anger and became more and more isolated." I think it delivers de message perfectly and it really gets to me.




Rinisha says...


Hi upinthearcher,

thank you for reading my story. I am very glad that the message was clear.

Thanks for the review!

- Rinisha



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Fri Mar 24, 2023 1:41 am
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Hello, this is Foxmaster!!!🦊
I have to say that this short story really describes the saying "quality over quantity." It was sad and you really made a point about how not to let people bring you down. To be honest, it puts emphasis over something I said once:
"Wrong or right, I will still be awesome." I said once when I got a question wrong. I have to say that the images were really cool and I really felt bad for Zara, which you made a good job of showing.




Rinisha says...


Thank you Foxmaster!

Your reviews really motivate me to write more.

- Rinisha



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aw, you're welcome! :)



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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: This was a really interesting little tale here. Its short but its very punchy in terms of quite how much it showcases the impact of this particular situation and I think it does a great job bringing something like that to life in a pretty short package.

Anyway let's get right to it,

She was called Zara and she always felt different from the rest. Her name was exotic and people around her could never pronounce her name properly. It was as if she never quite fit in with her surroundings, as if there was something wrong with her. She felt she was not good enough and that she could never live up to the expectations others had of her. Her classmates laughed at her and called her "idiotic" and "weird".

Her parents had high expectations of her and Zara wanted nothing more than to meet them. But no matter how hard she tried, it never seemed to be good enough. She was constantly criticised and compared to others. Zara was never satisfied with her own performance because she always wondered if it was enough.


Well this is quite the powerful little start here. We're certainly jumping into a very real and very powerful situation here. I think you do a wonderful job of just getting us right to the point here. Let's see where we end up going from this moment.

Zara tried to change herself to fit in. She changed her dress style, her hair and her behaviour. She tried to be the person others wanted her to be, but it only made her more unhappy.

At school, she felt like an outsider. She did not get along well with her classmates and had only a few friends. She was often bullied and laughed at because of her exotic name and her otherness. All this began to gnaw at her and she became angry, very angry.

Zara felt increasingly disconnected from the world around her and one day it happened. She exploded. She shouted at her parents and said things she shouldn't have said. She pushed her friends away and locked herself in her room.


Oh that's a really nice to show how a person can end up being really quite badly affected over a period of time there. I think it does a great job of showcasing this little descent. It works surprisingly given how short this whole section is to showcase what would be an effect over a relatively long time.

She was now affected by her surroundings and had turned into a person she no longer recognised. She had always been afraid of becoming like this, but now it had happened.

Zara continued to shut herself off from the world and began to focus on her anger. It consumed her completely and she became darker and darker. She became addicted to the adrenaline of anger and became more and more isolated.

One day, she realised she could no longer go on like this. She had lost control of her life and it was time to accept who she was. Zara decided to seek help, but it was too late.

Her dark side had taken over and she was caught in her own anger.


Oh wow, this one really goes the full distance on that one. It seems Zara didn't simply feel the sadness and end up losing control of herself just the once but ended up being pushed all the way to a darker side there. Quite the powerful note there I think and that message is just loud and clear.

Zara's story shows how powerful the influence of the environment can be and how it can lead to anger and isolation. Her story is a warning that we must accept who we are and not let ourselves be influenced by the expectations of others. It is important to realise that anger and hatred are not a solution. Be kind to yourself and to others. Because in the end, we are all human, and we all have our own struggles to fight. Be who you are, and if people are telling you to be someone you aren't then just don't listen to them.

It is a sad story, but it is an important lesson.


Well this is a nice little message to end on. I think you succeeded in getting this across through the story and did it pretty well too there. It certainly is a good thing to keep in mind and these effects are in fact very real and powerful ones.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall a pretty powerful little tale this one. Short but it gets across something that certainly does seem to convey quite an import message there.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Kate




Rinisha says...


Hi Kate,

I'm happy you left me a review.
Thank you very much.

I'm glad you liked it!
I wrote this story, because I think people should take time and reconsider some of their actions in life.

- Rinisha



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Rinisha says...



Be who you are, and if people are telling you to be someone you aren't then just don't listen to them.

Do not change yourself because of what other people say.

Let this story be a lesson for you!

- Rinisha





"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny but in ourselves."
— William Shakespeare